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******************************** Good work! ****************************************** ***************************** And i need more! ***************************************
Don't let this end! It's a great story with lots of potential I look forward to seeing where it goes.hopefully the rest of this story will be as exciteing as the first part has been.
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It's a good story but the time to update the chapter takes a long time.it will be good if the author updates it more often. But I think the overall story is quite good it would be good if more characters are introduced in the novel
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Please update more you left on such a cliffhanger and I am dying to know more. I hope that you will update soon and I can't wait for more chapters
I am too tired to write a much deserved, flattery comment. All I wish to say is that I want MORE. I hope my message was conveyed. L.O.V. E this story. I know it's been close to 10 months since you've updated, but I'm still willing grit my teeth and wait. Thanks for the story so far. Be back soon.
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well , its a great story to be honest , but the one thing the sucks is that its already 2 months and no update :/ the story is proboly dropped , so if u wanna read it be warned
Nice idea but years skipping quest inconsistency( first quest being 300 whatever push ups not sure anymore) then skip to 4 y old from 1 day old doing 500 push ups yet the quest is still not done by magical reason the world around is not described much and from begining not at all thoughts interactions and reasonings details have very deep hole that needs to be filled if others like the story like if author writes it just because he likes how henwrites it do it but as rewiev i cant even write much as theres not much to write about so therest i can say this novel is not something i will continue to read.
Well done. Good solid start. Has sayain and does not break the story. Can't wait for super sayain. I think very highly of this story. More please.
Good story, the only problem are slow release xD HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
This is an update to the review I did before. Unfortunately, the author is still caught up in something else. His latest chapter is one of the worst in the novel so far, as if he rushed to put it out. While I understand the circumstances, this is my attempt at being fair and unbiased.
Great story that doesn’t excessively take from the DBZ universe with great character progression. Hope the novel continues for the long haul.
is this still ongoing ?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
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First I would like to say that the concept for the story is interesting and has great potential. However, the Author is clearly an *******. The integration between the Saiyan system and the immortal cultivation is not performed well at this stage, the Author is clearly writing on the go, with no prior plot planning, There is almost no world building, side characters are shallow and have no personality. most secondary characters are not heard from then once. the main character has few "family" members close to heart but the relationship between them is shallow and almost never mentioned. There are 2 cultivation systems, secular martial arts, and immortal cultivation, but there is no clear distinction between them, no differences in techniques or power levels even though immortal cultivators should be superior. the main character relies on the Saiyan bloodline plot armor to gain massive powerups and forcefully clashes him with powerful fighters and of course he wins. In just a few chapters the main character has no more rivals and he leaves for another continent leaving his family behind with nothing more than a sentence or two. the main character himself is your typical xianxia hero with an auxiliary system from birth. nothing interesting or new. As i said the idea of the story is intersting, but execution could not be worst. the mistakes made cannot be corrected unless the author delete the story and starts anew. DONT READ!!!
Interesting story but releases are too unrergular. .......,..............,............................,............. .............,............................................,..........,
Great novel but the updates just tooooo slow*** .....................................................................................................................................................................................
story waaaaaassss sooooo grrreeeeaaattttt kaaaaammmmmeeeekaaaaammmmeeehhhhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
At first, this novel looked like another terribly constructed fan fiction. However, after reading all the current chapters, I am pleasantly surprised. There is a fair bit of logic and reason in every action the main character takes. The plot is well thought out, and the writing quality is among the best I have seen on this website. If you are looking for a good fan fiction, or just a solid novel, I definitely recommend this. However, the update stability is annoyingly slow, especially since this is a novel I personally have been liking so far. However, I understand that the author has their own life, which I respect. Needless to say, when the update stability gets more regular, I will definitely make this at least a 4 star review.
Author you wrote 12 chapters a week but.... Its 3 or 4 a week Plz.....the stability of update as story is intereating............................... .. . .............
The novel is worth reading but at some point, it was lacking world background and story development. And sometimes i find the story intriguing but missing some explanation but all in all its a good novel, that is worth someone time.
I really loved the story and it had a lot of action cool dragon ball elements and add that the the immortal and its big hit . I just miss the elements of fun in the story like master roshi perverted self or some comedy action like awkward moments like DBZ u need to add some spice like romance its only one way. However the story is solid it has the same elements of DBZ like no parents getting adopted and becoming stronger I just want for a sayin he needs to be more free have epic adventures because DBZ is not limited to one plant because at pecaloes power 1m he can destroy the plant u need to take that into account for to be more and at 1 m that can fly easy they don’t need crane arts to fly he can control kie so well if u need the episode were gohan teaches videl to fly he just told her to use kie to push herself to fly and there is the case he can get to super sayin and he dose not know how to fly like goten but goten was a kid and he was 8 and and air head but I think that MC is not dum . But great story
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Honestly just the title makes me cringe and not want to read it but in the end i gave it a shot. It is actually quite good despite it being some kind of weird DBZ fanfiction thingy. It doesn't go as far as actually using the DBZ characters else i so would have dropped it.
I give you full star if you manage to get seven dragon balls in cultivation world .....I am dying to see what kind of stir happens after it....
good chapter just needs to develop more. Then another 100 chapters 😊😊😊😊+++++++++++++++++++++×+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++×+++++++++++++++××++++++++++×++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++×+++++++
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******************************** Good work! ****************************************** ***************************** And i need more! ***************************************
Don't let this end! It's a great story with lots of potential I look forward to seeing where it goes.hopefully the rest of this story will be as exciteing as the first part has been.
Is this story still gonna be continue author? Is this story still gonna be continue author? Is this story still gonna be continue author? Is this story still gonna be continue author? Is this story still gonna be continue author? Is this story still gonna be continue author?
DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ DONT DROP IT PZ
It's a good story but the time to update the chapter takes a long time.it will be good if the author updates it more often. But I think the overall story is quite good it would be good if more characters are introduced in the novel
Reveal Spoiler Please update more you left on such a cliffhanger and I am dying to know more. I hope that you will update soon and I can't wait for more chapters
I am too tired to write a much deserved, flattery comment. All I wish to say is that I want MORE. I hope my message was conveyed. L.O.V. E this story. I know it's been close to 10 months since you've updated, but I'm still willing grit my teeth and wait. Thanks for the story so far. Be back soon.
Xpxp xpxpgghbbh ch cccccccvvvvvccccggggccggggg g hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh j hjhhjjjjjjjnnnnnnnnnnjnnnnnngtvvtvrcrcrccrccrcrvrcrcccgghhjvffff grandma and grandpa and they where not fun and games for Girls Club
well , its a great story to be honest , but the one thing the sucks is that its already 2 months and no update :/ the story is proboly dropped , so if u wanna read it be warned
Nice idea but years skipping quest inconsistency( first quest being 300 whatever push ups not sure anymore) then skip to 4 y old from 1 day old doing 500 push ups yet the quest is still not done by magical reason the world around is not described much and from begining not at all thoughts interactions and reasonings details have very deep hole that needs to be filled if others like the story like if author writes it just because he likes how henwrites it do it but as rewiev i cant even write much as theres not much to write about so therest i can say this novel is not something i will continue to read.
Well done. Good solid start. Has sayain and does not break the story. Can't wait for super sayain. I think very highly of this story. More please.
Good story, the only problem are slow release xD HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
This is an update to the review I did before. Unfortunately, the author is still caught up in something else. His latest chapter is one of the worst in the novel so far, as if he rushed to put it out. While I understand the circumstances, this is my attempt at being fair and unbiased.
Great story that doesn’t excessively take from the DBZ universe with great character progression. Hope the novel continues for the long haul.
is this still ongoing ?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
updating is very slow.updating is very slow.updating is very slow.updating is very slow.updating is very slow.updating is very slow.updating is very slow.updating is very slow.updating is very slow.updating is very slowupdating is very slow.updating is very slow.updating is very slowupdating is very slow.updating is very slow
First I would like to say that the concept for the story is interesting and has great potential. However, the Author is clearly an *******. The integration between the Saiyan system and the immortal cultivation is not performed well at this stage, the Author is clearly writing on the go, with no prior plot planning, There is almost no world building, side characters are shallow and have no personality. most secondary characters are not heard from then once. the main character has few "family" members close to heart but the relationship between them is shallow and almost never mentioned. There are 2 cultivation systems, secular martial arts, and immortal cultivation, but there is no clear distinction between them, no differences in techniques or power levels even though immortal cultivators should be superior. the main character relies on the Saiyan bloodline plot armor to gain massive powerups and forcefully clashes him with powerful fighters and of course he wins. In just a few chapters the main character has no more rivals and he leaves for another continent leaving his family behind with nothing more than a sentence or two. the main character himself is your typical xianxia hero with an auxiliary system from birth. nothing interesting or new. As i said the idea of the story is intersting, but execution could not be worst. the mistakes made cannot be corrected unless the author delete the story and starts anew. DONT READ!!!
Interesting story but releases are too unrergular. .......,..............,............................,............. .............,............................................,..........,
Great novel but the updates just tooooo slow*** .....................................................................................................................................................................................
story waaaaaassss sooooo grrreeeeaaattttt kaaaaammmmmeeeekaaaaammmmeeehhhhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
At first, this novel looked like another terribly constructed fan fiction. However, after reading all the current chapters, I am pleasantly surprised. There is a fair bit of logic and reason in every action the main character takes. The plot is well thought out, and the writing quality is among the best I have seen on this website. If you are looking for a good fan fiction, or just a solid novel, I definitely recommend this. However, the update stability is annoyingly slow, especially since this is a novel I personally have been liking so far. However, I understand that the author has their own life, which I respect. Needless to say, when the update stability gets more regular, I will definitely make this at least a 4 star review.
Author you wrote 12 chapters a week but.... Its 3 or 4 a week Plz.....the stability of update as story is intereating............................... .. . .............
The novel is worth reading but at some point, it was lacking world background and story development. And sometimes i find the story intriguing but missing some explanation but all in all its a good novel, that is worth someone time.
I really loved the story and it had a lot of action cool dragon ball elements and add that the the immortal and its big hit . I just miss the elements of fun in the story like master roshi perverted self or some comedy action like awkward moments like DBZ u need to add some spice like romance its only one way. However the story is solid it has the same elements of DBZ like no parents getting adopted and becoming stronger I just want for a sayin he needs to be more free have epic adventures because DBZ is not limited to one plant because at pecaloes power 1m he can destroy the plant u need to take that into account for to be more and at 1 m that can fly easy they don’t need crane arts to fly he can control kie so well if u need the episode were gohan teaches videl to fly he just told her to use kie to push herself to fly and there is the case he can get to super sayin and he dose not know how to fly like goten but goten was a kid and he was 8 and and air head but I think that MC is not dum . But great story
Reveal Spoiler Honestly just the title makes me cringe and not want to read it but in the end i gave it a shot. It is actually quite good despite it being some kind of weird DBZ fanfiction thingy. It doesn't go as far as actually using the DBZ characters else i so would have dropped it.
I give you full star if you manage to get seven dragon balls in cultivation world .....I am dying to see what kind of stir happens after it....
good chapter just needs to develop more. Then another 100 chapters 😊😊😊😊+++++++++++++++++++++×+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++×+++++++++++++++××++++++++++×++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++×+++++++
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