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Good story needs more chapters weekly. Also needs more countries the main character travels, to save people. I’m also trying to figure out why the main character hasn’t traveled to more places to collect wealth to purchase more things from his system? Like Alex 2.0, and flown to gold and diamonds exchange, or where money is printed.
It's like someone asked for a really cheesy plot, then another person used it for their story and didn't flesh it out to make it readable.
trigger warnings: sexual assault, sexism, cringe, and run on sentences. First, this novel doesn't deserve the high score it has. After reading Doomsday Pillars ( same author of Earth's Greatest Magus) I like kingdom building apocalypse novels. While I can forgive a few mistakes in writing here and there, the constant run on sentences make it difficult to read. Add spelling and grammar going out the window, and you've got a novel that feels like it wasn't even put through a basic word processor. Next, characters. MC is a typical OP dude, which I'm not against. And from what is being built in the narrative, a potential harem. Also not an automatic bad thing. But if your romance interests are literal prizes for quests who accept being kissed by a stranger they met not even a few minutes ago, I'm gonna have to call sexual assault. And no, having them resist at first then melt into the kiss doesn't count. That doesn't happen in the real world. The MC is cringe and bland. Even jokes about him being cringe fall flat. Let's not leave out the fact that he separated the men and women of the families he rescued to see if any of the men were "dead weight" by tossing them into the middle of a zombie apocalypse. Sure, he gave them sniper cover, but it really gave off a vibe of just letting them die till he remembered his new girlfriend might get upset at him if that happened. Even the men comment on this thinking it's fine that their lives are hanging by some random dudes want for his write in girlfriend. Did I forget that he literally wrote in some spam-esque survey for the situation of the novel and the love interests were just some celebrities he wanted to bang? Just "Who do you wanna be your girlfriend? Oh, XXXX celebrity cuz they are hot. Great! Here you go!" World-building is terrible. First, it was three months till the apocalypse. Then, it was 3 days. Then it was three hours. In total I think a little over two days went by till the apocalypse started. I say I think because it's hard to keep track with the terrible writing taking up brain space to decide what's going on. What could have been a great opportunity for setting up a novel where the MC has to be clever in gathering supplies, people, and other stuff to set up a good base is wasted. It feels like the author had an idea but didn't want to bother writing it. So we just get some random off screen reasons on why the timer goes down instead. TL;DR skip this novel. I've read better trash than this and still dropped those novels.
The story should at least not deviate from a more realistic set up, I've seen a lot of stories with great potential but some unbelievable powers and crazy imaginations spoils the story. what I want to say is that A Slice of Life should be your primary focus but so far its a good job.
This is on of the better apocalypse themed novels that I have read and I have read alot of them, there is no classic faceslaping, mc isn't an idiot like in most novels he actually has a brain and his train of thought isn't twisted, he isn't too OP, there isn't excessive harem with like hundreds of women whose names you can't even remember like in most harem novels , most important of all there aren't arrogant young masters who pop up out of nowhere to go against mc just because lol. All in all one of the best thought out novels with apocalypse theme that I have ever read and I recommeng everyone to give it a try at least. I'm guessing that English isn't authors first language so there's mistakes here and there but nothing too big though, that's the only thing I found "lacking".
It's good but only up to chap2 cause the mc just straight up show all of his abilities which is also his hidden aces and he is dumb, the side and supporting characters are annoying all the time and many characters are semi-tsundere
pretty good would have got 5/5 stars if the people's reactions were a little less anime? I guess but other than that it is a amazing story. (°^°✓¶) <cet
ok so first few chapters are a bit cringy but it seems like a good novel BUT as far as I've read he forgot one of his missions let Olivia have her legs I also have some math related issues but most novels have those
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If you like system genera stories and apocalypses stories this novel is what you are looking for. The focus of the novel about MC focusing on saving the human race after the apocalypses is not a new concept but is done really well in novel.
I dropped chapter 2 The survey that gives mc everything after couple questions didn't seem believable for even syfy And what retard wants to be in world with zombies if they have a choice of any world real or imaginary and why didn't mc specify what type of zombies it is even if its only a survey
I have noticed from other reviews, that claim the author repeats words/sentences/paragraphs to increase word count. I am at chapter 180+ at the moment and have not noticed this at all. There are minor grammatical errors throughout the chapters, but the reader can easily interpret what is being said/stated. Spoilers: My major concerns are that things are not explained well at all. The MC gets a mission fairly early on, which requires him to go and save a girl and her family. The reward is that the girl will become his girlfriend. Why this girl in particular? He was forced to travel to the other side of the globe, but he has never met this person or her family before. What made this girl so special instead of saving someone a little closer to home? The story went from barely PG-13 to R-18 fairly abruptly. At least the author actually puts R-18 into the title to forewarn the readers. The author seems to forget about plot threads completely. The MC is given a side quest in chapter 49. We as readers know that he goes above and beyond what is required of him, and yet there is no mention of him ever receiving the reward. In multiple chapters, the MC asks his system how to help a paralyzed little girl walk again. The system says that she needs to eat level 30+ beast meat for her to regain the ability to walk. The MC has killed multiple beasts that are level 30+, and yet the author has completely disregarded the little girl and we as readers have no idea how she is doing. The MC is rewarded for killing creatures who are well above his level. However, this seems to be fairly arbitrary. At one point, he kills a creature 20+ levels above his own, and there is no mention of a special reward for killing the creature. Part of his rewards at one point, are potions to forcefully evolve someone as well as the ability to completely heal someone of the zombie virus if bitten. However, after receiving these items, the author makes no mention of giving them out except to say that evolving naturally is more beneficial than using a potion. He has scientists who are studying the virus and have stated they have personally made a cure to the virus. This plot thread was dropped like a bag of rocks. The author seems to forget how skills work, especially his original Bear Passive skill (I forget what its called). It is supposed to give him something like +1 Strength and Stamina every 3 days. However, this is not reflected in his character sheet at all. Multiple months have gone by, but his character sheet barely changes at all. The author also only has the MC distribute stats in multiples of 5. So if the MC wants to increase both Strength and Stamina for example, he saves up skill points for 2 full levels before distributing them instead of say 2 for Strength and 3 for Stamina. While I understand doing it this way makes it easier to keep track of how point are distributed, someone living in an apocalyptic world would not have this luxury. it is for these reasons why I give my overall review.
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hahahahahaha author came to write a novel without thinking the overall plot(i mean the plot of first few chapter) 🤣😂🤣😂 he add's new thing in the middle.... he even forgets what he wrote in previous chapter😂🤣😂🤣😂🤣 i am not a writer and i know writing is hard but plz keep ur basic decency in writing.
not a good read. The MC is boring, the idea is great but unfortunately the author think going back on the rules of the world seconds after placing them is good storytelling, which it is NOT. Truly just wish fulfillment and nothing else.
i wonder why you writing quality on this book is very abysmal. but on you other story, the video game one is quite good. im not sure if this book is like a trial for the future books you will be creating in the future. grammar sucks is all i complain about.
Chronic deletion of reviews, pretentious author, horrendous writing. This author is a disgrace to this site. Can this even be considered a novel? It was so terribly written it felt like I was in a kindergarten classroom helping students edit their ‘essays’. All I can say is, there is no surprise that the author deletes reviews. How else would this novel have anything above a 3.0 without deleting them? This is definitely going in my roast reading list. Too bad you can’t delete that too, author.
So it dropped huh. I finally thought that I found a decent post apocalyptic novel. Been hovering around MPAW and MCV was thinking about adding those one on the list but it either got dropped, Chinad or Covided! DAMMIT!!!
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I like this story and I do recommend it. Their is even a twist in it that is u expecting, but their are subtle hints of it in the earlier chapters.
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This is a good book to read. The character and world building is good and makes sense. The writing quality is good compared to some others I have read. I have read books that were painful to read before coming to my senses and this book is a joy to read.
Characters are one dimensional, grammar is horrible making the story unreadable. Any possibility of the author doing research into how things work is out he window. Cring as hell MC with nonsense support characters who just "go along" with the crazy guy.
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Comedy is not a good excuse to throw out common sense out the window. Reading this made me remind of myself when I was 14 trying to write my own novel. filling it with dumb jokes that should not exist. Since the very beginning, the author tried way too hard on making the mc funny or add comedic effect to the story. The jokes didn't land and worse of all, like any other op settings. Author uses the opness as a gimmick while throwing in "comedic" stuff that has zero flow to the story. The mc is already a deranged person from the very beginning. The author should have mentioned this, and I would have been ok with the mc, but he didn't do that. So I assume he thought this was what a normal person is like.... This what usually happens when someone doesn't know how to use comedy properly. Because it makes it painful reading it when your jokes or bits not land the mark.
Hello Fellow Daoist! If you're new, I'm sure you're here in the Review Section to see if the story is actually worth reading, right? Honestly though, the early chapters are really crappy especially Chapters between 1 and 20 or maybe even more. Why? Well, I created this just for fun so I never really had a plot prepared when I started writing this so I just wrote what ever ideas that pops out in my mind. What I didn't expect is that I would actually get a contract for it because you know~..the story was just out of a hobby, right? So to those new readers out there, if you could at least get past maybe around chapter 30 or 40? I could at least tell you that the story slowly gets better and better. After all, I'm just a noob writer with almost no experience in writing novels. And if you read past those chapters that I mentioned above but you think that story is still the same like it didn't even have a change? Then maybe it isn't your cup of tea after all, sorry. Anyway, best of luck to us! ^_^ Peace! \/ NOTE: For the last time! It was clearly mentioned that weapons bought from the [System] or weapons created after the purging are the only usable weapons and weapons after WWII is a no no. NOTE TWO: You would only comment about modern weapons being a plot hole if you just skimmed or didn't even read the early chapters at all. Important Note: I will delete reviews that just rants about the story flow in the early chapters because it didn't go what they wanted it. Please leave reviews with constructed criticism that points out mistakes in the story where it needs improvement. Keep in mind that the story was only written as hobby before it was contracted, so I just wrote whatever comes to my mind. P.S the Stronghold needed to be built in a place indicated by the [System] on his map, it can't be just built anywhere the MC wanted. God, I'm tired of explaining ****! Just read the fucking whole chapters from 1 to 10, all of it was explained there! So stop being a brat and write your own if the story doesn't go the way you wanted it!
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Good story needs more chapters weekly. Also needs more countries the main character travels, to save people. I’m also trying to figure out why the main character hasn’t traveled to more places to collect wealth to purchase more things from his system? Like Alex 2.0, and flown to gold and diamonds exchange, or where money is printed.
It's like someone asked for a really cheesy plot, then another person used it for their story and didn't flesh it out to make it readable.
trigger warnings: sexual assault, sexism, cringe, and run on sentences. First, this novel doesn't deserve the high score it has. After reading Doomsday Pillars ( same author of Earth's Greatest Magus) I like kingdom building apocalypse novels. While I can forgive a few mistakes in writing here and there, the constant run on sentences make it difficult to read. Add spelling and grammar going out the window, and you've got a novel that feels like it wasn't even put through a basic word processor. Next, characters. MC is a typical OP dude, which I'm not against. And from what is being built in the narrative, a potential harem. Also not an automatic bad thing. But if your romance interests are literal prizes for quests who accept being kissed by a stranger they met not even a few minutes ago, I'm gonna have to call sexual assault. And no, having them resist at first then melt into the kiss doesn't count. That doesn't happen in the real world. The MC is cringe and bland. Even jokes about him being cringe fall flat. Let's not leave out the fact that he separated the men and women of the families he rescued to see if any of the men were "dead weight" by tossing them into the middle of a zombie apocalypse. Sure, he gave them sniper cover, but it really gave off a vibe of just letting them die till he remembered his new girlfriend might get upset at him if that happened. Even the men comment on this thinking it's fine that their lives are hanging by some random dudes want for his write in girlfriend. Did I forget that he literally wrote in some spam-esque survey for the situation of the novel and the love interests were just some celebrities he wanted to bang? Just "Who do you wanna be your girlfriend? Oh, XXXX celebrity cuz they are hot. Great! Here you go!" World-building is terrible. First, it was three months till the apocalypse. Then, it was 3 days. Then it was three hours. In total I think a little over two days went by till the apocalypse started. I say I think because it's hard to keep track with the terrible writing taking up brain space to decide what's going on. What could have been a great opportunity for setting up a novel where the MC has to be clever in gathering supplies, people, and other stuff to set up a good base is wasted. It feels like the author had an idea but didn't want to bother writing it. So we just get some random off screen reasons on why the timer goes down instead. TL;DR skip this novel. I've read better trash than this and still dropped those novels.
The story should at least not deviate from a more realistic set up, I've seen a lot of stories with great potential but some unbelievable powers and crazy imaginations spoils the story. what I want to say is that A Slice of Life should be your primary focus but so far its a good job.
This is on of the better apocalypse themed novels that I have read and I have read alot of them, there is no classic faceslaping, mc isn't an idiot like in most novels he actually has a brain and his train of thought isn't twisted, he isn't too OP, there isn't excessive harem with like hundreds of women whose names you can't even remember like in most harem novels , most important of all there aren't arrogant young masters who pop up out of nowhere to go against mc just because lol. All in all one of the best thought out novels with apocalypse theme that I have ever read and I recommeng everyone to give it a try at least. I'm guessing that English isn't authors first language so there's mistakes here and there but nothing too big though, that's the only thing I found "lacking".
It's good but only up to chap2 cause the mc just straight up show all of his abilities which is also his hidden aces and he is dumb, the side and supporting characters are annoying all the time and many characters are semi-tsundere
pretty good would have got 5/5 stars if the people's reactions were a little less anime? I guess but other than that it is a amazing story. (°^°✓¶) <cet
ok so first few chapters are a bit cringy but it seems like a good novel BUT as far as I've read he forgot one of his missions let Olivia have her legs I also have some math related issues but most novels have those
Reveal Spoiler If you like system genera stories and apocalypses stories this novel is what you are looking for. The focus of the novel about MC focusing on saving the human race after the apocalypses is not a new concept but is done really well in novel.
I dropped chapter 2 The survey that gives mc everything after couple questions didn't seem believable for even syfy And what retard wants to be in world with zombies if they have a choice of any world real or imaginary and why didn't mc specify what type of zombies it is even if its only a survey
I have noticed from other reviews, that claim the author repeats words/sentences/paragraphs to increase word count. I am at chapter 180+ at the moment and have not noticed this at all. There are minor grammatical errors throughout the chapters, but the reader can easily interpret what is being said/stated. Spoilers: My major concerns are that things are not explained well at all. The MC gets a mission fairly early on, which requires him to go and save a girl and her family. The reward is that the girl will become his girlfriend. Why this girl in particular? He was forced to travel to the other side of the globe, but he has never met this person or her family before. What made this girl so special instead of saving someone a little closer to home? The story went from barely PG-13 to R-18 fairly abruptly. At least the author actually puts R-18 into the title to forewarn the readers. The author seems to forget about plot threads completely. The MC is given a side quest in chapter 49. We as readers know that he goes above and beyond what is required of him, and yet there is no mention of him ever receiving the reward. In multiple chapters, the MC asks his system how to help a paralyzed little girl walk again. The system says that she needs to eat level 30+ beast meat for her to regain the ability to walk. The MC has killed multiple beasts that are level 30+, and yet the author has completely disregarded the little girl and we as readers have no idea how she is doing. The MC is rewarded for killing creatures who are well above his level. However, this seems to be fairly arbitrary. At one point, he kills a creature 20+ levels above his own, and there is no mention of a special reward for killing the creature. Part of his rewards at one point, are potions to forcefully evolve someone as well as the ability to completely heal someone of the zombie virus if bitten. However, after receiving these items, the author makes no mention of giving them out except to say that evolving naturally is more beneficial than using a potion. He has scientists who are studying the virus and have stated they have personally made a cure to the virus. This plot thread was dropped like a bag of rocks. The author seems to forget how skills work, especially his original Bear Passive skill (I forget what its called). It is supposed to give him something like +1 Strength and Stamina every 3 days. However, this is not reflected in his character sheet at all. Multiple months have gone by, but his character sheet barely changes at all. The author also only has the MC distribute stats in multiples of 5. So if the MC wants to increase both Strength and Stamina for example, he saves up skill points for 2 full levels before distributing them instead of say 2 for Strength and 3 for Stamina. While I understand doing it this way makes it easier to keep track of how point are distributed, someone living in an apocalyptic world would not have this luxury. it is for these reasons why I give my overall review.
Reveal Spoiler hahahahahaha author came to write a novel without thinking the overall plot(i mean the plot of first few chapter) 🤣😂🤣😂 he add's new thing in the middle.... he even forgets what he wrote in previous chapter😂🤣😂🤣😂🤣 i am not a writer and i know writing is hard but plz keep ur basic decency in writing.
not a good read. The MC is boring, the idea is great but unfortunately the author think going back on the rules of the world seconds after placing them is good storytelling, which it is NOT. Truly just wish fulfillment and nothing else.
i wonder why you writing quality on this book is very abysmal. but on you other story, the video game one is quite good. im not sure if this book is like a trial for the future books you will be creating in the future. grammar sucks is all i complain about.
Chronic deletion of reviews, pretentious author, horrendous writing. This author is a disgrace to this site. Can this even be considered a novel? It was so terribly written it felt like I was in a kindergarten classroom helping students edit their ‘essays’. All I can say is, there is no surprise that the author deletes reviews. How else would this novel have anything above a 3.0 without deleting them? This is definitely going in my roast reading list. Too bad you can’t delete that too, author.
So it dropped huh. I finally thought that I found a decent post apocalyptic novel. Been hovering around MPAW and MCV was thinking about adding those one on the list but it either got dropped, Chinad or Covided! DAMMIT!!!
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I like this story and I do recommend it. Their is even a twist in it that is u expecting, but their are subtle hints of it in the earlier chapters.
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This is a good book to read. The character and world building is good and makes sense. The writing quality is good compared to some others I have read. I have read books that were painful to read before coming to my senses and this book is a joy to read.
Characters are one dimensional, grammar is horrible making the story unreadable. Any possibility of the author doing research into how things work is out he window. Cring as hell MC with nonsense support characters who just "go along" with the crazy guy.
Hi there! Do you know there is a LitRPG writing contest? You might be a competitive participant and take the chance to win up to $3,000! Please Google LUTAW_writing_contest or Supreme Me Fiction Writing Contest to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
Comedy is not a good excuse to throw out common sense out the window. Reading this made me remind of myself when I was 14 trying to write my own novel. filling it with dumb jokes that should not exist. Since the very beginning, the author tried way too hard on making the mc funny or add comedic effect to the story. The jokes didn't land and worse of all, like any other op settings. Author uses the opness as a gimmick while throwing in "comedic" stuff that has zero flow to the story. The mc is already a deranged person from the very beginning. The author should have mentioned this, and I would have been ok with the mc, but he didn't do that. So I assume he thought this was what a normal person is like.... This what usually happens when someone doesn't know how to use comedy properly. Because it makes it painful reading it when your jokes or bits not land the mark.
Hello Fellow Daoist! If you're new, I'm sure you're here in the Review Section to see if the story is actually worth reading, right? Honestly though, the early chapters are really crappy especially Chapters between 1 and 20 or maybe even more. Why? Well, I created this just for fun so I never really had a plot prepared when I started writing this so I just wrote what ever ideas that pops out in my mind. What I didn't expect is that I would actually get a contract for it because you know~..the story was just out of a hobby, right? So to those new readers out there, if you could at least get past maybe around chapter 30 or 40? I could at least tell you that the story slowly gets better and better. After all, I'm just a noob writer with almost no experience in writing novels. And if you read past those chapters that I mentioned above but you think that story is still the same like it didn't even have a change? Then maybe it isn't your cup of tea after all, sorry. Anyway, best of luck to us! ^_^ Peace! \/ NOTE: For the last time! It was clearly mentioned that weapons bought from the [System] or weapons created after the purging are the only usable weapons and weapons after WWII is a no no. NOTE TWO: You would only comment about modern weapons being a plot hole if you just skimmed or didn't even read the early chapters at all. Important Note: I will delete reviews that just rants about the story flow in the early chapters because it didn't go what they wanted it. Please leave reviews with constructed criticism that points out mistakes in the story where it needs improvement. Keep in mind that the story was only written as hobby before it was contracted, so I just wrote whatever comes to my mind. P.S the Stronghold needed to be built in a place indicated by the [System] on his map, it can't be just built anywhere the MC wanted. God, I'm tired of explaining ****! Just read the fucking whole chapters from 1 to 10, all of it was explained there! So stop being a brat and write your own if the story doesn't go the way you wanted it!