First of all - Lovely chapter ❤️🥰 While you said it didn’t go as planned and Cain was being stubborn, I still think it worked out great! Bond magic is feel more and more unique each time a chapter drops! Second of all - sorry that works been tough on you 😢☹️ but (and I’m hopeful others agree with me) I’m okay with waiting for this amazing story! So don’t put too much pressure on yourself.
Having followed and read this book as it’s been released, and having read to the current highest chapter (55), I’m ready to review! I haven’t seen any grammar errors, and the author has a very clear writing style! The author developed and presents their world very well, and many of the characters have distinct personalities. Emotions and internal conflicts are written wonderfully! Despite the slow burn aspect of the book, I have not felt any major downtime or boredom whenever I read this story, and it always feels like things are building up to something major or significant to the story.
Omg 🥵🥵🫣 I’ve been given so many treats today - side note: ate some delicious cookies - and this is an incredible way for me to end my night! The battle between Damien’s rational side and his wolf side was really well written! 👍 Ahhhh the perfect gif (for the perfect cliffhanger)!!
Very 🥵! This chapter was really interesting :> Cain seems to have a lot of… thoughts🫣… Sucks that you didn’t keep your writing streak, but don’t beat yourself up too much over it! ❤️ Hehehe
Yess smart Damien & Cain - while I was expecting one thing (from, like u said, the beginning paragraphs😳🫣), we instead got a very interesting and well written conversation that will push the plot forwards! Also not Damien seducing Cain with his neck to prove a point🥵😂
Hey wanted to let you know the sentence starting with “The sensations were overwhelming -“ got a little confusing with so many commas! I think seperating it into 2-3 sentences would make it less confusing. You can use the places where you already have transition words (or other places - up to you) to be the start of your new sentences. What I mean is below: (“.Then, there was the way his cool breath…”) (“ .And finally, …”) In the end however, this is completely up to you :>
Damien did not want to be feeling the things he was currently feeling. He was clutching the dagger Cain had given him so hard that the muscles in his hand were starting to cramp. But even that discomfort wasn't enough to draw his mind away from the dizzying, nigh-overwhelming sensation of the steady press of Cain's tongue against his bare skin. He'd known, at least subconsciously, that contact with his mate was meant to be soothing. And as much as he would have liked to forget, his body still remembered the way it responded the first time he caught the vampire's scent. The sensations were overwhelming - first was the gentle hold the vampire had on his hands as he slowly dragged his tongue over Damien's wrist, then up his forearm, pausing at every cut, every scrape, then there was the way his cool breath fluttered over the wet trails he left on Damien's skin, soothing yet raising goosebumps in its intensity, and finally, there was the moment when Cain hovered over a particularly deep cut, one of the bites Crowe had left on the inner crook of Damien's arm, where the veins hovered nearer to the surface. His lips had closed around the mark completely, and he'd sucked.
A Bond of Fate and Blood (BL)
LGBT+ · VHBlood
:> Good job describing Cain’s inner turmoil! I really enjoyed this chapter👍. The almost sensually slow ‘care’ by Cain while licking Damien’s wrist is unexpectedly hot and the bloodlust is just fuel for the flames 🥵🔥 Keep up the good work! Couldn’t find anything better so here is Cain licking Damien’s wrist (banana Xd)
Ah yes that is true 😅, Damien does still technically have the choice to decline Cain’s offer. However, Damien has sustained a lot of injuries, and it was stated that it would be unwise for him to end up shifting on the full moon in his current conditions. Cain’s method would also be (if it works) the fastest way for him to heal. So, if Cain licking the wounds like a dog is the most reasonable option (which sounds crazy in and of itself) right now, then the shirt must go! 🤷🏼♂️
Yes… yes… take off the shirt Damien😈 Anyways we love consent ❤️ even if it’s not necessarily a choice in these conditions. Keep up the good work!
For the omega of this relationship, Damien is being pretty bossy 😉 lol I love the necessity of the mark that neither of them originally wanted (Damien’s beginning to be a little…), because misery loves company :> Also so sorry but I’ve been really busy lately so I haven’t been able to read too much :(
A Bond of Fate and Blood (BL)
LGBT+ · VHBlood