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It is now in the fanfic section if you want to read it the search the same name(+fanfic) in Fanfics section on webnovel.
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I find this story hard to read. There are a bunch of spelling mistakes. You forget to add spaces and you basically make the character's super bland. I hope this helps in your writing. P.S. Stop adding emojis.
A ****ty self fullfillment story. Nothing seems real and it is too fast paced. Read it if you have time to spare, but I won't recommend it.
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Thanks for Fan-Fic, your work is great, me and my friends were very excited waiting for the next chapter, don't let it fall..............................................................
Buddy you're letting this story get boring because 90% of the time they're having sex and no adventure nor emotion just sex you should just say '' we had a long night of love '' and make the story more interesting because it's going downhill
More chapters please! More chapters please! More chapters please! More chapters please! More chapters please! More chapters please! More chapters please!
MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! MORE!!! DON'T DROP THIS
Isn't these too big of an harem.........🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔😓😓😓😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪😪🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦
Man, i really dont like your novel.... Just dont give a shit about a damn plot.... MC present already altered the plot.... This is why i dont like some fanfiction novel.... Because some author who's doesn't want to change the plot Just for the sake of having more chapter and always give some shitty excuse about the consequance if MC Change the plot..... Huh, meh.... Just another brainless author....
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Complete wish fulfilment. English is fine, it's readable but with errors, text lingo, etc. Power system and wishes are whack, but those don't matter at all since the MC is broken, and the story is about fantasy fulfilment. MC is hollow and so are the characters. Reads like a script, rather than a story. Not my type of story, but definitely has a reader base that will be interested. Maybe 13 year olds that want some something to store in their spank bank. TL;DR: Don't think while reading and you might be able to read all of it. Not for those looking for quality but some mindless time-pass material.
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Cliches and difficult to read because of poor placement and grammar. That's all my opinion in the first to second chapters.