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Interestingly, the birth of a son ... and not a daughter ... a tragedy ... a saga ... something in the Scandinavian way? So the Celts? No Scots? Northern Europe? Yes, I read the Irlan, Swedish, Danish sagas ... they were scary, intriguing ... and very ancient ... ... curious, will see ... what the reader expects in this story? !!! The main character takes a low background ... and that means? ... dibo is his temper of character ... or he is ambitious and just knows how to hide it well! Apparently the bummer is waiting for the third prince ... is something starting up big? Father despot, tyrant, has its own views on the arrangement of his son? "introspective" - no need to use such terms in novels ... easier to write, easier ... without terms, from psychology ... at that time probably never heard of it ... you need to write, taking into account that era. Get used to the role, get used to the image of that time, ancient. Heroes must speak the old, eat the food of the time, not modern. This is a mistake from the authors. Ohhh ... how it looks like the European sagas ... give the first creature you saw ... your son, daughter, after 10 years to our cult, sect ... and there ... magic ... and ... relationships the apprentice is the master. Something that reminds me a lot of Ernst Theodore Wilhelm Hofmann ... But fascinating and intriguing !!!!!!!!!!!!!! Sleep ... they can be controlled, Carlos Castaneda wrote about it))) Thank you, but apparently the most interesting will be next. history will be torn. Good luck to the author!
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The intro was good, but the odd way that it was written proved to be a problem for me. The storyline is starting to come through, but there are a quite a bit of time skips. All in all, an interesting read.
You skipped a lot, but the story has potential. You have a unique style of writting. While I'm fine reading it, many people may have difficulty. I'd say add more depth, and some world building to it. You skipped his childhood. So the reader doesn't know how his character developed. I'm not saying you should write 20 ch. On his childhood, but mention some stuff and give your mc more depth. Whether you choose to go with that necromancy stuff, is up to you. I think the story could work with and without it. Quality is alright, a few mistakes here and there. Nothing major. Updates... Hard to say 😃 Just take your time, develop it properly, and you have gold.
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A so surprisingly well-written novel that I don't really have much to say (considering usually how wordy I am in reviews, if the author has checked my reviews for others), because I don't really have any advice to give. You don't give advice to professional, really :D The writing style is also unique--authentic, old-world English style(at least to my foreign eyes), beautifully matches the story background and the plots are progressing just in the right pace so far. Maybe a little bit difficult to read, and I saw some said you are skipping a lot, but to me I think it's more of a matter of personal taste, instead of a disadvantage or a problem needs to be fixed. But at the same time I have to pity that this work, if the writer intends to publish it to win a contract, is a much better fit for paper media instead of internet. As a web novel writer with 6 years of experience in China, I'm fairly aware that on this kind of platform it's very hard to find a proper audience and gain the appreciation of editors it deserves for a work like this, because its fast-paced, leisure-focused, commercial nature. Nevertheless it's still great work, one of the few books here I'd genuinely like to read after finishing my own novel simply because it's so good. Considering how picky I am, it's the highest compliment I could offer right now :D P.S. Love the cover