or is the vamp still injured because of the leaching mc did?
Elsewhere, in the dense woods surrounding the village, the vampires were gathering. The injured one, Corvin, stood at the edge of the group, his pale skin marred by the remnants of his earlier encounter. The leader, tall and imposing with an air of authority, addressed the group with cold precision.
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so.. do the injuries caused by his claws and fangs linger like in TW since he's an Alpha?
Elsewhere, in the dense woods surrounding the village, the vampires were gathering. The injured one, Corvin, stood at the edge of the group, his pale skin marred by the remnants of his earlier encounter. The leader, tall and imposing with an air of authority, addressed the group with cold precision.
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Story isn't bad at all. I feel like, if you're a stickler then you'll notice the issues, I guess anyone would but a stickler will make an issue of it lol. I've read a number of stories on this site that go from decent to complete garbage in terms of story structure, writing quality and a number of other issues and almost none of them had anything to do with using AI lol, so I'm not sure what the hang up is for someone using it. This one is just at the beginning and I think it's got potential. If you enjoy fanfictions of the TVD world and or of the TeenWolf world then you might just enjoy this, so long as you give it a chance and not let other's sway your opinion before you even open the story. It does need some work but my honest opinion is it's not bad at all, it's very much worth giving a chance.
orrrr... just let him leave and your hunting grounds will go back to normal.. well we know that's not gonna happen so meh lol.
The taller vampire's expression darkened. "Whatever he is, he's a threat. And threats need to be eliminated."
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should change Bar to Inn or Tavern. would fit better with the times I'd think... more likely that's what they would be as they might also have rooms for people like Mc who're just moving through, not residents of the town.
Elias gave a small nod, appreciating the sentiment but knowing he wouldn't linger for long. Marella approached him again, holding a small coin pouch. "Here," she said, pressing it into his hand. "It's not much, but it's a thank you. And go to the bar. Have a drink. You've earned it."
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this might be better with " we have room here" at the end.. or something less.. permanent? Saying you'll always have a place here doesn't make sense as no-one has any idea what happened the night before, so they wouldn't feel indebted to him, not at that level anyway. So he's just some guy that wagoned his daughter from one village to another along with some supplies and anyone could have done that. Way to much trust for people that have the issues they do lol.
"You're a good man," the older man said. "Stay as long as you need. You'll always have a place here."
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I don't understand why this is getting so much negative traffic in the comments lol. Yes there are issues.. actually one comment has a point, it's a half day trip and they decided to take it at the end of the day? lol that's a little silly. That being said, the story isn't bad at all, I've read plenty on here that aren't Ai and they sucked.. like, completely just.. awful brain rot lol. This has potential for sure... so I'm just gonna keep reading. Thanks for the chapters.
the hell is this? why didn't he kill that dude?
"This isn't over," the vampire rasped before disappearing into the forest.
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oh? so he's basically doin a Deucalion and absorbing the energy from the curse... it's "life force" if you will. neat.
Elias finally gained the upper hand, pinning the vampire against a tree. His claws extended as he plunged them into the creature's torso. The vampire screamed, thrashing wildly, but Elias held firm. Then he felt it—a strange pull, like a thread being unwound. The vampire's struggles weakened as Elias instinctively began to absorb something from him, a faint energy that left the creature visibly drained.
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... he's not leaving at night again is he?
The sun hung low in the sky, casting a golden glow over the village as Elias prepared to leave. Marella and her family stood near the edge of the village, their expressions a mixture of gratitude and reluctance. Elias had spent the morning helping them one last time, repairing a loose roof tile and hauling sacks of grain to the storage shed. His tireless strength had become an unspoken reassurance to them, though they never voiced their amazement aloud.
Alpha in Vampire Diaries
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