Hi so I just found this on reddit and I got to say this is pretty good! the characters are great especially how you handle the dialogue and the premise and plot is interesting enough to keep me to invested. Oh and if you have time I was hoping if you could critique my webnovel Deadmen Manhattan. You don't have to if you don't want to, you can ignore this if you want. I just want to know your thoughts that's all.
Just pick a name that sounds cool to you or something.
So I want you to choose on which name sounded good for my superhero isekai novel and comment it down below.
Anime & Comics · Jingle303
sorry this is dropped 😭
for now I added huggy and mommy long legs in this fanfic.
Well not much but I get your point👍
She cursed. Regretting on running further to the mines. Izuku was worried about Usagi's safety. Observing her left leg and injury further as he turns to Dogday " we need medical attention, Usagi could you transform yourself back to your plushie form "
Anime & Comics · Jingle303
Yup, but it won't show yet later on in the story
Sorry I'm really working on my grammar. I've been testing quillbot for a while and I'm also getting used in rewriting drafts ( though it's sad that won't be able to updating chapters frequently ). But nonetheless thanks for the honest review🥰
Yup when Izuku uses his quirk he would sometimes feel what the smiling critters are feeling. but it's faint so Izuku couldn't exactly tell why he was feeling that way once he summon a smiling critter.
The green rabbit plushie felt her consciousness is drifting back. Her eyes slowly opening as the blurry sight of Izuku's room was improving slowly to the point that she sorta recognize it.
Anime & Comics · Jingle303
Huh never noticed that when I watch mha. I guess I kinda forgot that part sorry.
Izuku, Dogday and Catnap look up at the Titan like Zero pointer. Standing there infront of them as it's motionless inactivity cause an aura of threat that still linger in there minds.
Anime & Comics · Jingle303
Well.... I was thinking of editing the whole story since I haven't touch webnovel because of school. so expect big ( and I mean BIG ) changes to the story. I'll try to balance school and my focus on this book so it will take a while. But thanks, your the very first person who commented on this book and I appreciate you for that, but don't expect much of this book so I don't disappoint you. thanks again for reading my story.
Deadmen Manhattan ( in hiatus )
Urban · Jingle303