Thanks for the review, I'll make sure to take note of that for future chapters! :D
She sees something glimmering under the garbage and she went closer. She took her metal detector and scanned it, it was a positive so she began digging it out. Kjēl shone her light over the large piece of metal and noticed a familiar mark sculpted onto it. She continued digging through the garbage and found a small lever, she thought it was broken so she pulled it and the big piece of steel began moving. It opened into a drop and Kjēl fell inside, she was inside what looked like a cockpit. She snooped around and pressed a button by accident that activated the operating system in the cockpit. The monitors lit up and Kjēl was startled, she jumped back and fell onto the seat of the cockpit.
Asterion
Sci-fi · Exia_Valentro
The overall premise is very interesting and definitely eye catching. The choice of words are also appropriate and it is very detailed with it's descriptions. The only small issue I had encountered was of the dialogues. I read some of the dialogues a few times before figuring out who stated them. Other than that small hiccup, it's definitely a good story.
I'm really happy to know that. Once again, thank you so much for giving this story a try and leaving very insightful comments.
The Exo-Wars, the war that killed all life on Earth. It happened more than four hundred and fifty years ago. Once mankind began building space colonies, they also fought over territory in space. Humanity's curse of violence against his kind lit the match that set fire to the entire world. Countless lives were lost along with Earth, the remaining survivors seeked refuge on Mars. There, they rebuilt their society and prospered. They have come together as one and have formed XenoMars. The ruling body of humanity which acted as a peacekeeping force that sought to protect and serve mankind. After the formation of XenoMars, many rejected the idea of giving people highly dangerous weapons. A reason to start yet another war, so those against the rule of XenoMars, left for Jupiter.
Asterion
Sci-fi · Exia_Valentro
Noted, thanks for pointing it out!
It's been 6 years ever since, not much has changed but Kjēl lived under a roof and ate warm food on a table. It was all thanks to Shigo, the man who took her in and treated her like a daughter. Kjēl now works for Shigo and she collects scrap metal to trade in Shigo's shop. Their colony is one of many in the Jupiter-sphere, theirs is located farthest from Jupiter and is considered the slums. The wastes from other colonies are brought to theirs and are segregated. Kjēl is one of the people who live off the garbage of others. Once she finds good scrap metal, she trades it for units in Shigo's shop. The metal is then melted and recycled before being transported to merchants who either sell the metal to XenoMars or Jupiter-Astra.
Asterion
Sci-fi · Exia_Valentro
First of all, thanks for taking the time to read my novel. I appreciate every single one of you that stops for a while to read my work.
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original Asterion
Kjēl Io, a girl living in the slums of the Jupiter-Astra colonies, finds a relic of the Exo-Wars. She finds out that the ship is much more powerful compared to the new models that XenoMars used despite it being centuries older. She becomes an asset to the Alliance, being the catalyst which sought out to put an end to the cruel rule of XenoMars. With her ship, Asterion, she will unite humanity once more.18 Chs 10 收藏
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Project Sparrow
As tensions rise between nations, millions of people are caught in the middle. Death tolls rise and the value of human life is discarded as governments solve their disputes by throwing as many bodies as they can at each other. The world now feeding the flames of destruction with hatred and death, faces yet another world war. In the midst of it all, several nations improved their technology and incorporated it within their weapons. The Republic of Lanston, formerly France, Belgium and Germany, led the arms race and began a secret supersoldier program as a trump card to win the impending war. Taking disabled veterans and soldiers who are no longer fit for combat and turning them to lab rats for body augmentations. Wanting to turn them to mindless killing machines, failing and killing most of their experiments in the process then calling them a necessary sacrifice to achieve power over all their rivals. Enter Hilbert Straüss, one of the few who had successful augmentations and is considered the strongest out of the program. They operated under the grid and were mainly used before to kill anyone who opposes Lanston's government. As the war slowly creeps up on the world, Lanston activates the program once more and requested to have all available field agents to be attached to the military. The world will now see a new generation of weapons that will forever change the face of warfare.48 Chs 25 收藏
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A War in Vain
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Look through the eyes of a soldier during the famed "Forgotten war" of the Korean peninsula in this short action story.1 Chs 3 收藏
Will be posting again soon. Just been in a tough spot lately but I'll do my best for you guys <3
Asterion
Sci-fi · Exia_Valentro