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I absolutely love this story. I hope you continue with it. I can't wait until you update this story, and I hope it's soon. Best wishes author!!

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Khrysaor

So far, the story's pretty good, in that it has yet to run into any major problems. While I would very much like to see where this is going, I must take into account the incoherence, suddenness and incorrectness, in certain cases, of the language used. I mean this as a genuine, well-intentioned criticism, so the author can improve the quality of their work, which has otherwise good enough potential to be a nice, fluffy GL story about personal growth. I would suggest the author make their chapters a bit longer, even if it means taking longer to post them, check words in a dictionary before writing them, and organise their narrative so that things stop seeming so sudden and hurried. Then again, it's not like I have any right to tell them how they should write; I am not above them to be dishing out advice. So, if the author ever reads this: Thank you. I will be following your work hereon.