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Dear, Hello, I am a novel editor of Novelcat, My name is wind. After reading your appealing novels here, I eagerly want readers on our platform to have a chance to enjoy your talent. Are you willing to show your talent and share your works on our platforms?once your book gets exclusive contracted with us, you can get lots of rewards! and we also offer non-exclusive contract, which means half share of subscription fee and free AD! γmy email: kazechanku@gmail.comγ If you are interested, pls send me an email, so that I can send you our doc about what we can offer to author by email. Iβm sincerely looking forward to hearing from you. Please forgive me if my message causes any trouble to you.
Reveal Spoilerread for first 20 chapters already. as an aspiring author myself. I don't mind about the grammar issue so much as I'm pretty technical to the level that I could tolerate 7th language English level. but the problem is on the paragraph breaks. if you're writing fantasy. then it's normal that you have a lengthy narration / conversation quote. but this is the romance genre where everyone reads it as "loving story". consider to fix your paragraph. made it max 5 sentences/paragraphs or 3 sentences/paragraphs. world background wise. you need to improve it as I see that you're using the heavy narration, try to change world building from narration to conversation .it will works 4/5 for the determination of the author to write despite of no one seems reading on it.
Nice Story.... You are doing so well πππ.... Author.... Keep it up.... We will support You...... πππ...... Mass Release.... Plsss.... πππ
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Reveal SpoilerAwesome full of sweet moments. The scene is also enviting to read. What made me interested are the chapters are arranged from 2 different point of views.
Wow very interesting u are such a good writer keep it hope. it's really nice reading your book.keep the good work rocking.love from me to you πππ
This Story is decent but the poor grammar and languahe are ruining the book. The author stated several times to edit it but he doesn't and instead he focuses on publishing daily. I deopped the story after a short while so I can't say much about it, but the way she falls in love with him is poorly described and just states "love at first kiss" but it was kinda obvious, after all the title states it. All in all if the author really improves the quality of his writing, it should be a good read though .
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Read 3 paragraphs and was not sure what I was reading. Not a single comma, which makes sentences often very difficult to read. And it's mentioned that the MC weighs like 130kg, most of it is fat and not muscles so he can be considered handsome or something like that. Incredibly confusing since regardless of how you put it, it's weird. 130kg of fat on 190cm body height is very very big and you would not be considered handsome. 130 kg muscles on 190cm is huge as well and would look more like some of the strongman or idk. I'll try and complete the first chapter but I can only hope the reading experience becomes better and you don't have to think 5 times what the author wants to tell you.
Seem like an interesting story. Would love to know whether he also fall in love with her? Hope both will find happiness with the right person.
Looking at the reviews here, and the comments in the novel, there isn't much I can really add on which you are not aware of. Writing Quality: I know English isn't your first language, and that you are making an effort to imrpove but it really is very hard to read. Structurally, it is all over the place as you have so many ideas jumbled into one sentence. I do implore you to do these basics: (i) Use Grammarly. It is free and very useful (ii) Break down your sentences more. (iii) Proper punctuations (full stops) and capitalize. You have to start somewhere, and just slowly get used to the basic grammar writing before doing other things. Story Development: The progress and things that happen are good. You have so many ideas that it makes the story interesting. It has SO MUCH potential. However, if people are unable to follow it due to the inability to read smoothly, a rough gem will never shine. You need to polish it so its shine can be seen. Character Design: The ML and FL are believable. You can understand the ML stone heart and the FL naivety when it comes to falling in love. Keep that up. It is good. I am sorry I cannot give you 5*; I believe in being honest. Only the stability of updates get full marks whereas the rest needs lota of work. All the best, Author.
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I'm sorry I couldn't give you all five star, I highly recommend this book. It's exciting and fun to read, update release is excellent and everything else. With the exception of the Grammar, if you can get past that, then you would love this story. Give this Author some love and add it to your library for future, editing of the book. You would love their story.
I really like the storyline. I think with a bit of editing....this would be one story a lot of people would like! But I did give you a 5 because I do enjoy reading this book.
For your hard work, I rate you 5βοΈ. Keep improving author πͺπ. It is a novel with a good storyline but only needs some refinement. πππ Give a chance for this novel.
Reveal SpoilerI like this story but as in one topic two different people thought on same topic or sentence describe in two chapters....why that so... that is first I have seen this type of novel...I am not against see this novel this is different....but this part of describing I probably not like very much... otherwise story is awesome
I'm sorry, I can't yet give you 5 star, due to the writing quality. However, once this book get edited and I will change my review and give you a full 5 star. Keep it up, you doing a good job telling story.
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Reveal SpoilerSince I can't give you my vote, I'll just give you review of 5 star. .......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................exp
Reveal SpoilerI like your style, just need to work on the grammar, I'm giving you 5 star, so make me change it to one star. Get someone to help you, the story is good, your update is good, the only thing that's not good is I'm having a hard time dissecting your story.... hahahahhaha
Reveal SpoilerI just start reading some few chapter.....and i found this novel very good and intresting. Please keep on updating more and more chapterπππππππππππππππππππππππππ
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Reveal SpoilerThe writer is my #1 reader and wanted to support this book. Please, encourage this Author to continue, the story is good and in terms of grammatical error, that would be fixed sooner or later. [Right? #1} Give this book a chance.
Reveal SpoilerI'm giving you a five star, but you know what we need to do right? I don't want another reader to bash me for giving you this stars, Work it, my friend, remember, what's needed to be fixed. Go, go, go! Fighting. I'm recommending this book, give it a chance, you will love it.
Reveal SpoilerI rate 5 βοΈbecause of your story is good.. keep up the good work.. i believe youβll make this story better and better in the future... good luck author and dont give up ππ»πͺπ»
Reveal SpoilerYou MUST work on editing your story. I'm sorry for the low rating but I couldn't get through the first chapter as there are uncountable grammar and syntax errors. English is my third language but I do my best not to make mistakes in my writings. Please take this into consideration, nobody will carry on reading your novel it you don't work on the mistakes.
please find time to fix the use of english word the story is good but the editor or writer made some mistakes in using english words just my opinion I don't want to offend you but what I'm saying is a fact I hope you can continue your love of making novel take this as a practice
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Dear, Hello, I am a novel editor of Novelcat, My name is wind. After reading your appealing novels here, I eagerly want readers on our platform to have a chance to enjoy your talent. Are you willing to show your talent and share your works on our platforms?once your book gets exclusive contracted with us, you can get lots of rewards! and we also offer non-exclusive contract, which means half share of subscription fee and free AD! γmy email: kazechanku@gmail.comγ If you are interested, pls send me an email, so that I can send you our doc about what we can offer to author by email. Iβm sincerely looking forward to hearing from you. Please forgive me if my message causes any trouble to you.
Reveal Spoilerread for first 20 chapters already. as an aspiring author myself. I don't mind about the grammar issue so much as I'm pretty technical to the level that I could tolerate 7th language English level. but the problem is on the paragraph breaks. if you're writing fantasy. then it's normal that you have a lengthy narration / conversation quote. but this is the romance genre where everyone reads it as "loving story". consider to fix your paragraph. made it max 5 sentences/paragraphs or 3 sentences/paragraphs. world background wise. you need to improve it as I see that you're using the heavy narration, try to change world building from narration to conversation .it will works 4/5 for the determination of the author to write despite of no one seems reading on it.
Nice Story.... You are doing so well πππ.... Author.... Keep it up.... We will support You...... πππ...... Mass Release.... Plsss.... πππ
Great stories.πππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
Reveal SpoilerAwesome full of sweet moments. The scene is also enviting to read. What made me interested are the chapters are arranged from 2 different point of views.
Wow very interesting u are such a good writer keep it hope. it's really nice reading your book.keep the good work rocking.love from me to you πππ
This Story is decent but the poor grammar and languahe are ruining the book. The author stated several times to edit it but he doesn't and instead he focuses on publishing daily. I deopped the story after a short while so I can't say much about it, but the way she falls in love with him is poorly described and just states "love at first kiss" but it was kinda obvious, after all the title states it. All in all if the author really improves the quality of his writing, it should be a good read though .
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Read 3 paragraphs and was not sure what I was reading. Not a single comma, which makes sentences often very difficult to read. And it's mentioned that the MC weighs like 130kg, most of it is fat and not muscles so he can be considered handsome or something like that. Incredibly confusing since regardless of how you put it, it's weird. 130kg of fat on 190cm body height is very very big and you would not be considered handsome. 130 kg muscles on 190cm is huge as well and would look more like some of the strongman or idk. I'll try and complete the first chapter but I can only hope the reading experience becomes better and you don't have to think 5 times what the author wants to tell you.
Seem like an interesting story. Would love to know whether he also fall in love with her? Hope both will find happiness with the right person.
Looking at the reviews here, and the comments in the novel, there isn't much I can really add on which you are not aware of. Writing Quality: I know English isn't your first language, and that you are making an effort to imrpove but it really is very hard to read. Structurally, it is all over the place as you have so many ideas jumbled into one sentence. I do implore you to do these basics: (i) Use Grammarly. It is free and very useful (ii) Break down your sentences more. (iii) Proper punctuations (full stops) and capitalize. You have to start somewhere, and just slowly get used to the basic grammar writing before doing other things. Story Development: The progress and things that happen are good. You have so many ideas that it makes the story interesting. It has SO MUCH potential. However, if people are unable to follow it due to the inability to read smoothly, a rough gem will never shine. You need to polish it so its shine can be seen. Character Design: The ML and FL are believable. You can understand the ML stone heart and the FL naivety when it comes to falling in love. Keep that up. It is good. I am sorry I cannot give you 5*; I believe in being honest. Only the stability of updates get full marks whereas the rest needs lota of work. All the best, Author.
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I'm sorry I couldn't give you all five star, I highly recommend this book. It's exciting and fun to read, update release is excellent and everything else. With the exception of the Grammar, if you can get past that, then you would love this story. Give this Author some love and add it to your library for future, editing of the book. You would love their story.
I really like the storyline. I think with a bit of editing....this would be one story a lot of people would like! But I did give you a 5 because I do enjoy reading this book.
For your hard work, I rate you 5βοΈ. Keep improving author πͺπ. It is a novel with a good storyline but only needs some refinement. πππ Give a chance for this novel.
Reveal SpoilerI like this story but as in one topic two different people thought on same topic or sentence describe in two chapters....why that so... that is first I have seen this type of novel...I am not against see this novel this is different....but this part of describing I probably not like very much... otherwise story is awesome
I'm sorry, I can't yet give you 5 star, due to the writing quality. However, once this book get edited and I will change my review and give you a full 5 star. Keep it up, you doing a good job telling story.
Reveal Spoilerexp...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................Exp
Reveal SpoilerSince I can't give you my vote, I'll just give you review of 5 star. .......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................exp
Reveal SpoilerI like your style, just need to work on the grammar, I'm giving you 5 star, so make me change it to one star. Get someone to help you, the story is good, your update is good, the only thing that's not good is I'm having a hard time dissecting your story.... hahahahhaha
Reveal SpoilerI just start reading some few chapter.....and i found this novel very good and intresting. Please keep on updating more and more chapterπππππππππππππππππππππππππ
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Reveal SpoilerThe writer is my #1 reader and wanted to support this book. Please, encourage this Author to continue, the story is good and in terms of grammatical error, that would be fixed sooner or later. [Right? #1} Give this book a chance.
Reveal SpoilerI'm giving you a five star, but you know what we need to do right? I don't want another reader to bash me for giving you this stars, Work it, my friend, remember, what's needed to be fixed. Go, go, go! Fighting. I'm recommending this book, give it a chance, you will love it.
Reveal SpoilerI rate 5 βοΈbecause of your story is good.. keep up the good work.. i believe youβll make this story better and better in the future... good luck author and dont give up ππ»πͺπ»
Reveal SpoilerYou MUST work on editing your story. I'm sorry for the low rating but I couldn't get through the first chapter as there are uncountable grammar and syntax errors. English is my third language but I do my best not to make mistakes in my writings. Please take this into consideration, nobody will carry on reading your novel it you don't work on the mistakes.
please find time to fix the use of english word the story is good but the editor or writer made some mistakes in using english words just my opinion I don't want to offend you but what I'm saying is a fact I hope you can continue your love of making novel take this as a practice