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The idea was good enough but execution not so much Things just happen without reason at all and come out of nowhere too many skips between storylines it feels like "We are doing this now, oops that's a lie, now we are doing that" it feels really weird to read, a lot of unfinished business. The grammar also doesn't help at all The character interactions are weird Overall it feels that things keep changing on a whim rather than planned
The story is interesting and the process of things is neat. I find it a little bleh seeing everyone keeps asking MC for help. I mean after all they all just started the game. I'm looking forward to his final evolve and how his friends/team mates beasts come along.
How good is this book?? Well kets just say i read 5 chapters without realizing it! Its that good.The only downside or should I say things you have to get use to is the way the MC is written as idk if its 3rd person or something. But I had to get use to it. Overall great job !
You have a great start and draft in your novel! I can see the potential it has. One thing though, you should probably re-read a few of your chapters as I am noticing a few grammatical errors. Hope to see you continuing to write in the future!
You have a good story going on although I find some mistakes in some grammars. I also suggest if you capitalize the first letter of the following paragraphs and the character's names since there were parts where I find things confusing. Period and commas are important and I found that most of the parts didn't end with periods or some parts didn't have commas. But all in all, ignoring those parts, I actually like your story and it is pretty interesting, I find this promising. 😁😀
Ah man.. good story.. you have marvelous background story.. path of beast king.. make sure you make great story.. because if you are not make good story.. you will make the background suck .. overall this is great.. and this like game that I know.. with nickname that normal and not like poetry in Chinese vrmmo novel
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
The idea was good enough but execution not so much Things just happen without reason at all and come out of nowhere too many skips between storylines it feels like "We are doing this now, oops that's a lie, now we are doing that" it feels really weird to read, a lot of unfinished business. The grammar also doesn't help at all The character interactions are weird Overall it feels that things keep changing on a whim rather than planned
The story is interesting and the process of things is neat. I find it a little bleh seeing everyone keeps asking MC for help. I mean after all they all just started the game. I'm looking forward to his final evolve and how his friends/team mates beasts come along.
How good is this book?? Well kets just say i read 5 chapters without realizing it! Its that good.The only downside or should I say things you have to get use to is the way the MC is written as idk if its 3rd person or something. But I had to get use to it. Overall great job !
You have a great start and draft in your novel! I can see the potential it has. One thing though, you should probably re-read a few of your chapters as I am noticing a few grammatical errors. Hope to see you continuing to write in the future!
You have a good story going on although I find some mistakes in some grammars. I also suggest if you capitalize the first letter of the following paragraphs and the character's names since there were parts where I find things confusing. Period and commas are important and I found that most of the parts didn't end with periods or some parts didn't have commas. But all in all, ignoring those parts, I actually like your story and it is pretty interesting, I find this promising. 😁😀
Ah man.. good story.. you have marvelous background story.. path of beast king.. make sure you make great story.. because if you are not make good story.. you will make the background suck .. overall this is great.. and this like game that I know.. with nickname that normal and not like poetry in Chinese vrmmo novel
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.