Hi semi shameless author here. I might be over estimating my writing capability with this rating but hey! It's my book. Anyways if you like fantasy, with a little humor but strong story you should enjoy the novel. This is my first time writing something substancial so if you have any suggestions I take constructive criticism.
It should be fixed soon, I went in and corrected it.
Nice
Hmm, "He liked the little girl" HMM
Meanwhile, Brian was happy with the development with Andrea. He liked the little girl and both of them were closer now but still he was annoyed that he was almost killed.
Urban · Bad_Road
No, thank you for reading
Alright I can fix that
Alright I'll see what I can do.
Alright I can see that. There is a reason for her blind trust, but I should make it clear here for why that's so. Thank you.
Actually it's correct grammar. When part of a sentence has commas on either side it means that it can be removed from the sentence and it would still be a complete sentence. Not actually pausing, like when you're listing something you don't pause after every comma.
Yes
When A Mage Revolts
Fantasy · Yin Si