DubanChelo

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Escribir es nuevo para mi, por lo que me gastaría que escribieran cosas en las que podría mejorar (sean muy descriptivos). Espero que les guste mi contenido y por leer. Gracias!

2023-01-30 加入 Colombia
徽章 2

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DubanChelo
DubanChelo
7 months ago
Posted

The story is very interesting, there are not many Yu Gi Oh fanfictions but this one is unique and with a lot of potential, I hope you continue it. Although the content was difficult to read in the first chapters, in chapter 10 it becomes a much more pleasant read.

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DubanChelo
DubanChelo
8 months ago
Posted

First of all, I love your book. Although it was difficult to read the first chapters, but that's normal. All readers like to see how a protagonist goes from being weak to powerful, although most writers make that change of power very quickly or have them face very weak enemies so that we do not notice their weakness. Getting back to the topic, even if English is not your language you write very well. The world, the plot and the protagonist are good, although if you are going to make the harem story you have to have only one or two couples per world. I'm not going to talk about your update stability because I just read all the chapters straight. Well, without anything else to say, I hope you continue with this wonderful story you started, don't let it die and don't fall for stupid comments from stupid people. I will continue reading your story and encouraging you. Good luck 🍀🍀🍀

DubanChelo
DubanChelo
1 years ago
Posted

Me encanta, no puedo esperar por los nuevos capitulos. Pense que sería una fanfiction de Minecraft como los demás, pero este me sorprendió.

DubanChelo
DubanChelo
1 years ago
Posted

La historia y el desarrollo de los personajes es interesante y divertido. Todo hasta ahora va muy bien, pero espero que el protagonista no eleve muy rápido en la escala de poder, creo que volvería muy aburrida y cliché la historia. De todos modos fui muy agradable de leer, espero que no lo abandones.

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