thank you very much for the comment, just an explanation for the first chapter and the upcoming second, I wanted it to drag the readers in, must individuals find it hard to properly immerse into a story without intensive descriptions, the story is meant to capture every essence of sadness but I do appreciate your feedback.
This chapter appears to be somewhat inconsistent with the character development of Caspian. In the previous chapters, he was portrayed as a fearless and ruthless individual, yet in this chapter, he seems nervous while speaking to the officer. Additionally, Caspian was previously depicted as someone who could commit murder without hesitation, but now he appears to be hesitant and unsure. The writing style also seems to be deviating from the established characterization of Caspian. The pacing is too fast, and we have not yet gained a comprehensive understanding of Caspian's background or the significance of the ring.
This chapter provided a solid introduction to the main storyline, though it lacked sufficient context and explanation. The abrupt transition into the central narrative may have left readers feeling disoriented. Despite these shortcomings, the overall quality of the writing was impressive.
very detailed keep up the good work my friend I wish you success
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this is really detailed😌
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"The Hidden Truths of Willowbrook" unravels the enigmatic past of a seemingly idyllic small town, where dark secrets lurk beneath the surface. When protagonist Lily returns to her hometown after years away, she discovers a series of unsettling occurrences that challenge her perception of reality. As she delves deeper into the town's history, Anna uncovers a web of lies, corruption, and long-buried mysteries, all connected to the sinister Willowbrook Institute. With the help of a skeptical journalist and a determined historian, Lily races against time to expose the truth before it's too late. But as she gets closer to unraveling the town's secrets, she realizes that some truths are more dangerous than she ever imagined. "The Hidden Truths of Willowbrook" is a gripping tale of deception, redemption, and the power of confronting the shadows of the past.31 Chs 8 收藏
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I always wonder what life was, but even at the end, it seems I will never get to explain what it is. I lived my life without much regret but it seems all things must come to an end. Everything becomes a story once told6 Chs 6 收藏
A gripping dark fantasy that dives deep into pain, mystery, and self-discovery. With a broken protagonist, an eerie imaginary friend, and a world full of secrets, it’s a story that pulls you in and doesn’t let go. If you’re into emotional stories with mind-blowing twists, you’ll love this one!
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