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A boy dies and get reincarnated in Vegeta body and get his soul merged with the original. Now follow his history of dominance and how he put not only Vegeta name but also his Saiyan race at the top of all universe.
I do not own the Dragon Ball series. All rights are reserved to Akira Toriyama.
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Hello. i just started reading this story. And i realy like it. But im not sure if im fine with MC stealing Android:18 from Krillin. I know he is punching bag and slap stick humor of Dragon Ball series.But he deserve to be happy. so let him have at least Maron. You know.Bulma look like girl.
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Terrible grammar, terrible sentence structure, bad character design, bad story telling and an excuse of English isnt my first language. Don't release a public story if you haven't got an english speaking editor or your english isn't even as good as a 7th graders.
Please be consistent and update regularly. The story has great potential. I believe that if you keep up the work, you'll be able to overtake the highest rated DBZ fanfics.
fun fact, one of the easiest ways to loose readers is to ignore basic rules for writing, such as don't write conversations in a fic like you would in a screenplay. don't identify who's speaking by just writing their name. if you must specify who said what, use descriptors.
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Super Sayan 4 Royal BLUE.!!!! This would put Ichigo close to Grand Priest power.~
so far the things are ok here (good grammar, good plot and the world building is going well) i recommend it……………………. …………………. …………………. …………………. …………………. ………………….
Up to date chap 43 im liking this very much the overall story is fun and well structured the only nitpick for me would be the update stability is a bit random sometimes Besides that 10/10 would recomend
I'm liking how the story goes, keep going so you're doing well. I always hope a new chapter comes out and that you upload this story more often 10/10 super recommended to read
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Nice story.~ PS for you. Im glad your Vegeta will not treat Bulma like OG did. Lets be honest OG Vegeta treated Bulma terrible.