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Great Story 👍👍👍👍 I hope this will become a harem [img=update] [img=update] [img=update] [img=update] [img=update] [img=update] [img=update] [img=update] [img=update] [img=update]
The story is incredible due to the low standards of the webnovel, I see that you take the story you write seriously and I believe you deserve respect for it. Many here on the webnovel don't care about holes in the plot and it's great to see something well structured for a change. If there is something I don't like about his story, it is the premise that the protagonist will have to put up with irrational women, I have read many stories with the same problem and I have always regretted reading them. if I don't like the protagonist's reaction to these irrational women, I'll leave this story without a second thought. And have you read any stories with rational women? They are much more interesting ... Just a tip. And no, I'm not talking about these harem women you see in the stories of the webnovel, they are there simply to submit to the protagonist -_- From what I see of the protagonist's bride, I think she is a romantic girl slightly obsessed with tales of heroism , it seems to me that she wants to be the knight in armor and the white horse and show herself to be gallant with her fiance, It is still possible to make her interesting, she does not deserve to be a typical irrational girl like those of Japanese novels ... Oh, and I recommend stopping immediately with these stupid phrases about not being able to understand what goes on in a woman’s head and all the stereotypes that come with it, it’s never been cool, it never will be and it’s so reused that it disgusts, The moment I read it, I had a strong need to leave the story there, but I decided to continue paying more attention to the positive points of the story. You write as you see fit, don't change your story just because of a random comment from a reader. I haven't written for an author in a long time, but I believe your story deserves some tips from this tired reader. I'll be watching The note is 5 simply because there is no way to edit the note later, the story is in chapter 2 so clearly it does not deserve to be classified, however, taking into account that it is superior to those in the top 10 I do not see why I worry about giving another note if not a 5
Haven't read it yet but 5 stars for a rabbit... ..................................................................... .....................................................................
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The story is incredible due to the low standards of the webnovel, I see that you take the story you write seriously and I believe you deserve respect for it. Many here on the webnovel don't care about holes in the plot and it's great to see something well structured for a change. If there is something I don't like about his story, it is the premise that the protagonist will have to put up with irrational women, I have read many stories with the same problem and I have always regretted reading them. if I don't like the protagonist's reaction to these irrational women, I'll leave this story without a second thought. And have you read any stories with rational women? They are much more interesting ... Just a tip. And no, I'm not talking about these harem women you see in the stories of the webnovel, they are there simply to submit to the protagonist -_- From what I see of the protagonist's bride, I think she is a romantic girl slightly obsessed with tales of heroism , it seems to me that she wants to be the knight in armor and the white horse and show herself to be gallant with her fiance, It is still possible to make her interesting, she does not deserve to be a typical irrational girl like those of Japanese novels ... Oh, and I recommend stopping immediately with these stupid phrases about not being able to understand what goes on in a woman’s head and all the stereotypes that come with it, it’s never been cool, it never will be and it’s so reused that it disgusts, The moment I read it, I had a strong need to leave the story there, but I decided to continue paying more attention to the positive points of the story. You write as you see fit, don't change your story just because of a random comment from a reader. I haven't written for an author in a long time, but I believe your story deserves some tips from this tired reader. I'll be watching The note is 5 simply because there is no way to edit the note later, the story is in chapter 2 so clearly it does not deserve to be classified, however, taking into account that it is superior to those in the top 10 I do not see why I worry about giving another note if not a 5
Haven't read it yet but 5 stars for a rabbit... ..................................................................... .....................................................................
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