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Your story has a big platform. It can grow /expand in seemingly interesting way - in short world building. The settings is good too. I like it

The story seems similar to the anime Gate, but the difference is that they were from a far away planet. The grammar is somewhat confusing sometimes. The story js interesting but you need to slow down a little, the story seem to be progressing too fast. Add something like description or character innrr monolouge or something use to fill the chapter.