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Write a reviewPlease make the MC turn into someone important and then make him improve the qualities of life on earth, and if you want to make the Earth the best planet. And humiliate some asshole who despises the land
I shall be honest this was difficult to actually read due to the grammar errors but as that was already covered I shall move on. Whilst I am no writer myself I shall give you some of my thoughts. Try to be more consistent with numbers you start with mid 2500-2627 then you state the exact range 2580-2627 (which is late 2500's not middle). Also use the units of measure for example years. " and it was technology from 2600." could be and it was technology from the year 2600. or it was technology from the 27th century. It helps clarify when you have multiple unit types. examples are stats, damage or time. To help with grammar you could try "Grammarly" I have not used it myself but its supposed to be free so at worst you decide it doesn't suit you. Let me know if this helped ill check it again in a few days and see how the story is going.
Reveal SpoilerI’m doing this review for the author because he requested help in improving his writing. First, I know that it is hard to give a story a rating based on only a couple of chapters and you are new, but there is much that needs to be done. The grammar of the story is bad. I’m not sure if English is your first language but there is quite a bit of incorrect grammar in your chapters. If English isn’t your first language I give you props as I personally know how hard it is to write in a second language. The punctuation is not done very well. There is much that could be fixed, but the easiest thing is to break up the page with paragraphs. After you finish a thought you start a new paragraph, otherwise it feels like a run on sentence. The story is only 2 chapters long, so at this point I can’t really say much as far as character development or even world background. You did make an attempt at setting the preface of the story, but I feel the grammatical errors made it less than it could have been. I can’t really comment much on update frequency or anything either. The storyline has a similar feel to many of the online novels so I can’t comment yet if you will put your own spin or twist on things and have a truly original feel to it. I believe there is potential but you definitely have a long way to go. I hope this review helps you godtierfreak, and don’t give up. I’ll check on your novel at s later time to see how it has improved.
Author GodTierFreak
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