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Write a reviewYou need to organize your POV Either it is in third person or in first person. Also you need to fix your spellings to make more sense of what youβre trying to write βοΈ But overall the story is actually great
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The novel have terrible grammar but it have great plot .............................................................................................
The concept of the story is great and interesting. The downsides are wrongly used gender terms and at times master yoda like speach. The only downside to the story is the side stories that occur at in opportune moments and disrupt the flow and buildup of the story at crucial moments. I'm also not very interested in these side stories as they feel irrelevant. One such example is the pov from his companions about something that just happened. I'm simy not interested in reading things twice or reading about events in the far past that don't really apply to the situation at hand. Still the story is quite good when you get past the grammar and side stories. Good enough that I rate it as I do, regardless of the things I mentioned. Honestly speaking, if it didn't have the side stories and had perfect grammar, I would have been willing to rate it 5 stars. And I'm a bit of a hard ass for when it comes to ratings, rarely do I rate more than 3... So the story or atleast the concept is quite good, interesting and amusing for me to rate it 4 stars.
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I like the book so far with what I have read but I believe that the story should have an editor because it gets a little confusing when it should be she instead of she or when talking about an item as a she and not an it.
Interesting story with potential. But the writing quality is rather poor atm. The skills in the status often get different names. The writing quality really spoils a lot, but I get the feeling the author is working on it. Welp we will probably see how it will develop
Reveal SpoilerThe story is really good but thre grammer, first person, and third person dialogues are really terrible. Besides that the plot and story is really good.
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I liked the trainee god, I hope he comes back in the future, I've seen this story in Portuguese and in the past there was a spin-off where he appeared.
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Hello, I'm known as RenCmps and I'm the author of this work. I hope you are enjoying it, as I am the author himself and even with the errors I end up liking I will give my five stars, but do not feel the obligation to do the same, evaluate with love.
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5 stars just because the author is brazilian. πππππππππππππππππππ€£π€£ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
You need to organize your POV Either it is in third person or in first person. Also you need to fix your spellings to make more sense of what youβre trying to write βοΈ But overall the story is actually great
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The better....................................................................................................................................
The novel have terrible grammar but it have great plot .............................................................................................
The concept of the story is great and interesting. The downsides are wrongly used gender terms and at times master yoda like speach. The only downside to the story is the side stories that occur at in opportune moments and disrupt the flow and buildup of the story at crucial moments. I'm also not very interested in these side stories as they feel irrelevant. One such example is the pov from his companions about something that just happened. I'm simy not interested in reading things twice or reading about events in the far past that don't really apply to the situation at hand. Still the story is quite good when you get past the grammar and side stories. Good enough that I rate it as I do, regardless of the things I mentioned. Honestly speaking, if it didn't have the side stories and had perfect grammar, I would have been willing to rate it 5 stars. And I'm a bit of a hard ass for when it comes to ratings, rarely do I rate more than 3... So the story or atleast the concept is quite good, interesting and amusing for me to rate it 4 stars.
Make some exercice for your grammar please itβs awfullπ±π±π±π± And thatβs sad because the story look really great but i canβt take pleasure with your writting skill Her His She He you??? Learn how to use them
I like the book so far with what I have read but I believe that the story should have an editor because it gets a little confusing when it should be she instead of she or when talking about an item as a she and not an it.
Interesting story with potential. But the writing quality is rather poor atm. The skills in the status often get different names. The writing quality really spoils a lot, but I get the feeling the author is working on it. Welp we will probably see how it will develop
Reveal SpoilerThe story is really good but thre grammer, first person, and third person dialogues are really terrible. Besides that the plot and story is really good.
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I liked the trainee god, I hope he comes back in the future, I've seen this story in Portuguese and in the past there was a spin-off where he appeared.
As far as I read the story is very goodπ₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯
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Hello, I'm known as RenCmps and I'm the author of this work. I hope you are enjoying it, as I am the author himself and even with the errors I end up liking I will give my five stars, but do not feel the obligation to do the same, evaluate with love.
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5 stars just because the author is brazilian. πππππππππππππππππππ€£π€£ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
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