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Zeus, a 18 year old boy got sent into reincarnation by our ever faithful Truck-kun and wound up being born as Monkey D. Zeus, Monkey D. Luffy's twin brother.
Um hello peoples well im gonna be honest this is my first time writing something like this (fanfic/book/yea) so i would appreciate the feedback on anything im gonna try and write as much as i can hopefully you like the story i have in mind. Thanks
Cover picture is not mine
btw Oda's lawyers dont sue me i dont own One Piece
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The heck with this story....... It's like author is waiting anything he wants. First our MC's hight is too short and he tells future to garp from the beginning and he believes, it like hell he would and our mc planning to live marine and garp is like ok use as much resources you like get strong and betray marine.
The enel fight scene was just a huge turn off for me. I can understand the reasoning behind it but it really just took the wind out of sails for me. I think the story and author are good and I might come back and read but for now it will just remain a disappointment. The mc is made out to be this invincible op mc that is feared, but really doesn't hit that point. Gets turn into a slave, does not do anything impressive, and gets the people he loves hurt. I don't really know what to think I was excited for this fanfic and right now just filled with disappointment and can't read it anymore. Anyways good luck author and good writing.
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What should I say? The story started good, until the skypiea arc. It goes from good to extremely bad. I know the author try too much to make the MC develop but the result of it became extremely bad. Also...also...also... There was too much BS when the skypiea arc and after that...Sorry author, you really started good but then sigh~, buy everyone try to read and if it fits to your taste try it.
This is one of the best fan fics I have come across I don’t know why I see all the hate people are too quick to judge I think that everything that happens is really good so far he is a little weak rem currently chapter 27 but I’m sure he will get stronger but this one piece fan fic is my favorite that I have come across and he only told the person he is in love with that he reincarnated besides merry who knows everything. One thing I could say is more merry because those interactions are funny. But honestly don’t see why people hate it I don’t see a problem with an mc struggling every once in awhile.
Don't really know what to say? I'm only 6 chapters in, but it's enjoyable and that's it really. Mc is a cool guy, he seems real laid back which is nice.
God Dammit! I tried to get this to 5 stars, but I couldn't lie about the update stability. Sorry 😅. This fanfiction is just amazing, a whole bunch of humor, good relationships, and realistic stuff put in one. Yes, I'm a little annoyed with how the Battle Of Marineford ended up like, but I at least understood why it went like that. Luffy and his crew, after all, needs some motivation to level up, yeah? I hope you'd continue updating, and not abandon this lovely book. Ja ne! (**. I might make it a full 5 star if the update stability gets better.)
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Honestly this book is one of my favorite it really good and the story has developed nicely and the mc is a good mc and the love interests is good
I really enjoyed this book it's funny, unique, and the romance it's pretty good. I also feel like the way you portrayed the characters is pretty accurate and also how they develop through the story. Overall I think your story is really good. Don't take the other bad comments to heart theirs always haters, and won't be able to please everyone. Your story is good as it is so far(made it to ch27), and I'm not the only one who thinks that base on your power ranking.
I really like this book, it's pretty funny and interesting. MC interaction is hilarious. While the storyline is almost the same (as of this day) it doesn't feel like copy paste from original and refreshing.
The only problems I can think of are; the grammar, and how things like excitement aren't expressed very well. Other than that it's a really good story, I just hope the author won't stop writing it, because I remember reading a naruto fanfic that updated twice a day but it stopped after like 150 chapters.
I have read until chapter 22 and i gotta say this is one if not the best one piece fan fiction i have read. Its original and the pace in it is very good normally you would have to read 100+ chapters to get past the first arc. Keep up the good work author!
I thoughy its going to be ****ty fanfic again since mc following and watching strawhat crew from the dark, oh boy turn out im wrong, its really fun and mc kinda bit troll,cant wait for next update, i recommend it
You know what, as an author you got very less creativity. Reading this fan-fic feels like i am reading the one-piece manga just from Zeus's point of view. Atleast make him do something different, something new and not just follow luffy and crew just for sightseeing.
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Hmmm the character is very childish and during the first chapters he is an incarnate person how to behave like a stupid child. As if you put that he is embodied only to attract those who like reincarnation and these stories because it appears as an original character growing in the world and not a person so transgenic