徽章 3
Moments 55
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I know where you got the inspection from and it's peak
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afrodite ?
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This is the first Red Rising fanfic I've seen.
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this mfs had to go
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The story is good, but it doesn't change any events from the original. It feels like Shiro has no impact. You should start thinking about your own arcs and how events will be affected.
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It's good, the only thing is that some characters should already be dying against Shiro like Freed should have died there without hesitation, but it feels like you're keeping him alive for the sake of the plot.
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To be a Viltrumite (Dc)
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