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Es una historia interesante sin embargo en lo personal siento que le falta algo pero es buena si quieres algo para entretenerte y pasar el rato leyendo
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Keep going as you're showing consistent improvements in the flow and strength of your chapters. Consider developing a unique and custom antagonist to play as a foil to your MC, especially if they happen to be reoccurring throughout 1 or more arcs.
actually trash, good concept but trash. really terrible grammar, no context most of the time and it feels like I'm reading a 10 year old's English project.
This is my rating for the current 8 chapters of this novel. Donβt get me wrong, I find the whole concept of the Fate Class Cards in the Marvel Universe is interesting, but seeing from the first to the latest chapters, Iβm just... The events just seem forced to me and I donβt know whether his trace on powers are a cheat or how the author portrayed the limitations of shirouβs power is just dumb because He just traced on a god-tier weapon! Its friggin mjolnir, and the price he paid for tracing a godly weapon is just an exhausted prana reserves? Sounds unrealistic to me. I can overlook the writing quality with good storyline and character development but sadly, I donβt see it yet from the current chapter. Criticisms aside, I still like the novel because I havenβt encountered nor read this kind of Fate crossover concept and I hope that my criticism of the novel will help you, author-san, to become more experienced in the overall concept of the novel as a whole.
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haven't read it yet why dahell not Right :3 hehehehehehehhehehehehe ahahahha also can you add gilgamesh gate of babylon and ENKIDU #plz Nice one plz keep on updating and also keep your novel original don't just follow the plot line of the story made diffrence like what if he accidently kill a character it can change the plot line :3
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The shameless author here rating my own work HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
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Es una historia interesante sin embargo en lo personal siento que le falta algo pero es buena si quieres algo para entretenerte y pasar el rato leyendo
thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter thanks for the chapter
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Keep going as you're showing consistent improvements in the flow and strength of your chapters. Consider developing a unique and custom antagonist to play as a foil to your MC, especially if they happen to be reoccurring throughout 1 or more arcs.
actually trash, good concept but trash. really terrible grammar, no context most of the time and it feels like I'm reading a 10 year old's English project.
This is my rating for the current 8 chapters of this novel. Donβt get me wrong, I find the whole concept of the Fate Class Cards in the Marvel Universe is interesting, but seeing from the first to the latest chapters, Iβm just... The events just seem forced to me and I donβt know whether his trace on powers are a cheat or how the author portrayed the limitations of shirouβs power is just dumb because He just traced on a god-tier weapon! Its friggin mjolnir, and the price he paid for tracing a godly weapon is just an exhausted prana reserves? Sounds unrealistic to me. I can overlook the writing quality with good storyline and character development but sadly, I donβt see it yet from the current chapter. Criticisms aside, I still like the novel because I havenβt encountered nor read this kind of Fate crossover concept and I hope that my criticism of the novel will help you, author-san, to become more experienced in the overall concept of the novel as a whole.
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haven't read it yet why dahell not Right :3 hehehehehehehhehehehehe ahahahha also can you add gilgamesh gate of babylon and ENKIDU #plz Nice one plz keep on updating and also keep your novel original don't just follow the plot line of the story made diffrence like what if he accidently kill a character it can change the plot line :3
Reveal Spoiler The shameless author here rating my own work HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
Since I am A Fate fanatic............ππππππππππ³πππππππππ£π’πππ¨π«π©ππΏπ¬πππ·π©π§π©π―π―ππ±π·πππππ§ππππ§π’π’π½ππππβΊπ¬πΎπ‘ββπππββ πππ
If this is called garbage, then people who create other bad fanfic will feel insulted. πππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ