Lonely at the Top

LV 11

ihateyounot

Good work. I roughly understood what happened, but I think you need to pace yourself better. Some parts felt too fast (like the last part of Chapter 8). To me, it felt like the author was being lazy. Honestly, I wouldn't have minded it if the author spent another two or three chapters explaining what kind of training she received, but hey, that kind of detailing depends on one's creative capacity. Just that, bear in mind that I would be very annoyed if I see a random flashback of her training in the middle of a battle scene or something. In terms of grammar, it is readable. I was able to ignore them since the story was interesting. But it can be better, to be honest. I hope it'll be better. It'd be too much of a wasted potential since the story is actually quite good. All in all, it is not bad for a first work. Don't be discouraged by my mean review and do your best!

LV 4

NEidarous

Hey Author, I read till chapter 3 and liked it so far. I was a little confuse at first not fully understanding what was going on but with the first flashback it gave me a good insight of the protagonist. It kept me hooked enough to read more. Keep the good work!

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