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[WPC #246 - Silver Place Winner!]
Since he was a child, Isaac was unable to improve his strength no matter how much he tried, like he was cursed by the Gods.
One day, a massive snowstorm struck the peaceful city of Snowstar, wreaking havoc in a peaceful community. Young Isaac was wandering alone in the forest when the snowstorm struck, seeking adventures and excitement, but instead, he found something else that completely changed him and his future.
Several years later, Isaac suffered an incident caused by his jealous classmates, which bedridden him for several months, but after the traumatizing experience, doctors thought that it would take him years before he could overcome his trauma, but against all odds... He overcame it in 2 weeks!
Being heavily sheltered and protected by his family after the incident, Isaac's life seemed dull and kind of boring, but then... The highly anticipated VRMMORPG White Online was released. Without thinking twice, Isaac bought the cheapest VR Helmet available and entered the new world with almost zero expectations, but excited nonetheless.
This is the story of Isaac Whitelock, who will rise from being a protected and weak individual to being one of the sole hopes of the entire Human race.
[Connecting...]
[Welcome to White Online!]
[Legacies awaits you!]
[Do you want to be a Legacy Carrier or Casual Player who history won't remember?]
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Tags: Action - Romance - Adventure - Video Games - Slice of Life - No Harem - R-18 - Yandere - VRMMORPG - Martial Arts - Comedy - Genius Protagonist - Beautiful Male Lead - Worshipped MC - Mysterious Past - Heartwarming - Cute Female Lead - Clingy Lover - Weak to Strong - Gods - Loved MC - Calm Protagonist - Rich Protagonist - Legacies - Historical - Famous Protagonist
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exp is my sword and I am it's wielder. Push me to level 4 and I shall be your benefactor. so I pray that you hit the like button and give me my exp Exp amen
Alekzi asked me to leave a review as a fellow author and as the editor of this novel, and I will be as truthful as possible. I wanted to read this, as I am a friend to Alekzi, but I couldn't bring myself to do it at first because as an English native, it was difficult for me to deal with the sentence structure. After some chit-chatting, we came to an agreement that I would help him bring the writing up to snuff. It will take a while, but I'll be doing it as fast as I can for his future readers! Daily released chapters will be edited before posting, and I will tackle the former chapters as I can (: As for the story itself, I regret not reading this sooner! Even if there are issues with the grammar, Alekzi has had experience from writing many books before this, and he has truly mastered the art of captivation! The plot of the novel up to current is well thought out, the outline of current and future novel events is meticulously drawn out, and 'almost' every chapter has just enough entertainment to keep you hooked! Isaac is an intelligent (Not a super genius) character who almost completely lacks prior experience in MMO or VRMMO settings. He doesn't just automatically start as the best in the world as is seen in so many other VRMMO novels, and is actually somewhat outclassed in the earlier chapters. As White Online isn't set up like any VRMMO that was released previously in this world, his intelligence and lack of video game experience actually assist him in climbing his way up the ranks from the bottom of the barrell! I have enjoyed my read, and I hope that my work in raising the quality of this novel helps many others enjoy their read as well!
I was scrolling through new novels and found this novel. I like vr novel so I decided to read this. My first thing to compliment is the writing quality. 5/5 no grammar mistakes, fight scenes are not long. The world building is pretty good as more and more info are given. Keep it up author
(Review 150 chapters+) Positives: The story is very good, with many intriguing mysteries, the real and virtual worlds are very interesting and the game system is great. It's very good to read, with a consistent pace. The story doesn't move too slowly or too fast. Negatives: At the beginning of the work, the author abuses the status window a lot, sometimes unnecessarily. But then he fixes it. I think the care and jealousy of the protagonist's family is too exaggerated. The fascination and adoration the girls feel towards the MC is also exaggerated. SUPER NEGATIVE (ROMANCE - WITH SPOILER): In my opinion the author is making a huge mistake with the relationship between the protagonist and Amanda. She has always loved the protagonist, always wanted his good and cares about him. When the MC unfairly became angry with her because of the incident, she continued to love him, always tried to talk to him and suffered alone for a long time. And after the MC finds out the truth, he friendzones her. He loved her and now the author wants to end it all. Whyyyyy?? On the other side is Luna. The protagonist interacts with her 3 times and in these 3 times the time they interact is a few hours. But that's already being enough to want to arouse feelings for her. DOES NOT MAKE SENSE! and it's unfair to Amanda. Sorry for any mistakes. Google translate.
I am your biggest fan. Never forget that. I made you to who you are today. Top 1 fan contribution - Entrail_JI That aside, story really good.
I have gotten to about ch 195 on outside sites. This book is decent in both background and writing. However the character is just out of whack. He is straight but seems gay for the whole first 100 chapters. He is supposed to be super smart but never shows it. The skills he receives are broken for the first and doesn’t make sense. If I remember right the icy shot skill has a percent chance of working works every time when the mc wants it to happen!!! What is the point of the others then!!! Its just constantly annoying to hear the author say he is a genius when the mc shows zero signs of those traits. He even seems to be dense and slow with some of his reactions. Archers were able to jump along branches within the beginning days and the mc is a genius just from doing the same thing??!?!!! That’s not genius if many others are able to do the same!!! Don’t tell us he is a genius, show us!!!! He just seems like a regular protected child that doesn’t know the world well. Otherwise, love the story and the world building. Just take away the genius point and you will have a good story on your hands author.
I'm currently around chapter 40, and so far I have really enjoyed the book. HOWEVER, there is one thing that has been bugging me ever since chapter 1.. the writing style. While I am extremely happy that there aren't many grammatical mistakes (almost none to be honest, which is rare), the author uses far too many simple sentences that it feels like reading a 1st grader's book. "Isaac likes to sing. he enjoys it. Sophia, on the other hand, doesn't. Alice likes her elder brother." Of course, the content of the above example is made up, however, the sentence structure is identical to the story. The author needs to stop having 1 line paragraphs and minimise the use of simple sentences
This review is after reading chapter 151 and as I’m writing this I am nowhere close to being caught up. So some of the things I’m talking about could have changed by now. Alright so the novel overall is pretty good but it has some distinct problems that tend to annoy readers, including me. The story overall has an interesting premise. The characters are interesting and I don’t really dislike any of them(except for the ones your supposed to dislike of course.) The story does tend to fall into some cliches and some situations that don’t make sense at times. Though it’s not really possible to make a completely unique story and for the most part the hiccups aren’t that bad. Now the story itself doesn’t have to many problems, but the ones that it does have show up often enough to be a problem. 1) The author’s first language isn’t English and it’s pretty easy to tell. I personally don’t really care to much but I know it’s a turn off for a lot of people so just pointing it out. 2) In the story the Mc is called a genius by multiple characters as well as the author. This isn’t true at all as he’s shown to be average or slightly above average during the story. (and don’t even get me started on his eq.) The characters calling him a genius is fine as those that do are normally biased and it makes sense coming from them. I would also like to say that this isn’t necessarily a bad thing. The mc doesn’t have to be a genius for a good story. There are plenty of good stories with mcs that are just smart, average, and even ones where the mc is a little slow. I personally think it’s more accurate to call him talented as he’s been confirmed confirmed to learn things fast. 3) This is related to my last point kinda but the author tends to make the Mc not realize certain things that are pretty obvious for the sake of the story. For one it kinda breaks immersion and 2 it further makes calling him a genius seem wrong. As I said before, there’s nothing wrong with your Mc not being a genius, but if based on previous experiences they would be able to figure something out either let them figure it out or change it a bit to where it makes sense that they wouldn’t. The worst part about this one is that within like a minute I can normally think of a small change in the situation or dialogue to make it make sense why he wouldn’t know. It makes it feel like the author isn’t putting that much effort in the story when he doesn’t really come off that way. So overall it’s a really good story premise and I feel like if those problems were fixed the story would be so much better and would probably be a story I’m extremely eager to read instead of just enjoying.
Pros World building Loving family Vr game mechanics Cons MC character is not consistent. He is supposedly a genius but I haven’t seen any such thing from him. Being a genius, he is also oblivious to females around him I don’t mind stories with or without harem. But this one is obviously going for the non harem route with Luna as the fmc but leading lot of girls to the MC. Amanda is not properly resolved
Writing quality is fine and thats a give a way for what the story lacks and the story development is so so, not sure if it will improved in the future, Character Design is a bit problematic, The ppl surrounding the Mc is far from normal, theyre bunch of weirdos that makes one worry, idk if theyre experiencing a mental illness or something, being different from the rest is good but, the author made them off the chart like really. Her family being protective is understandable but her sister being a yandere that seems to infect the other character to the point of being a creepy themeselves is what ticked me off. Idk maybe not just for me but you can also try this one out, might works best and suit your taste.
While the setting of a VRMMO as a backdrop of a story is by no means unique nowadays, the author has managed to lure and maintain interest using the MC's past and the interesting implementation of gods and historical figure significance in the form of legacies - which in the context of this story is essentially inheriting said historical figure or god's legacy within the game. I have some speculations as to the significance of legacies as the story unfolds and further develops, but will refrain from doing so till more clues and hints are given. Also, the gradual revelations of Isaac's past in the form of out of context character interactions, character behavior, and dialogue is a breath of fresh air as most authors like to info dump their readers within the first few chapters the entire background of their main character. The gradual revelations add a layer of mystery that acts as a driving force for the readers to continue reading in order to find out what exactly happened in Isaac's past for his character and the characters around him to behave in certain ways. It makes for a much more compelling way of storytelling as readers have to piece pieces of the puzzles using the clues that are given at that moment of time in the story. There are some jarring details in the entirety of this novel, however, one of them being the constant mention of how "pretty" or "beautiful" Isaac is. From the constant misperception of his gender as a female from characters that do not know him, to his "flawless" skin that the ladies get jealous with envy of. I will give the benefit of the doubt and have faith that this is an intentional detail that the author has included in this novel and that it will tie in somehow to the bigger picture of the story later on. In addition to this, there are some inconsistencies to the author's use of literary devices - namely foreshadowing. Not gonna spoil it here, but it was the kind of foreshadowing that reveals to the reader in a single sentence what will happen in the future directly in an overtly obvious manner instead of subtly giving a clue. The juxtaposition of author's clever gradual revelations of Isaac, the world, and the characters around him and awkward bad foreshadowing is jarring to say the least- especially when the latter almost completely destroyed the surprise of certain aspects of Isaac's development in the plot that I'm sure will play a big role. Not bashing the author for this too much, but just wanted to give some feedback so such improper use of foreshadowing or any other literary devices would be improved in the future and in his other stories. Overall, this story has potential and whilst it got some flaws, those flaws can fundamentally be improved upon if the author sets his/her mind to it. I am personally eager to see the development of Isaac and the plot and from what I have read so far, I would recommend this to all who may be interested when reading the synopsis and give it a go. To those who may be hesitant to dive in, still give it a try and formulate your own opinions as what others may not enjoy, you may love.
How does this novel irritate me? MC is stupid and slow. He is hailed as a genius but does not use his skills in battle. An overrated novel. He doesn't level up after getting the Mythic Helmet, but is a waste of time. I don't understand why there are so many positive reviews. The novel is extremely long. for a drop of the plot, a whole sea of useless information.
Writing quality is very good, very minor spelling mistakes(gendered words sometimes mismatched, couple words are missing a letter or have a wrong letter turning it into another word) overall you wouldn't really notice the mistakes and generally won't be missing any information due to the mistakes. There are some noticeably cringe moments in the book but overall, it doesn't make the book worse. The story development is excellent. The author puts a lot of effort into the story and how it develops. The story lacks much of the info dumps commonly seen in the Vr gaming genre as the story takes more of a wait-and-see approach in understanding how the world works. The story develops outside the Vr world and the author creates a unique world that is not earth to help the reader suspend their disbelief and avoid large info dumps. Overall the story so far is very good and interesting and doesn't feel like a bore to read. The story is still very early in its development but still has interesting plot points that engage the reader. For fans of the Vr genre, this is a treat that is different than other Vr genre books with how there is a real story outside the game and how the main character isn't overpowered or super serious about the game.
Read about 40 chapters and had to stop reading (for now) . Very interesting world and the story seems to also become more interesting . So why did I stop? Well unless you like to read how pretty much every side characters (I guess at least once every chapter) are stunned and/or amazed by how the MC is a guy instead of a girl, how he has such soft skin, and how it makes women envious and men jealous, then this will get on your nerves. The characters designs are often also a bit boring. Instead of describing a character based on unique features (like a crooked nose), you get to hear why someone is beautiful or average. In other words telling instead of showing. It is also hard to gauge the intelligence of this MC. Sometimes he sounds smart, like using a rock throwing game in his favour. Other times he sounds like a idiot, like when he dismisses a skill allowing him to shoot through walls without considering any other uses for it like being able to penetrate armor or shields. If you can read past those kind of descriptions every chapter then I would definitely recommend this. The game is fun, the world is great, and the class is one I don’t think is used often. Props to the author for writing an interesting novel, I just need a break from all the trap and beauty descriptions.
This is honestly a real good novel The world building is really good and the characters are also somewhat unique Although the obsessiveness that the female characters have is rather overdone a bit Overall it’s a really good novel to read
I think this story has a lot of Potential. It may not seem like the Mc may be OP but that's because he's playing casually. I think the Author is gonna write some sort of motivation so that he will play the game more seriously. I also want to know more about he's background that made people call him a genius. That aside I also like funny parts where his family is so overprotective of him and when people find he's a boy😂😂 This novel is a Gem and I hope it gets more chapter in the future.
Hm i like the mc but i dont like overprotective sisters it just makes me uncomfortable but the story is a great read for me and i like it maybe i will let it stockpile till its on chapter 100 and then read it boodbye
I’m loving the story It is one thing to own a library; it is quite another to use it wisely. I have often been astonished how little care people devote to the selection of what they read. Books, we know, are almost innumerable: our hours of reading are alas! very few. And yet many people read almost by hazard. They will take any book they chance to find in a room at a friend's house; they will buy a novel at a railway stall if it has an attractive title, indeed. I believe in some cases even the binding affects that choice. The selection is, no doubt, far from easy. I have often wished someone would recommend a list of hundred good books. If we had such lists drawn up by a few good guides, they would be most useful. I have indeed sometimes heard it said that in reading everyone must choose for himself, but this reminds me of the recommendation not to go into the water till you can swim.
The story is well written and enjoyable to read. The only things I don't really like are the blatant foreshadowing, but it seems to have gone away in the more recent chapters. I also don't really like reading the female character descriptions, as there is a large focus on their curves and breasts. There seems to be quite a big plot that will show its head sooner or later, but I can already tell the main basis of it through the not so skillful use of foreshadowing. The main background of the story is, while not completely original, a refreshing twist on the usual VR stories. Overall a good read, I am excited to see where the story goes.
After writing 100 chapters, I decided to do a new author review. I have gotten a great response so far, and that gave me a boost of motivation to keep writing this; and after writing 100 chapters, I already know that the story is only beginning, there is so much left to write, and I have a hunch that it will take easily over 1000 chapters to complete, maybe even 2000. Second, I have gotten a few toxic messages about how MC's looks, because he looks girly and is around 170cm, so I have gotten a lot of messages about making him taller, etc., and that may happen or may not, I am not going to spoil it, but I have reasoning for his looks and his height, and none of those will change before I am ready to reveal the reasoning of his looks and what happened in his childhood. Third, I have written a lot of mystery, and I enjoyed it immensely. I have given a few subtle hints on the chapters that might reveal why MC is different from the rest, and that White Online isn't as normal as it seems at first, so good luck on finding those. Fourth, I have seen a few theories made by my readers, and I am sometimes terrified of how well you guys found out about some things which still haven't been revealed yet; it is nice to see all kinds of theories, even though some aren't correct, but it is still nice to read those. Fifth, about a love interest. Some of you guys might have read the synopsis and seen the tags, but I will still say this. This will be a No Harem novel with only one love interest, and even if some of you guys like Harem, you guys should still try and who knows, some of you might like it. I decided to lock the chapters only around the 53th chap so that everyone has enough time to read and find out if they like it enough to keep paying for more chapters. Thanks, everyone for reading, and I hope you guys support me in this very long journey.