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Well, this story caught my attention because of the very high rating it has, but I must disagree with the 4.9 rating, reasons? Well, it has a giant problem. This is the typical story where the author doesn't know how to decide which arc to start his story with, and added all of them at the same time, plus it feels like a Chinese novel in a certain aspect, I'll explain that below. The story itself begins, it starts with the protagonist fighting the guy who stole his girlfriend, the protagonist defeats and humiliates him, that uncovers a plot about a very potent drug that for some convenient reason, no authority has discovered it and is being casually used by teenagers, well, brain dead logic, but no that's not the problem. The point is that after the protagonist's victory, the older brother of the guy who was humiliated, comes from absolute nowhere to control hypnotize an entire school AND AN ENTIRE POLICE BODY, nothing more to catch the protagonist. After that, some sort of random martial artist, decides not to give a damn about a guy who is hypnotizing hundreds of people, instead, he decides to go fight the protagonist, after that another doujin character (who coincidentally is not hypnotized) shows up and helps for some reason the protagonist. But that doesn't stop there, because not much later ANOTHER RANDOM CHARACTER shows up, to again go against the protagonist. This is what I mean when I say it looks like a Chinese cultivation novel, and not a good one. Protagonist reincarnated in a practically crippled (very weak) body: ✅ The protagonist has some sort of special power that works when it's convenient for the plot: ✅ A generic antagonist who immediately gets in the way of the protagonist: ✅ A random character who comes to avenge the previous protagonist: ✅ More random characters who come in a pack to go against the protagonist: ✅ The story rather than following a narrative course, it's as if the author took all the ingredients in his kitchen and threw them into the frying pan over high heat regardless of the composition of said ingredients, an absolute mess. The novel is fine at the level of grammar, the characters...meh, the protagonist? A muscle head who only thinks with his fists, meh. A plus for this story? It has few chapters, very few and everything is a mess, but it's still a plus because it has a lot of room for improvement. Is the story bad? I would say no, but its problems are not exactly few, definitely not for a 4.9, maybe 3.4 all things considered, if this story improves, this review will be deleted and updated.

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Buen comienzo, sin muchos errores hasta ahora, espero más capítulos que sean igual de entretenidos..........................🗣🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

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