You really have problems as a writer. I read all the chapters that are free to read, not the 16 chapters, and you couldn't convince me to continue reading it! I don't have to do any good to you and keep reading the paid chapters just because maybe this garbage MC will get better, no one is! First, learn that this is a business and plan accordingly. In the free chapters you don't give the slightest hint of his evil side. Then you claim that I will get better results if you read more and pay??? You should have at least written a warning somewhere, my friend. Oh you are so newbie. Anyway, as I mentioned in the review, I said he wasn't evil as a demon king, he was just an anti-hero with his own sense of morality. I don't know if it will change in the future, it was not clear from what I read. Frankly, you didn't give much reason for it to change in the future. Maybe you should increase the number of free chapters or put a warning that he's a slow-developing villain. Either way, I'm still sure he's not evil.
Can you remove the "villain" tag from your novel ? Otherwise, you will be heavily insulted by those who come to read the novel because of this tag, like me. I'm just warning you. Don't add meaningless tags to the novel for more readers. And yes, for those who will read this, do not read this novel just for this tag! MC is an anti-hero style hero who, although he is a demon lord belonging to the evil faction, expresses his discomfort with their 'evil' actions at every opportunity, and although he is not a saint, he has his own sense of morality. This is not a novel where you will witness a real demon lord and his relentless evil. Don't waste your time.
Stop being a writer and become a comedian. Although you suck at that too... This book isn't worth reading. The main character is spineless. His family is very powerful so he doesn't really have any motivation or purpose to become stronger. And the author is not smart enough to give that purpose. Maybe he'll give him a perverted purpose. Like HAREM? It's a disgraceful story, especially as a comedy.
This novel is completely mediocre. I respect the idea of writing your own novel inspired by another novel, but this is literally plagiarism!! Everything, down to the dialogues, has been stolen from similar versions of the genre. The plot, the characters, the dialogues, everything... I'm surprised you have the face to shamelessly upload this here.
Another novel in which a powerful 'general' who has lived for years acts like a whiny retardd child after being reincarnated. Author if you're going to write a main character acting like an dumpp, don't give him a background story like this
The cliché father route. What makes you think it makes sense for someone 3 years older than you to be someone else's father? A rich brat who hasn't even come of age is going to be someone else's father? It wouldn't look so weird if he said she'll grow up to be part of my harem.
It's weird, it seems to me that Danzo interrogated him a bit inadequately, or because you didn't explain it clearly, so now there are unanswered questions. This guy told them everything about the future and no one asked him how he knew all this? If he can tell them memories of naruto in his past life, shouldn't they find out that he's a trasmigrator? If they found out about his past, didn't they ask him how he knows so much fuinjutsu? How much did he reveal about himself, not just the future, under Danzo's influence? Did he mention that he has a system? Obviously no one is paying enough attention to him. Danzo's supposed to take all the information, record it, and investigate every little detail, and he just drops by every now and then and asks questions?! He told the guy that he will die in the future, right? That aside, if someone who knew the future showed up, wouldn't you scramble for any information you could get out of him? I expected to read this in the simulation, but you ignore writing their reaction like programmed NPCs and just use the simulation as Mc's grinding tool. Yes yes root will make it stronger than before, what an unexpected result!
My personal opinion is that both have their good sides. Here at least Mc has a firm and decisive attitude. He has emotions (a little psycho). That's good for me. But on the other hand there is not enough depth in the characters. Supporting characters etc. You have to try not to make them one-dimensional. Especially as the realms rise in power scale. And yes the first chs could polish - character interactions). Plus I don't have a problem with it but you can definitely be criticized for creating such a psycho Mc in 10 chs and completely killing his character development.
I have a feeling that Chen Feng will be the cause of Xiao Ye's death 😄
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original Rise of the Hollow [Hiatus]
A soul from Earth wakes up as a hollow in the Bleach universe. Then a robotic voice tells him that he died but saved his soul. This story is about our protagonist becoming stronger without discriminating between true or false, good or evil. Warning: 1- My English level is not good and I'm still improving. Sometimes I get translation help, so if that bothers you, don't read this fanfic at all. 2- In this fanfic, the MC's alignment is generally chaotic evil, so keep that in mind before reading. 3- I'm still improving my writing style, if you're not looking for an amateur job, this fanfic is not for you. 4- Although Harem, smut and r-18 are not at the beginning of the story, they will be later. So don't come back later and badmouth the story here. If any of the above conditions are not suitable for you, I strongly recommend you not read this. Tags : #evilmc #dark #r-18 #harem8 Chs 587 收藏
Would things have changed if I had read all the free chapters, that is, 19 chapters, instead of 16? LoL
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