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Reincarnated in Another World With the Ability to Create a Modern Country
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Dariel a senior high school student who died because of a traffic accident. He is reincarnated in another world with the ability to create a modern country. How will he use this overpowered ability in another world? What kind of adventure awaits him? What kind of people he will meet? But one thing is for sure he will surely use these powers to destroy his enemies.
I have already posted the chapters on wattpad.
( There might be some grammar and spelling errors as this is my first time writing.)
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I think the author has a story with quite some potential yet there are some aspects that I personally have a problem with. The story itself is somewhat generic in aspect of it being a transmigration& op system story. Personally I don’t mind so because for me such stories simply work as enjoyment. Yet extensive rewriting in some parts will help to improve the story arcs and enjoyability. 1) The MC is to this point (~ 60) very 1 dimensional. As character you could replace him and as reader i would not care, because I do not care for the mc. It tells a lot if side characters start to be more interesting than the MC itself. This isn’t necessarily a problem but it needs a better balance. 2) The MC comes with some strange OP power but especially in the beginning the story lacks logical contingency based on the description of his power. For example he is able to spawn things into the world including population. While doing so at no point is explained how this enables it his population to be fed or requiring recourses that are needed to sustain the population and its projects. 3) In my opinion especially the beginning is rushed and needs more struggle. This would also give the possibility to flesh out the MC. 4) The beginning needs more explanation to why the Mc would acquire his power and to what purpose. If that is not explained it could at least be discovered in due time or due to the interaction with the system. 5) For the foreseeable future development in the story I suspect that it will be increasingly difficult to write an engaging plot for the readers due to the op-ness of the systems power to this point and the lack of setback thereby. It will reduce the story to face slapping kind of tropes. The lack in character of the protagonists will therefore be a disadvantage. I suggest the author to have a look at the novel Out of space - which is to some degree quite similar to the authors setting. Many aspects of his story can be found in this other story as well. For example the focus on side characters. Tech vs Magic and so on. That said one striking difference is that in his own story the MC should not have such a minor role considering him being the character with the system. Most other problems stems from lack of proficiency in English. That said the author becomes noticeably better with time. 1) Grammar, Spelling mistakes 2) Lack in variety of wording and expressions. Dear author pls don’t get discouraged by my critique but use it as pointers to improve yourself, because despite all this I still enjoyed your story so far.
As I am writing this review, I have only read two chapters. Here is what I can say about it's Quality. Character Design: 1. Frankly speaking, the Main Character seems like the typical MC of a Japanese Isekai novel. He accepts and adapts to the sudden displacement, from being on Earth to another Planet. Furthermore, he seems way too calm as a person who died. Writing Quality: 1. The sudden changes of POV in a paragraph. In Chapter 3, when the MC was eating fried chicken, the Author used "I" which is inappropriate in showing and telling a scene from a third person's point of view. IF the Author has the spare time, he could have just separated the MC's thoughts into a different paragraph altogether. 2. Lack of proper periods in sentences. 3. Lack of proper letter casing. That's all what I can say for now. However, despite my criticism's this story has potential. If the Author can find a Beta-Reader or a Editor to scan through his chapters before publishing, the Quality of the story would be better.
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so a few things first off writing quality id consider it passable it more than readable, there is some sentence structure and typos here and there, but for me its not really enough to disrupt my reading experience, ive read much worse. updates are good and quite fast story development o boi, first off a thing i never understood about these modern knowledge to fantasy world, is why they even bother with making relations especially so early on, like whats the point? anyway, calling the story kingdom building is a bit of a stretch, its military and politics than building infrastructure and keeping citizens happy, i also kinda lost it when i saw that stats for the country 50% citizens 50% military, id say that much more than 10% and the economy would collapse on itself characters are bland, and the main characters feels like a side character, but even then he feels a bit too much like a Japanese isekai wuss however the world is far more detailed than i would expect which impressed me a fair bit, id still like more detail but maybe thats just me¨ dropped due to lack of main character involvement in anything, and general idiocy of the main character
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There is not many novel like this that i care to write a review, even my favorite book i never write review for it. My only hope is that the author don't drop this. Although there is some grammar and spelling error it's still acceptable. There are not many novel with this kind of genre. If there is, it doesn't meet my requirements. So for the author keep up the good work and don't listen to any of the people that are degrading your hard work. I was hoping for some romance in the novel or maybe a harem of different races hahahhaa but its up to you author. Godspeed, God bless and keep up the hard work. P/S :: MASS RELEASE IF YOU CAN..
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Hi this is Daoist588788, this is my first time writing so some of the chapters might have some errors. But I always update the chapters to correct those errors. Also Thank You For Your Support On My Content.
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Guys, I have been glad to see that you have enjoyed this story which makes me happy, that there are readers who are actually enjoying something a created as a starting writer, I am very thankful to all of you guys.