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As a fan of the world of Vampire: The Masquerade - Bloodlines and as someone who's gone through multiple runs with most of the clans, it's nice to see someone write their take on it. Would have never thought to make a fan-fic of it. I see you've chosen to make your character a part of the Tremere clan, and have no doubt in my mind that she'll become a fearsome blood mage over the course of the story. A word of caution would be not to make her too powerful (because we all know how broken Tremere abilities can get) and have her rely on the world around her instead, or else you'll have a killing machine on your hands. But that's up to you. You've got the pacing down so no chapter feels boring or unneeded, and you've done a good job of pacing yourself in handing out the lore of the world, making sure not to turn it into a tome (haha) instead of a story about Leona. No major issues with your writing style either, which is a relief on the eyes, too. All around superb work compared to most novels out there, so keep your chin up and keep at it, from one author to another!
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that was a great book based on a great videogame. it has some more dark parts. you can put yourself into the characters. I'm sorry for my bad English .
La verdad que me impresiona el desarrollo y la prufundidad de los personajes que en el juego le falto bastante, se centraron mas en el lore que en la historia y los motivos de las acciones de cada uno. Hasta ahora la historia me esta gustando mucho, espero que el/la autor/a pueda seguir ampliando y sorprendiendonos con esta novela que tiene mucho potencial. Super recomendada!
This is quiet interesting.I'ts like unveiling the underworld of vampires.The author did it in a very detailed way to describe everything as 'bloody' as it could be. There were some few typos like 'a' when it's needed to be 'an' instead, but it's minimal. Keep it up!
The writing quality is extremely good, especially your flow and descriptions. It's like I'm reading a book on amazon. However, I have to mention on your first chapter. Compared to your other chapters where it is easy to delve into, most of it was a little boring. Only at where the homeless guy appears, I felt like I was actually in the story. It's not bad since the surprise is there, but perhaps you can improve on it somehow? I can see that the characters have some personality. They're not 2d. However, jit might be better to add some introduction. For example, Alice in chapter 2. They talk about Dr. Sexy and you can see her personality come through, but it'd be nice for the flow and just to ease the readers in for a quick intro. You can simply say "Alice was Leona's long-time friend from high school something something ". The only info I got was from chapter 1 that she was a genuine friend. Anyways, I have to commend your writing (especially when in action.) Though this novel is personally not for me, your writing skills are really good. Your pacing is quite nice as well. You also made it easy for people who haven't played the game to understand. :D
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Okay so I am not really a good reviewer as I am just used to posting my thoughts into comments as they come to me. And here is little something about me before I start my review. I have finished bloodlines countless times before and I am also ST(story teller) of table top Vampire the Masquerade games. I have been hosting VtM for about 3 years now. I wouldn't call myself an expert on the lore but there is not much that I don't know either. Now here is the review. When I was reading the first part of the book, the part before the MC makes her way to LA, I felt like there wasn't enough development of her character. You tried to make us connect with her showing us her human side but for some reason I felt that it was kind of half-baked. I saw that the character had her motivation, goals and friends but I didn't feel that she had her own unique personality. In my mind in the interactions between her and Garrett the two kept overlapping with one another constantly. Their manners of speeches were too similar and when they are the only 2 ones speaking it feels like a Malkavian having a conversation with herself. To sum up either you should have let us spend more time with the MC as a human in order to better flesh out her personality or you should have just straight started from the murder if you wanted to start the main story more quickly. At the second part of the novel, the part after MC makes her way to L.A, everything is such a mishmash. We meet with all these people in this short amount of time. There are sabbath attacks, the name of the clans, new terms like ghouls, the six rules etc. There were too much exposition in too little of a time and the events are moving too fast. I know that this is a fanfic of Bloodlines so you are trying to stay true to source material as much as you could but screw that. Just drag things on, explain them to us clearly one by one as if we were idiots. Like when LaCroix is mentioning the 6 rules, tell us what they are don't just put them in an auxlary chapter. Or when Jake says **** Lasombras instead of saying aren't they another sabbath clan, try to explain the background of the clan like Lasombras? Aren't they the clan of evil vampires shrouded in darkness, only loyal to themselves and the cause that is sabbath etc. Also your character doesn't even need to voice these words he can just think about it. To sum up instead of rushing things drag things out and explain to us clearly. Also don't try to follow the events of the book too closely, instead make them more interesting and put your twist on it like instead of making 9 and Jake saving the MC from the sabbath let MC fight a battle on her own, make them escape or even make a whole arc about how the MC survived the night of her embrace when the city was under attack all on her own.
I played VtM... well, a few decades ago if I am honest. So I am familair with the setting without being an up-to-date fan. This story starts perhaps overly conventionally. The vampire and shrink thing is very well done yet. It quickly becomes a story of Leona being thrust into the vampire world and having to survive and figure out what it going on. Plenty of action, but there is something about Leona that doesn't grab me. She seems to adapt very quickly as if she didn't find out about the entire vampire culture only a few days ago. So yes she is told things but seems to get the whole underlying 'magic is real' and 'how vampire clans work' thing just instantly. On one hand, I am curious why wise olf Garret did something that shouldn't have worked--was he behind everything or just dumb? On the other hand, there's a lot of characters and POVs and I would rather just see what Leona knows as she learns it rather than keep track of all this. The writing has some pervasive grammar issues but they are fairly minor,
Yaay! Vampire story.. For some reason, I have this craziness over vampires. Your story is easy to read and its progressing really good. Trust me, It's way better than Twilight series.😂 I didn't find anything wrong with your grammar , even if there was any it won't be noticed. Your writing quality is really good, I hope I can be as good as you are.
The story gradually gets so much better, I love how you include scenes of emotions so easily The writing quality needs to be a bit better, some missing words here and there. Story wise, the plot is very good. The way that the author as portrayed the characters and the moments... Is fantastic!
When reviewing, I always give each category one extra star to the score. First of all, I’d like to say that I haven’t played the tabletop RPG, but I did play and loved VTMB and I’m very excited for the sequel. So I came into the story very excited and I was not left disappointed. I mean, except for there not being more chapters for me to read. Writing Quality 5: At first glance, I gave this category a solid five stars. The prose is excellent, and it flows so well that it feels like a professional novel. But then I started to notice some mistakes, such as mixing past and present tenses on the same sentence, words capitalized for no reason or even missing entirely. It wasn’t enough to make the story difficult to understand but it was enough to somewhat take me out of the story. Like a smudge on a beautiful painting. But, once again, taking into account how well sone the prose is I decided to maintain the five stars. Stability of Updates 5: Personally, I don't like this category, as sometimes the writer needs more time to finish up a chapter, but may end up sacrificing the quality to keep the release rate, so I always give it a 5. Story Development 4: The story is well done, although it does feel rushed at some points, like in how quickly Leona decides to abandon her old life and getting turned into a vampire. After this, the story flows like at the start of the game with the judgment, the sire being executed and the childe (MC), being spared due to Nines’ intervention. Beyond that, I’d say it’s a bit hard to give a good judgment due to it still being in the initial parts. Character Design 5: Characters are well thought out and with personality. LaCroix seems like less of an asshole in here than in the game. The Sheriff seems to have been removed and in his place, there’s the new Veronica character who is either related or even married to LaCroix. World Background 4: I first considered giving three stars to this category, but considering that it’s a fan-fic, most readers should already be familiarized with it. Review score (5+5+4+5+4)/5 = 4.6 Score given = (5+5+5+5+5)/5 = 5
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"Next Saturday I'll introduce you to the other players," said the GM. This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter eight. First off I need to state that I'm more than merely familiar with WoD 1.0. That would be World of Darkness version one for those of you who didn't spend dark evenings enacting fantactic creatures in a dark mirror of our own world during the nineties. As in this RPG was very popular among role playing geeks some twenty five years ago. Dice and a table, plus character sheets were the components needed, and the GM, the Game Master, usually went thrugh a background solo player scenario with each player before grouping them together. These eight first chapters are very much such a solo scenario but presented as a story. Hence it should be clear we've not even started the story. The main character has been thoroughly introduced to the world, and no, I didn't get that wrong. Of course the reader has as well, but in this case it really is a case of introducing the female lead to the world. That's also about it. One character and a horde of secondary characters including the roles they play. It should be noted that for anyone familiar with the WoD the first eight chapters mostly serve as one long info dump with some action and drama interspersed. For other readers the sheer amount of information will be bewildering. My main problem with the start is that they're doing a bloody ****ty job of keeping up the masquerade. This is also the main weakness with the story telling here. We're served huge chunks of information barely hidden as dialogue or in the worst case plain info dumping. And it's not nearly enough if you're not already familiar with the setting. Our main character is thoroughly presented to us, and she'll serve as a reader proxy for at least another dozen of chapters. Apart from the hamhanded exposition she does that job pretty well. Now for the stars. Writing: Five stars, including the one star handicap I apply to this site. It's clear that the author isn't native to English, and the writing is a lot better than the English used. A fair vocabulary helps hiding some of the more glaring errors. Sloppy PoV-handling and some misuse of tenses detract from the overall experience. Updates: Five stars. Only eight chapters. I'm just going to hand out the full five stars. Story: Four stars. There's a lot of action and info dumping, but there honestly isn't much in the way of story yet. It doesn't have to be. This is fan fiction of sorts, and this early it's more important to flesh out characters and setting than getting any major plot running. Character: Five stars. We're introduced to three of them, out of which one is the main character. They're fairly well fleshed out. I'm wavering between four and five stars here, but I'll apply the benefit of doubt in this case. Oh, there are dozens of spear carriers introduced as well, but they really are secondary this early. World: Five stars. This is for me. I'm familiar with the world. Observe that this is a three star world for readers totally new to the setting. The reason it reads like a game is because it is indeed a game. It honestly is supposed to be this clunky. The high drama is very much a part of the WoD. Lastly: I recommend any reader to at least familiarise themselves with the World of Darkness (version one) before diving too deep into this one. You'll need at least a fleeting knowledge of the intricate political machinations as well as some game mechanics to fully enjoy this story.
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The auxiliary chapter in the front was a good choice. It really drew me in right from the start. The pacing of the story is not forced at all, and the plot is moving forward at a steady pace. The author describes the scenes and interactions with vividness that makes it a joy to read. It is not overly descriptive to the point where it sometimes gets in the way of the reading. With a few grammar mistakes that are able to overlook, this (as of chapter 7) is a book that I'm excited to read more of. There is some amazing world building and story development going on and I can't wait for more. I also quite like the main character, Leona, so far. Keep up the good work, author! :)
The writting is beautiful even though there are a lot of mistakes ... well according to me and English is my 3rd language so not really confident in many of the things I see wrong. I think she's is supposed to be used for she is and not was but maybe I am wrong. Anyway the dialogues and the interraction beween the 2 main characters so far make it flow like a river. Seriously I can only rate it with 5 stars since World building is unnecessary and grammar mistakes although plenty are not nowhere near enough to make me want to stop or having trouble understanding the meaning. Mostly just problems with tense selection and a, an, the ... Anyway, all fives for me. I am actually glad there are only 3 chapters so far or I would continue reading.
Interesting classic style and fan fiction. It is rather an oxymoron. But the main thing is the text itself, the eternal question and dilemma, what is more important, what comes first - the form of the text or its content. The ability to give text, know styles and genres, be able to create two or three-axis composition. Comply with the literary language, write smoothly, without text roughness. The content may be so-so or, on the contrary, brilliant. But this is offtopic. The world is not calm now, fake news, hybrid warfare, hauling of the ropes of the polar poles of forces, opposition of ideas and empires, infecting hydra of neo-imperialism, neocolonialism. Different approaches, different formats, two dimensional standards to the same problems but for different countries. The brilliant Russian scholar Vernadsky hoped that the 21st century would be the century of the "Noosphere" ... BUT ... alas ... the 21st century is far from the era of Renaissance ... Judging by the synoptic and the first three chapters, this short story covers the current topic of the modern world. From the first lines. felt "classic style", literary processing, knowledge of the composition of the construction of the text: Prologue, Exposure, Outline of Action, Main Action, Climax, Decoupling, Epilogue, Lyrical Digression ... This is evident in the text !!!! This is not similar to the usual text of the novels, your work, similar to the old fiction of the 20th century! Easy to read, interesting plot. Probably read will be even more interesting, worth the story, those who really loves high classical fiction. Successes to the author in his difficult work. Strength and fortitude, to be able to write a novel so that its end is not merged, as is often the case in modern novels. Classical literature - knows when to stop, so that the end is interesting, making you think and not regret that you spent so much time on this story to read the merged end. Thank you for the pleasure delivered in reading such an exquisite text, I have not read this for a long time. Respectfully,
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A dark vampire story written in a professional style. Comparable to published worked of the paperback age. Excellent paragraph sizing. Plot pacing is good, but I am sure there is more left of this story to tell.
As a fan of the world of Vampire: The Masquerade - Bloodlines and as someone who's gone through multiple runs with most of the clans, it's nice to see someone write their take on it. Would have never thought to make a fan-fic of it. I see you've chosen to make your character a part of the Tremere clan, and have no doubt in my mind that she'll become a fearsome blood mage over the course of the story. A word of caution would be not to make her too powerful (because we all know how broken Tremere abilities can get) and have her rely on the world around her instead, or else you'll have a killing machine on your hands. But that's up to you. You've got the pacing down so no chapter feels boring or unneeded, and you've done a good job of pacing yourself in handing out the lore of the world, making sure not to turn it into a tome (haha) instead of a story about Leona. No major issues with your writing style either, which is a relief on the eyes, too. All around superb work compared to most novels out there, so keep your chin up and keep at it, from one author to another!
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
that was a great book based on a great videogame. it has some more dark parts. you can put yourself into the characters. I'm sorry for my bad English .
La verdad que me impresiona el desarrollo y la prufundidad de los personajes que en el juego le falto bastante, se centraron mas en el lore que en la historia y los motivos de las acciones de cada uno. Hasta ahora la historia me esta gustando mucho, espero que el/la autor/a pueda seguir ampliando y sorprendiendonos con esta novela que tiene mucho potencial. Super recomendada!
This is quiet interesting.I'ts like unveiling the underworld of vampires.The author did it in a very detailed way to describe everything as 'bloody' as it could be. There were some few typos like 'a' when it's needed to be 'an' instead, but it's minimal. Keep it up!
The writing quality is extremely good, especially your flow and descriptions. It's like I'm reading a book on amazon. However, I have to mention on your first chapter. Compared to your other chapters where it is easy to delve into, most of it was a little boring. Only at where the homeless guy appears, I felt like I was actually in the story. It's not bad since the surprise is there, but perhaps you can improve on it somehow? I can see that the characters have some personality. They're not 2d. However, jit might be better to add some introduction. For example, Alice in chapter 2. They talk about Dr. Sexy and you can see her personality come through, but it'd be nice for the flow and just to ease the readers in for a quick intro. You can simply say "Alice was Leona's long-time friend from high school something something ". The only info I got was from chapter 1 that she was a genuine friend. Anyways, I have to commend your writing (especially when in action.) Though this novel is personally not for me, your writing skills are really good. Your pacing is quite nice as well. You also made it easy for people who haven't played the game to understand. :D
Reveal Spoiler Okay so I am not really a good reviewer as I am just used to posting my thoughts into comments as they come to me. And here is little something about me before I start my review. I have finished bloodlines countless times before and I am also ST(story teller) of table top Vampire the Masquerade games. I have been hosting VtM for about 3 years now. I wouldn't call myself an expert on the lore but there is not much that I don't know either. Now here is the review. When I was reading the first part of the book, the part before the MC makes her way to LA, I felt like there wasn't enough development of her character. You tried to make us connect with her showing us her human side but for some reason I felt that it was kind of half-baked. I saw that the character had her motivation, goals and friends but I didn't feel that she had her own unique personality. In my mind in the interactions between her and Garrett the two kept overlapping with one another constantly. Their manners of speeches were too similar and when they are the only 2 ones speaking it feels like a Malkavian having a conversation with herself. To sum up either you should have let us spend more time with the MC as a human in order to better flesh out her personality or you should have just straight started from the murder if you wanted to start the main story more quickly. At the second part of the novel, the part after MC makes her way to L.A, everything is such a mishmash. We meet with all these people in this short amount of time. There are sabbath attacks, the name of the clans, new terms like ghouls, the six rules etc. There were too much exposition in too little of a time and the events are moving too fast. I know that this is a fanfic of Bloodlines so you are trying to stay true to source material as much as you could but screw that. Just drag things on, explain them to us clearly one by one as if we were idiots. Like when LaCroix is mentioning the 6 rules, tell us what they are don't just put them in an auxlary chapter. Or when Jake says **** Lasombras instead of saying aren't they another sabbath clan, try to explain the background of the clan like Lasombras? Aren't they the clan of evil vampires shrouded in darkness, only loyal to themselves and the cause that is sabbath etc. Also your character doesn't even need to voice these words he can just think about it. To sum up instead of rushing things drag things out and explain to us clearly. Also don't try to follow the events of the book too closely, instead make them more interesting and put your twist on it like instead of making 9 and Jake saving the MC from the sabbath let MC fight a battle on her own, make them escape or even make a whole arc about how the MC survived the night of her embrace when the city was under attack all on her own.
I played VtM... well, a few decades ago if I am honest. So I am familair with the setting without being an up-to-date fan. This story starts perhaps overly conventionally. The vampire and shrink thing is very well done yet. It quickly becomes a story of Leona being thrust into the vampire world and having to survive and figure out what it going on. Plenty of action, but there is something about Leona that doesn't grab me. She seems to adapt very quickly as if she didn't find out about the entire vampire culture only a few days ago. So yes she is told things but seems to get the whole underlying 'magic is real' and 'how vampire clans work' thing just instantly. On one hand, I am curious why wise olf Garret did something that shouldn't have worked--was he behind everything or just dumb? On the other hand, there's a lot of characters and POVs and I would rather just see what Leona knows as she learns it rather than keep track of all this. The writing has some pervasive grammar issues but they are fairly minor,
Yaay! Vampire story.. For some reason, I have this craziness over vampires. Your story is easy to read and its progressing really good. Trust me, It's way better than Twilight series.😂 I didn't find anything wrong with your grammar , even if there was any it won't be noticed. Your writing quality is really good, I hope I can be as good as you are.
The story gradually gets so much better, I love how you include scenes of emotions so easily The writing quality needs to be a bit better, some missing words here and there. Story wise, the plot is very good. The way that the author as portrayed the characters and the moments... Is fantastic!
When reviewing, I always give each category one extra star to the score. First of all, I’d like to say that I haven’t played the tabletop RPG, but I did play and loved VTMB and I’m very excited for the sequel. So I came into the story very excited and I was not left disappointed. I mean, except for there not being more chapters for me to read. Writing Quality 5: At first glance, I gave this category a solid five stars. The prose is excellent, and it flows so well that it feels like a professional novel. But then I started to notice some mistakes, such as mixing past and present tenses on the same sentence, words capitalized for no reason or even missing entirely. It wasn’t enough to make the story difficult to understand but it was enough to somewhat take me out of the story. Like a smudge on a beautiful painting. But, once again, taking into account how well sone the prose is I decided to maintain the five stars. Stability of Updates 5: Personally, I don't like this category, as sometimes the writer needs more time to finish up a chapter, but may end up sacrificing the quality to keep the release rate, so I always give it a 5. Story Development 4: The story is well done, although it does feel rushed at some points, like in how quickly Leona decides to abandon her old life and getting turned into a vampire. After this, the story flows like at the start of the game with the judgment, the sire being executed and the childe (MC), being spared due to Nines’ intervention. Beyond that, I’d say it’s a bit hard to give a good judgment due to it still being in the initial parts. Character Design 5: Characters are well thought out and with personality. LaCroix seems like less of an asshole in here than in the game. The Sheriff seems to have been removed and in his place, there’s the new Veronica character who is either related or even married to LaCroix. World Background 4: I first considered giving three stars to this category, but considering that it’s a fan-fic, most readers should already be familiarized with it. Review score (5+5+4+5+4)/5 = 4.6 Score given = (5+5+5+5+5)/5 = 5
Reveal Spoiler "Next Saturday I'll introduce you to the other players," said the GM. This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter eight. First off I need to state that I'm more than merely familiar with WoD 1.0. That would be World of Darkness version one for those of you who didn't spend dark evenings enacting fantactic creatures in a dark mirror of our own world during the nineties. As in this RPG was very popular among role playing geeks some twenty five years ago. Dice and a table, plus character sheets were the components needed, and the GM, the Game Master, usually went thrugh a background solo player scenario with each player before grouping them together. These eight first chapters are very much such a solo scenario but presented as a story. Hence it should be clear we've not even started the story. The main character has been thoroughly introduced to the world, and no, I didn't get that wrong. Of course the reader has as well, but in this case it really is a case of introducing the female lead to the world. That's also about it. One character and a horde of secondary characters including the roles they play. It should be noted that for anyone familiar with the WoD the first eight chapters mostly serve as one long info dump with some action and drama interspersed. For other readers the sheer amount of information will be bewildering. My main problem with the start is that they're doing a bloody ****ty job of keeping up the masquerade. This is also the main weakness with the story telling here. We're served huge chunks of information barely hidden as dialogue or in the worst case plain info dumping. And it's not nearly enough if you're not already familiar with the setting. Our main character is thoroughly presented to us, and she'll serve as a reader proxy for at least another dozen of chapters. Apart from the hamhanded exposition she does that job pretty well. Now for the stars. Writing: Five stars, including the one star handicap I apply to this site. It's clear that the author isn't native to English, and the writing is a lot better than the English used. A fair vocabulary helps hiding some of the more glaring errors. Sloppy PoV-handling and some misuse of tenses detract from the overall experience. Updates: Five stars. Only eight chapters. I'm just going to hand out the full five stars. Story: Four stars. There's a lot of action and info dumping, but there honestly isn't much in the way of story yet. It doesn't have to be. This is fan fiction of sorts, and this early it's more important to flesh out characters and setting than getting any major plot running. Character: Five stars. We're introduced to three of them, out of which one is the main character. They're fairly well fleshed out. I'm wavering between four and five stars here, but I'll apply the benefit of doubt in this case. Oh, there are dozens of spear carriers introduced as well, but they really are secondary this early. World: Five stars. This is for me. I'm familiar with the world. Observe that this is a three star world for readers totally new to the setting. The reason it reads like a game is because it is indeed a game. It honestly is supposed to be this clunky. The high drama is very much a part of the WoD. Lastly: I recommend any reader to at least familiarise themselves with the World of Darkness (version one) before diving too deep into this one. You'll need at least a fleeting knowledge of the intricate political machinations as well as some game mechanics to fully enjoy this story.
Reveal Spoiler The auxiliary chapter in the front was a good choice. It really drew me in right from the start. The pacing of the story is not forced at all, and the plot is moving forward at a steady pace. The author describes the scenes and interactions with vividness that makes it a joy to read. It is not overly descriptive to the point where it sometimes gets in the way of the reading. With a few grammar mistakes that are able to overlook, this (as of chapter 7) is a book that I'm excited to read more of. There is some amazing world building and story development going on and I can't wait for more. I also quite like the main character, Leona, so far. Keep up the good work, author! :)
The writting is beautiful even though there are a lot of mistakes ... well according to me and English is my 3rd language so not really confident in many of the things I see wrong. I think she's is supposed to be used for she is and not was but maybe I am wrong. Anyway the dialogues and the interraction beween the 2 main characters so far make it flow like a river. Seriously I can only rate it with 5 stars since World building is unnecessary and grammar mistakes although plenty are not nowhere near enough to make me want to stop or having trouble understanding the meaning. Mostly just problems with tense selection and a, an, the ... Anyway, all fives for me. I am actually glad there are only 3 chapters so far or I would continue reading.
Interesting classic style and fan fiction. It is rather an oxymoron. But the main thing is the text itself, the eternal question and dilemma, what is more important, what comes first - the form of the text or its content. The ability to give text, know styles and genres, be able to create two or three-axis composition. Comply with the literary language, write smoothly, without text roughness. The content may be so-so or, on the contrary, brilliant. But this is offtopic. The world is not calm now, fake news, hybrid warfare, hauling of the ropes of the polar poles of forces, opposition of ideas and empires, infecting hydra of neo-imperialism, neocolonialism. Different approaches, different formats, two dimensional standards to the same problems but for different countries. The brilliant Russian scholar Vernadsky hoped that the 21st century would be the century of the "Noosphere" ... BUT ... alas ... the 21st century is far from the era of Renaissance ... Judging by the synoptic and the first three chapters, this short story covers the current topic of the modern world. From the first lines. felt "classic style", literary processing, knowledge of the composition of the construction of the text: Prologue, Exposure, Outline of Action, Main Action, Climax, Decoupling, Epilogue, Lyrical Digression ... This is evident in the text !!!! This is not similar to the usual text of the novels, your work, similar to the old fiction of the 20th century! Easy to read, interesting plot. Probably read will be even more interesting, worth the story, those who really loves high classical fiction. Successes to the author in his difficult work. Strength and fortitude, to be able to write a novel so that its end is not merged, as is often the case in modern novels. Classical literature - knows when to stop, so that the end is interesting, making you think and not regret that you spent so much time on this story to read the merged end. Thank you for the pleasure delivered in reading such an exquisite text, I have not read this for a long time. Respectfully,
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A dark vampire story written in a professional style. Comparable to published worked of the paperback age. Excellent paragraph sizing. Plot pacing is good, but I am sure there is more left of this story to tell.