摘要
"kill them, kill them all.
Bring out everyone's heart
Burn everything so that no one can escape from here " ...
''Please have mercy on us, we are willing to serve you as your slaves."
Slaves Hahahaha! 'God' did you see I am having fun.
you have taken away my mother I will take away your children.
...
'Worship me! humans."
*** VAMPIRES AND LUST ARE A COMMON COMBINATION SO *******
[ some chapters may have explicit scenes but
if in case anyone has any problem please skip this novel]
when a vampire is more obsessed with a girl than his thirst for blood.
In the year 1950, a table massacre was going on in a village. A pa pureblood vampire was standing there enjoying this massacre ...
Not too far away he saw a woman fighting with many vampires all alone like a 'one-man army'.
Anyone who sees her once can tell that she must be a witch but the pureblood thinks she is not a witch.
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"She tasted sweet, like oranges, liquid sunshine in my mouth as we kissed, our tongues playing together."
''Darling why your lips were swollen
, Did anything bite your lip?" Smirking Majesty held her close ...
''It's because of you," She glared at 'His Majesty.
Her Majesty slowly caressed her lips with his thumb then put it into his mouth and lick that thumb slightly, ''Your lips are tasted so good, I want to take a bite one more time."
She ran back to her room holding her blushing face.
"It seems like I haven't been expressing the intense feelings I have been harboring towards you."
(The Cover is not mine)
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Very intriguing start. Well done author! The pace, word building, writing style are all good. It's still in the early phases of the story, and I look forward to more chapters from the author!
Here are my thoughts based from what I read so far, World Building: Well to be honest the world building decent especially with the village and the vampire place. I also like that author indeed shows some of the atmosphere in this world especially with the vampire side. But, I truly believe the author will expand more about the world itself and how the human will react with the vampire especially the main girl, Elsa. Character; I personally think the characters in this novel are very distinct with one another either on appearance and even the personality. Gabriel is ruthless type of vampire that love to speak in dramatic fashion, while Elsa is typical clumsy girl that I hope the author giver her development and also Gabriel too. Because of those character development, it can make the story more exciting to read. Overall, I do like the author smooth writing style and quite descriptive at the same time, but I also find some nitpicky things in my opinion. Which is I found in some chapters, there are a dialogue that becoming a wall of text or just very long dialogue that become like a paragraph even thought only one character speaks. My suggestion about this is just spacing out the dialogue or give a brief context before continue the dialogue if only one character talks. Thank you very much and Keep up the good work!! ![img=recommend]
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So let me start by saying, the book cover alone made me want to read it and when I did I just had to keep it, am a huge fan of vampires so this book got me smiling, the ruthless vampire made my heart swell 😉keep up the good work author.
I've never been a fan of vampire based novels due to it being an over used genre or if used written about like some sloppy Twilight romance knock-off. But this is more gritty. Well done to the author for using a horse instead of flogging a dead one.
The story is amazing, I enjoyed reading the entire novel, so please keep the chapters and never leave it be. The characters are lovable for me, especially since I love this type of setting in a story. but... I don't mean to offend you or anything, but update the chapters and learn how to use correct punctuations.
Twilight meets Beauty and the Beast! Love Elsa already and I'm barely ten chapters in. Her pure innocence is honestly so refreshing! I can't wait to see how her personality contrasts with our MC. A small complaint is that there are a few grammatical errors, but it doesn't ruin the overall reading experience. Honestly, I'd say it doesn't even matter, especially when the plotline is so interesting. Great work author!!
Your style creates a sense of fear and excitement in the readers mind. The character design is just perfect. I am eager to read more of this novel, i have it has a lot of plot twists in store! The book cover is on fire! I got interested the moment i saw it. Added to library! I hope you exceed my expectations!
If you're drawn to this novel because of the title, it certainly doesn't disappoint. No other way to describe the relationship between the MC and this vampire than an obsession. The pace of the story flows nicely and it is in fact quite interesting. Although there are things I wasn't able to understand due to what seems to be a language barrier (I'm assuming English may not be the author's first language) but despite that I was still able to enjoy reading it. Having an editor would help this novel a lot. Nice work, author 👍
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Amazing start! And that's rarely a common occurrence among new novels. Nothing to say about the stability of updates, author is doing well. Characters well crafted thus far, easy to connect to them. World background also well developed. I can't wait to see more. A good read overall, keep it up, author-kun! I'll be looking forward to read what's yet to come.
I think everything about it is great; the authors writing stile, characters description, intriguing plotline, coupled with the attractive cover. I'll rate this novel five stars.
Amazing start! Exciting premise and the characters are portrayed realistically and are easy to connect to. I can't wait to see more. A great read on a lazy weekend. Good luck, author!
The story of a witch and vampire is really intriguing. Your writing is marvellous and the story plot is awesome. I really like the twists and turns of this story. I am looking for more chaps and recommend everyone to give this story a try.. you will love it💜😊 All the best and keep going author.🔥
Gabriel’s narcissistic personality really mirrors a pureblood vampire. His obsession to the girls gaves a mysterious effect to the novel. I really love how you described his personality. Keep up the good work author!
The world of vampires with the dark theme has always been my fav this story already got me hooked up not gonna lie. The MC is really scary T_T but still cant help to fall in love with him! cant wait to read what happens next!!
I really love the story. not a Vampire Fan but this one got me. hope to read more!!! I recommend this book. hope to read more. write soon. I can't read enough.
Action✔ Blood✔ Gore✔ Vampires✔ what more could you ask for? It's a fight between good and evil but not your typical one. The MC and the other characters are very well written and so far it has not disappointed in what it promises to offer!
Love the cover page! It's original and very catchy. First of all, I have to confess that vampires, elves, etc... that's not my cup of coffee, but I will try to be objective ;) The plot is intriguing, and I have got an impression from the first few chapters that you have an idea for the whole story (a huuuuge plus for that). Your characters are interesting, you describe the backgorund from the beginning. I think you're doing great! Don't worry about the errors, we all make them. Ask your readers to point it, so it will be easier for you to correct them. Good luck with the contest!
Rating it 5/5 :) Review after reading Chapter 5, (Actual chapter 5 lol) Some pointers: Writing quality. The author has a rich story to tell. Could use some proof reading but the lapses didn't affect the overall readability. Easy to understand too. If anything, I would suggest making the paragraphs not too lengthy. Sometimes, air quotes for character's dialogue make a paragraph too lengthy. A good style to shorten it and give more life to it is by starting the dialogue in a whole new paragraph. Story development. Has a strong start. Good exposition as it detailed not just the characters but the setting itself. The zeitgeist of the writing gave justice to the time setting. Good job! Character design is good and mysterious as the first chapter already gives a "problem" need solving, why his majesty is acting like that. The MC vampire king also maintains his (I could guess the author did it this way) narcissitic character. Overall, if the author could retain a proofreader's help, this will improve the writing tremendously as it already has a good plot and story. Another tip I just learned, perhaps you could make an Auxiliary chapter instead of putting the deleted chapter on Chapter 5, since auxiliary is always on top.
Wow, I like the back story very much. It is a unique one, and the era of time is also the 1950s. The paragraphs are kind of so tall, but it was fine. Highly recommendation keep going P.S: "she tasted sweet, like oranges, liquid sunshine in my mouth as we kissed, our tongues playing together.”.. oooh i like the description so cute.
The book cover is fantastic as it made me excited to read the novel even before opening it. I also like the way how Gabriel is described. It's a mix of mystery and fear.