Fixed! Thank you :)
Update please?:)
What I imagine Cleyera looks like
Here’s Silver:)
What I imagine Jun looks like
Very excited about this one. Original premise in a well written story. Love the use of details and how realistic it is with MC being dumped into this new world. I’m almost finished reading and I’ve loved every chapter!
This paragraph for example, was put together oddly. Do Rosa and Hilda’s levels almost match or do their levels almost match that of the Virbank gym? Wording it more like: The girls at last had Pokémon who’s levels matched. Rosa breathed a sigh of relief as she realized she no longer felt like dead weight on the team. Being the same level as Hilda brought her confidence and a feeling of strength she hadn’t before known. (Really touch on emotions for character development) In preparation for their upcoming gym battle they set their minds on a day of heavy training.
All this is the preparation for their gym battle. They didn't struggle much against their first gym with their slight over levelling but now they almost match.
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Anime & Comics · Blur182
Like I said, your story brought me to this platform. So I really want to follow it and be impressed. You have the desire and the potential and you’re obviously passionate about your story. I’ll go through and find a paragraph to comment on that I can use to give you structure advice.
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original Pokémon Provocation
This story will have numerous detailed Pokémon battles. Each chapter I write gets a little longer. Some characters are original and others are from the games or anime. If you enjoy detailed writing and action give this story a shot! Description below. Vanni, otherwise known as Jun, daughter of Giovanni makes her escape from the clutches of Team Rocket. Ready to write her own story she trains to crush Giovanni and Team Rocket. While in hiding to become stronger Jun faces challenges before she’s ready and meets siblings she never knew she had. Follow her as she trains to bring down the organization that held her captive for years. Chapter added once a week minimum27 Chs 70 收藏
Yes for ease of the reader mainly. (I can’t keep track when I’m reading fics with tons of moves)
"Protect!" I've never had to use all four moves during a battle before…. Arrow's body becomes shrouded in a sphere of solid, opaque energy. Brine smashes against it to no avail. The sphere from protect shatters, exposing a full force Aerial Ace.
Pokémon Provocation
Fantasy · Shatterstream