overall I like the story... but honestly this chapter is poorly written
if you started a patreon... i would support. please continue this story!!!
I've been keeping up with the story. it's good. I enjoy it. for anyone reading this review. know that this story is an enjoyable read. If I may offer some critique. 1. it's not dark enough. this is the Shinobi world. people are killed and die all the time. realism and edginess. weariness in characters. manipulation. hiding abilities, backstabbing. it's lacking severely in this department. even with the whole Minato death and danzo thing. 2. kushina loses her Chakra and she suddenly becomes a helpless woman that needs to be coddled and cared for by her prepubscent son. she has no regards for her kids safety. no attempt to help him succeed so he can protect himself. she's like some ditsy wallflower that's living in some romcom 3. maybe try reading wind of calamity... see how the author narrates the character growing in power and technique. how realistic he makes it and how easy it is to follow along and invest in their growth. could help you a lot
absolutely brilliant story. I loved every second of it. thank you for bringing so much joy into my life.
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this story is toooo good!!! I beseech u too drag it out as long as humanly possible. in an ideal world... I would still be reading this in 2050 on my death bed.
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this story is getting too close to finishing for my liking. Can u please drag it outttt?? I don't want it to end
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I freaking love this book!!! reading a chapter is the second best way to wake up in the morning. the first... well...
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I just realized how much of a foreshadow this is.
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Is this fic officially dropped?? honestly miss it so much
just reread. miss this fic so much
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