A Rattling Monster [Completed] (Editing in Progress)

LV 6

Innovation

If you find any error, either grammatical or lexical, feel free to say it in the comments. English is not my main language and i still make mistake. Anyway talking about this novel, yes it has a system ability, yes it would be weak to strong, no the MC will not be utterly stupid, no he will not save people but hide and not tell that it's him that save them, harem will probably won't happen or at least won't be "find good-looking woman next to strong opponent, beat opponent, woman fall magically in love with the MC". This novel is supposed to be funny but still realistic so yes sometimes plot-armor-san will make his appartion but he will get kicked away very quickly. About the MC, he will be more sneaky and cunning than ruthless and savage. I mean he already had that mentality in his human life he will keep it. Next, i will try to not make the whole world stupid, except the gods, nearly all of them will be beyond redemption. About the world, it will be the basic fantasy world, you have the human race, elf, dwarf, lich, undead, lizardmen, beastmen (with different species). Magic will be more important than technologies except for dwarves, gobelins and ratmen. Next the rate of chapter, i will probably post 1-2 chapter daily, if i don't do it you can spam the 1 star review.

LV 14

PieGoddess

Ratmen Villain spreading doom and death in another world. What more would you want? 10/10 will cause apocalypse again. Author-san I humbly suggest you ask one of your readers if you can't find anyone, to be your proof-reader/editor. It will make your story so much more better. Thank you!

LV 13

Tranqui1ity

Yesyes...s-story good. Full of promising RPG system and shinnies. Goddess turn m-me, the great one, into Skavennnnn. W-wrong she is and when I control the underempire and the world of man-things, she will gladly become my toy as I r-rule everything, yesyes...

LV 14

thewayofKABOOMMMMM

This novel is litral diamond Story is goid , very promising Mc may come as a guy with some of his screws loose, Mc can be best described in one word by merging three 'WOW' 'fabulous' 'noscrewstoloose' Ahem And Author is probably one of the best original authors rn and possibly will always be No scratch that , he will always be one the best here I can't recommend reading this enough

LV 4

DomesticMallard

Stories don't have to be best selling novels with perfect diction. They don't have to use literary elements to the upmost expertise. The character building and development don't have to be perfect, and the interactions between those characters don't need to be flawless. This story is a mesh of lots of goods that come together to create a great story. A story isn't all about what it excels at, or what it lacks in. Similar to people, a story is a sum of all of its parts, and "A Rattling Monster" is the perfect example of a great story created by introducing lots of good points. The main character is funny and while easy to predict, and even a bit cringey, is still fun to see run about. The story is incredibly enjoyable to read despite the little things everyone will find they might not like in comparison to something else they may have enjoyed. I have said this a few times before, but originality is hard to come by these days, so it is up to the authors to take those seemingly cliche ideas and put their spins on them. They may even choose to just write the cliche so well it becomes magnificent for what it is and not the plot devices it seems to follow. "A Rattling Monster" is a story about an MC turned rat and his progression in the poisonous and otherwise deadly arts. There is comedy splashed in with lots of action and death for the glory of our rat god (MC). The plot development is nice, and while the characters are a bit lacking, it really isn't much do fret about. I always see people complaining about how ridiculous a story is because of minor things like character interactions not being good enough because in their eyes it must be equal to award winning performances, and I never truly understand how that can be a turn off for someone. If you are one of those people then leave right now and don't even affiliate yourself with this story because it is far from perfect. That said, despite it being far from perfect, who ever said a story must be perfect to be heavily enjoyed? I love this story and I will continue to follow it as it goes on. It is definitely worth a read, and you'll probably get hooked within the first 15 or so chapters as you get a feel for just who the MC is and how the story progresses. Give it a read, you'll probably not regret it. It won't soak up much of your time either so even if you begin to dislike it, at least it will not soak up too much of your time before you realize you'd rather find another story.

LV 5

Shade11224

Invest in a grammar checker, like Word or something it would improve the flow considerably because currently it feels jumbled up and hard to read. Story doesn’t seem bad though.

LV 2

fkjgfkf

Terrible grammar, makes it painful to read, super duper painful, i want to cry it is so bad, don't know how anyone can even read this, please mr.author it isnt that hard to fix

LV 14

Officepony

Not sure where all the 5-stars are coming from, but the story is decent. The writing quality is pretty bad. It's written more in the style of a semi-literate RPG found on some web forums than an actual story. Story narration happens in parenthesis which just throw you out of the story with a small montage style bit of information that could have easily been incorporated into the actual story itself instead of breaking the immersion. Dialogue is usually on prefaced with a dash (-) instead of quotation marks (") making them appear as more of a bullet-point presentation instead of actual dialogue. Descriptions are a bit lacking giving only really a bare-bones picture. Updates are good at the pace they are coming, no qualms here. If the story quality improves The story itself is promising and while over-done could really carry some weight if the writing quality improves. The character designs need a bit of work. While it may just be a problem with the writing not being descriptive enough, I don't really get a sense for any character personality aside from the MC and the initial interaction with the Goddess. The world building is weak. I can't really get a sense for where in the world the MC is, not for any interconnectedness between environments. This might just be because there are too few chapters to make any real connections yet (some stories need quite a while to really link places together). All in all, it's not too bad, but it could be better, mostly if the writing quality improves.

LV 13

Ijjy

Off all the original work that i have read so far, this novel is considered one the best. I see all the good things in a webnovel that I like ... 1. MC not that overpower, not that stupid and a bit funny (in a way). 2. A cheat or a system that help progress the MC .. not a cheat that give him god like power (up until chapter 23 9f course) 3. Good background story .. not too complicated 4. Character leveling that really help makes the story interesting.. Keep it up sir ...

LV 4

T77

Author deleted my review 4 times only cuz he didnt want low rating. Author deleted my review 4 times only cuz he didnt want low rating. Author deleted my review 4 times only cuz he didnt want low rating.

LV 5

Voidwrath

Loving this story greatly. Has some misspelling of a word or two or miss use every now and then, but still is very much an enjoyable story.

LV 5

Buffmann

The writing quality could be improved. A proofreader and editor would fix most of the mistakes. The world is set up well and believable but the main character seems to be the only person that matters. It's like everyone else is a npc. Their lives are meaningless and their suffering is really just entertainment for the readers and not really a plot element. The author could easily have the mc use poison to kill wolves instead of orphans for exp.

LV 14

Isekai_delivery

Comedy? Check Rebirth? Check Magic? Check A MC with more then one loose screw, gray morals and the body of a rat? Che.. What? Killing of not only man, but children and woman too? Including hate for sand.. Check! Great story, way better than the usual 'super strong villian mc' storys.

LV 12

Wu_Zhangxuan

I read the first few chapters and I couldn't continue. There are some grammatical mistakes that I don't mind as much as others, but the author seems a bit lazy. I didn't like the fact that it skips describing many things. It just is like xxx happened and then xxx happened. It doesn't really describe in detail how the character is feeling or where it happened or how it happened. At the start when the lich was fighting the humans, the attacks or anything else were not described in detail. It was just boom the lich is dead now. All in all, nice story, but more description would be nice.

LV 6

KoFu_

3 Stars. (IDK what score Qidian will give, sometimes I put 3 stars and the system post my review as 4 stars.) You have an amazing idea! Congratulations! You choose a mob monster and turned it evil. You chose the easiest path yet people love it. But your writing really sucks, you write very annoyingly. How? You write. like this. On each. paragraph they are at. least more. than 10 dots. you know. the comas. exist. right? (-1 Star) I prefer a whole sentence without a dot so I can read at my own pace instead of you cutting my reading with a dot. If you are going to use it, use it with care. Also, the God that he's following said that the "God Mode" that is like a security camera above the MC can only be used sporadically, yet he uses it all the time. Also, he's the least curious character of all times, he has a god as a follower and didn't even ask for his birth, the origin of the universe, the meaning of life....(-0,5 Star) The inconsistency of writing, you said that the MC only had 10 mana after the ritual and yet, somehow he can still throw acid spells like spitting on the ground. (-0,5 star) TL;DR: Excellent idea, writing suck so much that I'm considering dropping it.

LV 5

cyber_creeper

For a free story, the best I have read so far. If I compare with the paid ones it is still one of the best, it doesn't make the mc to overpowered to early and doesn't force a romantic interest making it leaps and bounds ahead of a lot of other system novels where the author keeps changing things and making them nice and innocent compared to what they described them in the beginning. So read and enjoy it already.

LV 4

DragonSlayerz_Zmaj

The story was well laid out, although the story suddenly felt rushed in the end. The characters' personalities and how they were written was very good, loved it. I wasn't there when it was written, so I can't say anything about the upload schedule. The world itself, although explained, wasn't explored; however, seeing as it wasn't that relevant to the plot, it makes sense. Last, the writing quality: had a lot of typos, occasionally used a word incorrectly, and the way the reader sees the world (through the thoughts of the mc) was sometimes confusing and not satisfying to read. It needed clear separation between his thoughts and observations of the world. For my feelings on if the story is worth it to read, if you don't mind a quick read and aren't looking for a masterpiece, it's a good read. The biggest problem with the story is the sudden change in the progression, which abandoned everything the MC was doing and forcefully hastened the ending. This ruined the ending and made it feel not real. All the buildup was removed and made it seem like just another unimportant battle. Aaaand~ that's my review.

LV 14

TonioG04

It's an amazing book. I think the world background is nicely made and I like the similarity to Warhammer. The only think I can really criticize is the ending, because it is way to gripping and makes it a little gruel without a next part. Thanks for the great work