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For a while I have read over all the cut and paste concepts on the Pokemon world trying to make the host strong as well as his Pokemon using the gamer system. I understand it's a dangerous world and you want to give the MC extra plot Armour. I thought about this and realized that the host would rarely fight in matters that needed strength except in situations that dealt with Legendaries. If that becomes par for course though in the story.
What's the point of making this a long term novel that deals with the growth of a character. I would've set this as a short novel that deals with an overpowered MC that one shots all situations that need it. Also I wish to point out that Pokémon have sentience. The world also has abundant food with berries being around and the things that happen in Pokedex's in the games, I'm gonna try to stay partially away from as this is rated at a rating lower than 18+. (That's mostly because I find cursing unnecessarily to be just plain bad etiquette. I can understand if it happens when something bad occurs and you can't control your mouth. But flippant use of them just to annoy people is just that. Annoying...)
The original story is also about friendship, journeying, and finding a purpose in the world they're in with their friends. Sabrina, Dawn, and May deal with contests. While Ash, and Iris love battling. Brock even finds a purpose on his journey as a breeder fully going into the field instead of just pursuing it as a side hobby like before when he had to take care of his brothers. As such I find it, while not useless for writing. A complete disappointment and withdrawal from the nature of what this world represents. What with hope and friendship being these main parts, and if you're fighting every creature you meet into submission. How is it possible for you to truly bond beyond servant and subject.
Another thing is inside this story I will not limit the host to having 6 Pokemon on his being. No this would only apply to gyms or competitions as these kinds of things would require a more formal structure.
I have decided on a new idea for this system that instead focuses on the Pokemon themselves. This includes knowledge, buffs, items and so on. The system will be less of a RPG stat layout directly as this still exists. But the stats come from training with the other stuff like others would train in a real world. The exception being Buffs.
He can also use the system to build a utopia for his Pokemon. He can even slow down the time inside to gain larger training time later on for specific species which grow slower like Ninetails or various Ghost Pokemon. Enough of this Synopsis and rant though and on to the story.
Ps. It's obvious, but I don't own this image. So I take no credit for it. And if someone eventually would like to make an image for this story I will thank you. Sincerely.
PPS: Comments help me keep my want to write. When I notice there's not a lot of comments. I second guess my writing, like a lot. Probably for a good reason as I know I like to over analyze things, and I KNOW that's gonna influence my writing. I can see it deeply ingrained. So if you guys like my style please comment.
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Writing Quality 2.5 - readable but need an editor/proofreader Stability of updates 3 - posted december 27th as of now 19 chapters which is slow, but its a fanfic so average rating Story Development 4- is great, i like it very much Character Design 3- should have rated it higher but as of now there are only 2 original characters mc and pokemon. good thing though as author is trying to keep away from writing about canon characters. World background 4 - its the pokeman world, with a twist and for me a good twist by the author. gripe i have with this is that i dont really like to read about depressed mc's that much so i am hoping that the depression will get solved in the future. as of now there aint that much battles the bread and butter of pokemon, and pacing seems slow but still liking it, also grammar needs to be touched up. i like the charm it has, makes it feel very pokemon with friendship and family and such i like the system very much, not very powerful at the start, but has immense game breaking potential which is a plus, makes it feel like youre growing along with the mc and his pokemon makes for a nice daydream like immersion. i maybe biased on my review on this even if my rating for this is slow, its a novel im looking forward to. low rating is there because i dont give perfect scores everytime i review... try to be realistic here. you may like something, but dont be blind to its flaws.
Hello yes I'm ur first(review) now bend down lol jk jk. I realised after reading chapter 2 and seeing the deep feelings the trainer had that there will be a lot of development to come and that the author built a solid foundation for a good story. i hope he/she has it all planned out wish u the best of luck. Please keep the schedule constant if u can't do every day then say, every 3 days or once a week as long as u keep us in the loop u won't loose readers and have a loyal fan-base Thanks for taking the time to write this story p.s. i only know 1 good pokemon story and it only has like 25 chapters :(
Strange I clicked 5 stars on each last time oh well.-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
This fic is for a small niche of fans. You got Pokespeak, fake mons and a MC who degrades mentally. It's well written and the interactions with his pokemon are believable. I however think the system is broken and he's having too many lucky encounters. I personally don't like the direction this story takes, but you could try it out and see..
An interesting take on the Pokémon universe . With subtle node's towards the original story with Ash. . It's also nice to see the main character slowly began to connect to his Pokémon and to the other background characters.😎😎😎
I love how the story is slowly progressing together. I also like the flash back at the end pulling things together. ---------------------------------------------------------------
I like what you have written so far and looking forward for the next chapter to read. Hopefully, the mc will start using his new ghost type pokemon he discover. Maybe he can discover a new Dragon or fairy type??? Who knows right?? The character development that is presented is good and I like you didn't make him op to soon. I like that how you presented his personality and took time to analyze his abilities. Overall, it's an enjoyable time to read and hope you continue and post chapter 26 very soon!!!
Very interesting a new take on Pokemon fanfiction I like the fact that he's adding in new Pokemon what's a good read that suggests anyone who likes Pokemon to read this novel
pls update its been 10 months almost a year this was an awesome pokemon fanfic also make the mc less depressed and more awesome chad like pls update
I wish for more updates if it is possible, this is a fantastically amazing story and there is currently a cliffhanger at the end. I have checked some of the authors other books and the last update on a story I could find was about 4 months ago wish for more of this amazing story!!!!!
I really like the story. Progression good. It is also readable. Plot is freshish. Too bad that this is on pause or hiatus or long update................................... not sure but it is a good novel to pass time.
I love this novel,this novel is one of the better novels out here and I was very happy to catch my eye on this when I was looking through pokemon. It's a shame that I think it got dropped thought.
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An enjoyable and new take on the Pokéverse. It shows that even though the mc has a system that he still struggles to get stronger even though strength isn’t his main goal. The fact that the mc still struggles with problems from his previous life is also a welcomed thing that often disappears immediately after reincarnation in other fan fics. A wonderfully slow paced story that I wish updated more. Thanks for creating a great story but please update. Love, another one of your fans/readers.
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