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LV 4

amaturewriter

The stories as it says,,,MC is a muggle-born in hogwarts before cannon.. everything is 3 other than SD and CD and WB..why? writer has not researched properly and everything is rushed, chps are short and MC and the other characters are pretty bland, even their meeting is bland.. writer has made mistakes; 1- Starwars was written in 1976 and made into movie in 1977......it didnt exist in 1966..writer used comparison in chp 2 and its wrong....[yes this is nit picking..but proper mistakes are below] 2- Voldy...a smart ****, a selfish ****...do you think such a person would forget a book? especially one of his own notes?...illogical and wrong, plus this was tom, before he became voldy, more calculative and less nutty, so no would he leave his things...plus, wouldn't rooms get cleaned regularly, or atleast before and after someone lives in it?...it would've been long discovered. 3- This is probably the stupidest mistake....ando black trades a library book for a book from the black library with MC who she just met....I wont explain how stupid this is, cause I mean, any one with common sense or basic HP knowledge should understand why this is stupid right? 4- Moody and ando both went before or after MC, 5-Chps are short and CD is bare minimum, its bland overall idea seems nice but its written badly, like no research or ****...re-write, cause idea is nice, just thats all thats nice..no bash but pretty ****ty

LV 6

Phoenix1998

Really good chapter. And a really good story. Really liking the main character. And the world building is also great. Please author update more.