OK. I have to say you managed to hook me like a fish in your net. Good job. Do I really need 140 characters? What's the point of it? [img=faceslap]
Just for one girl? This one certainly didn't watch Helen of Troy.
Well, I was referring to the class, but it seems easier that way, so I changed the reference. Thanks!
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Done. I just edited the errors I found. By the way, thanks for your comment. Now I know I don't just have ghost readers. Hahaha!
For now, there is no devil. Hahaha!
Arrival of the Apocalypse
Gricard System in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · BigNight
Very good. I just think the synopsis leaves a lot to be desired, after all, there are many soap operas out there with towers. It would be nice to leave some hints about what exactly your Divine Tower is in the synopsis. How, what she can it give, and what is its purpose? Although described in Chapter 2, the synopsis is still what most attracts the reader's interest. In addition, the chapters are very short and the recommended is 1.5k words. Good writing! Good writing!
Interesting plot premise. Although I didn't read many chapters, I was easily drawn into the story from the moment it opened. There are a few minor grammatical errors that have been pointed out by a reader that are not many and can be easily corrected.
My rating is 5 stars, in addition to the plot being original and presenting a good plot, this is a beginning author like me and all beginning authors should be encouraged. Only we beginning authors know how rewarding it is to receive a 5-star review. Good luck and keep up your good writing.
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original Gricard System in the Apocalypse
Alex was still processing the fact that he had been reincarnated into another world in the body of a 15-year-old student, Agnus Vorhells, the youngest son of a baron, when an ethereal voice resounded through the heavens: [Mortals of Havengard, your sins have exceeded quota bearable by the Gods of the Eternal Void. Receive Divine Judgment]. As Havengard evolves with the arrival of the legendary mana, the now Agnus testified that the first kill would drop a spiritual book called Gricard, while the second kill onwards would drop a spirit card. However, after he killed his first zombie, a cold voice echoed in the depths of his soul: [Ding!] [Welcome to the Gricard System!]9 Chs 45 收藏
I literally got tired of waiting. I want to see blood.
'You finally got tired of waiting...'
World of Knights
Fantasy · MyIncarnation