Biscuit_willieon

The story itself is quite likeable. Understand your planned story of this novel. The writing quality is excellent, and some of the humor is quite perfect. However, this story has two major flaws that makes me not give it above a 7 out of 10. And that is, one, the speed of the novel, and two, the lack of character development, besides Leo, because you go in-depth about him a lot. But I'm talking mostly about the side characters and the inhabitants of the local world when they travel. For example, for issue number 2, Nick Fury He is an intricate and quite paranoid character from the MCU. But every time I see him in a chapter in a novel, it doesn't feel like him. It feels like a skin-deep interpretation of him. Because even if he accepts, he's gonna ask many more questions, if you know what I mean. It also includes the other characters as well. In Fury's world, Fury herself is described in similar ways, lacking the feeling of Fury. If I know what I'm trying to say, it's that You immediately drop these characters and not give an explanation why and how they feel, like you expect the reader to know about it. But good novels, like an animation maker, tells you how and tells you the story and the side stories of those characters and how they feel and interact in the world. Your characters feel more like NPCs, if I must say it bluntly. like programmed to say it or feel it when an event happens. And what even irks me the most is the chapter of Venus, finding out about the simulation that Leo created. You don't go in depth, you give a brief history about Venus and why it goes on, but it doesn't tell us what she feels. Not any contradictions or anything else. It just says she feels nothing. And that's it. And that irks me because I thought soon after that past, when Venus and Leo confront each other in that part, you're going to see a side story about her, about how she made her decision, how angel Leo confronted her in the first time. But we haven't gotten that at all. And that makes it extremely disappointing, personally, in a story narration. In simpler terms, I love this novel. I love the concept, and especially I like your writing type. But... It's all ruined and becomes bland when we don't know anything else. It feels like a puppet show, your novel. Quite entertaining, but the side characters or the secondary characters doesn't feel like they have any free will. Just program dialogue caused by an event that is already programmed. That's all. This issue can be easily ignored, quite easily, if there's enough content of the main character and his adventures. But the time-washes of brief descriptions of Leo, going quickly, of ascending power fast, and without any detail, makes the story feel extremely rushed. And makes it bland. After all, if major events hit multiple times in an extreme motion, you get used to it. And it becomes bland, even more, if to simulate the weather, needs bigger and much more difficult processes to create those events. What I'm trying to say is, this novel hits with many bigger beginnings and major events, and quickly solves them, and quickly makes the high point in the main meat of the story. But just like what happens if you eat too much steak, you get tired of it, and those major events become bland and boring sooner when major events come up. So, yeah. In conclusion, I love the concept, and I'm a huge fan of the fanfiction Annihilation Maker as well. But personally, you're going too fast, and with not any deeper emotions in the side characters, they feel more like puppets on a string of you, the author. So yeah, this is my recommendation to fix your novel. But in the end, it's your choice to heed or continue on your path. (Personal Statement: To be honest, I'm not thinking these issues should be highly fixed. After all, there's many types of wiring styles that many people create. Heck, you might even prove me wrong if you manage to keep this motion continuing, making minor events feel much more greater. As such, I believe you can follow what the author of the Annihilation Maker had. In simple terms, please slow down. Watching things will ruin and even cause you to rise a block. All in all, I enjoyed the novel. It just has two major issues that I saw when reading it.)