I am an author that writes at Webnovel and Wattpad. Discord here - https://discord.gg/2zWeRad
2019-12-22 Joined Global
Hello. Moe here. I won't be sweet talking since I'd like to give out a honest opinion on this. My overall total score for this would be a 3.0. As stated by the others, the writing quality... simply just ruins it a lot. Improper placements of periods, comas, exclamations, and the like. Grammar problems and sentence structure being all over the place. I'm telling this now, even Grammarly won't save this. The reason is simple. the writing style that is seemed to be here would be something like akin to that of a script. When one reads a script, it would often be stiff. Because it is written with the intention to perform, not to read. This is like that in a lot of cases. A quick suggestion to fix this is to read other people's works first. See how it is written, structured, and styled. After that, try to implement it to your work. then compare. Another reason why i said that Grammarly may not even save it is because, based on where you want to place your writing. It appears to be a mix of first person and third person. And as Grammarly stands, it sucks at recognizing that. With that point done the other points can then follow suite. Since the writing quality is the main issue. If that has a problem, story development, character design, and world background then get's affected. Overall souring the reader's experience and causing them to may drop the work for another. If that can be fixed, then my rating may change. But for now, it stands to stay on this number.
This book has been deleted.
yeah I know it's slow. can't help it since college projects gotta go first
ch 413 Chapter 413/57: Dungeon Experience II
Fantasy · Moe_Cyan_Pile
thank you for noticing this error
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Fantasy · moecyanpile
one word, contract it will be republished soon.
I'll be honest with you. that was the third time I updated it already
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Fantasy · Moe_Cyan_Pile
thanks for noticing.
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Fantasy · Moe_Cyan_Pile
This version is abandoned since i wrote this out of being a hobby. a new one is being written without having the same inconsistencies you mentioned. thanks for those though since i sometimes miss them. (new version is not published) (wattpad has 2 chapters) (set 1)
I was dazed when I heard that. They're not going to do anything to me? No slavery or other cruel stuff of some sort?
Fantasy · Moe_Cyan_Pile
oi. it's author-san
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Fantasy · Moe_Cyan_Pile
the what? 😂😂😂😂
what the bloody damn. I'm really sorry about that. I have no power when it comes to that. all I can say now is that I'm disappointed at Webnovel.
Heavenly Kingdom: The Kingdom among the clouds
Fantasy · moecyanpile