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摘要
This is my book and English is my third language so expect some sentence, grammar and spelling error.
A headstart for everyone, the MC may have absorbed Aizen and Dr. Gero's soul but that doesn't mean he will become like them. I am creating a character that is different to them so please excuse me is I offended some people.
[Synopsis]
A man was transported in a dark place where ball of light lights appear and disappear from time to time. He approached one and devour one ball accidentally.
He discovered that it is also a soul and he obtain all of its knowledge. He is in glee and starts devouring everything in his vission. Who would have though that a devil was watching him with interest.
Disclaimers:
The Picture I used in the cover is not mine. I found in google and all of the credits for the cover is all to him/her.
I also don't own the anime characters in this book. They belong to their respected creators, only the originals I created was mine.
Thank you for reading this before opening my book. Have a nice day guys!
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"I am going to do everything to protect my new family" !!!! Damn, that's cringy, you already made me hate the mc with this nonsensical childish saying. Boring! Makes me sick this trope. Its one thing protecting your family and another making a whole cringy emotional scene out of it when they even are not your 'true family' but your new meat bag hosts family.
The truth is this is very boring, you know it's okay if you make a cowardly MC, or even a Japanese version beta MC, but it burns me that whenever they reincarnate they say the cliché phrase of "I'm going to protect my family at the cost of what Be it "Obviously, you didn't say it like that, but if you have the memory and experience of 3 super powerful, intelligent, manipulative people, with super distorted ideals, if you have all that, would I act like the MC? what is that to protect the new family you have? Don't you care about your previous family? The family that for years raised you and gave you your love, do you abandon it just like that? The truth burns me the fidelity that the authors who write that crap have, the truth would have preferred that the MC He was an orphan, it would have been better, it is impossible that someone who has the memories of Dr. Gero could love, it is more you have the memory of Aizen the most manipulative person in the anime, it is impossible to love someone when you have the memories of Aizen, so The ideal of being God should be less, but the MC is very cowardly, I really don't like it, have a good day, although I don't like it. I'll give you 3 stars for the grammar and the update rate .. bye
What do i desire?.......Well author I'm sorry but..... I desire your mother....................................................
The writing quality is terrible. Definitely needs a proofread, there isn't even capital letters, let alone punctuation. It hurts the eyes, that's for sure. 1 star. Stability of updates, sure, so far (02/10/2020) the author has updated frequently, almost every day. 5 stars. Story development...I'll be brutally honest....it's forced. The entire narrative of this story is incredibly forced by the author. The author clearly has some goal in mind, and he's working towards it regardless of details. There's sadly no logical progression at all. 1 star. Character design. It's a fanfiction, so the author has a huge advantage in that the character's personalities are pre-built by original authors. Yet somehow this author fails to convey even an ounce of personality. So far every character (including the MC) seems more like cardboard cutouts. 1 star. World background. Now this is where it gets sad. The entire theme of the novel is great. It's extremely creative, but somehow the author's execution of the world leaves much to be desired. 2 stars. Personally, I think the biggest problem with this story is the MC. The protagonist is the character who 'drives' the story, yet this protagonist is lifeless, and bland. In the end, just think of it as a disappointing Japanese isekai.
Ok, it's a good story and all that but I hate the mc, he's is such as fucking moron, be goes into Naruto where there are fucking space alien overlords and gets the memories of a **** ton of strong people yet he doesn't do shit ? Train men, reitsu, etc what the **** are you doing. And author just because he devoured them and not merged them doesn't mean it will influence the dude, it's like seeing a murder happen it will still affect you even if you're just watching cause it's a fucking murder, and you got the Memoires of a bunch of people who killed a **** ton don't ya think ya'd change a bit. Jesus so idiotic
Good plot with a likeable mc. First ch was a bit of a streach but i like where this story is going. Grammer is good and story is a bit mixed up with other anime a little bit. Not in a bad way its kinda refreshing to read. Mc is very intellectual and with intelligence comes manipulation so be warned ith not your goddy 2 shoes mc here he will kill , manipulate,and do everything to acheave his goal. So far in the world of naruto he doesn't seem evil which i appreciate, Being ruthless is fine but too much vileness is a major turnoff.
look guys just a review update. I first review the book based on the name alone. but the story and title matched each other perfectly. this story you can say is in the top 5 of naruto stories i have read. you should definetly give it a read.
Hello all 5 star except update stability 1 star haaa can you work harder what do i pay you for make it 1 chapter aweek at lest or there no stars any more
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Trash dont read MC just fuking idiot fak author Have Be idiot to erite such shit like wtf man how cAn he Be so fuking idiot slldldkdkdldldmmz
I really like it. Pls dont drop it. 👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻
Buena historia, solo actualiza mas seguido y no lo dejes en el olvido tanto tiempo para tus lectores que le agradan tu novela, asi que continua con la historia que hasta ahora esta muy buena, por cierto que el nen y rehitsu se convine con el chakra para que asi no tenga tantos problemas pa explicar sus poderes y tambien que sea facil de entender en la novela
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I haven't read the story but only for the title you deserve a 5 star review. 😈 😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈