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2 years ago
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Why does the author know this? Do they have something they want to tell us?

"Mm-!" What else could he say; it was good. And thank goodness, the bacon tasted nothing like human meat. Human meat tasted a bit more flavorful, with less crunch to it.

The Impurity's Ascension

The Impurity's Ascension

Urban · Tiphereth

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2 years ago
Commented

Rumo!? Is that you?

"That's a Wolpertinger." Scarlett casually introduced, "Don't worry. Whatever you saw, they are harmless as long as you don't search for trouble."

I Didn't Choose the Gangsta System, the Gangsta System Chose Me

I Didn't Choose the Gangsta System, the Gangsta System Chose Me

Fantasy · JhiThan_Ser

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3 years ago
Commented

Why do they always make their voices deeper? That's too cliché! They should try for a higher pitch instead!

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3 years ago
Replied to Young_fruit_Smiley

One of the stories that got picked was 2.35 stars, this one is 3.79 stars. This isn't a very valid point with that in mind.

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3 years ago
Replied to DaoisthPvB6R

Building something on the scale of a planet isn't astronomy, it just isn’t. Also mining away an entire planet and bringing its materials to the sun would require quite a lot of resources as well. This is also completely disregarding the energy requirement for any of this. At this point in time, mining has a theoretical minimum of 53 Terawatt hours per year, this is just a minuscule amount of mining compared to mining an entire planet away. Only the first half-mile of the Earth's 30 mile thick crust has been mined so far, in thousands of years. It would take so long and so much energy to just mine a planet away that it really isn't worth it for a dyson sphere that we don't need. It would likely take hundreds of trillions of Terawatt hours to just mine away enough material to build the sphere, much less to transport the material or even build the sphere itself. Then we have to look into building the transports. Oh wow, that’s even more material to mine and more energy to waste! All in all, building a dyson sphere is a poor idea because it takes too much energy, resources, and it would probably take billions of years to even gather all the energy required to mine the resources for it (this is including the growth of our ability to generate energy).

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H3LL0_W0RLD
3 years ago
Replied to LordJ

The sun still needs to provide light and energy for the rest of the solar system too, not just the earth.

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H3LL0_W0RLD
3 years ago
Replied to UnknownHydra

I think that the point he's trying to make is that it's not that it isn't possible to build a complete dyson sphere around the sun. But that doing such a thing would be stupid and illogical as not only do we not have a use for the excess energy even if we do survive the construction of this massive project, but we also wouldn't have the resources to even build it without destroying the solar system.

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3 years ago
Commented

Pretty stylish if I do say so myself.

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H3LL0_W0RLD
3 years ago
Replied to NEAPOLITAN

I think it’s somewhat of a meme or a saying. I have seen the phrase appear in a few other novels.

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    Fleeing From Fate

    Fantasy ACTION ADVENTURE REINCARNATION SYSTEM MAGIC WEAKTOSTRONG OVERPOWERED REVENGE

    Seth Berner is a boy hated by the gods, they cursed him and tried their best to stop him from growing. After he dies, he learns of a system. After swearing at the servant of a god, he saves himself from another horrible life, and is reborn as a baby prince in a different world. Follow Seth as he learns of his past and grows stronger (or steadily descends into madness). All with the ultimate goal of being the only one able to control his fate. I am new to writing novels so please tell me what I can improve, I will be in your care.

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