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摘要
After being hit by a truck, the protagonist woke up in the hospital in the body of Ryoto, a step-sibling of Rito and Mikan Yuuki.
At first, everything seemed normal besides seeing anime characters in real life, but during class, he got a notification...
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*PING*
*New quest*
Mission: Be the first to finish writing a test and do a Bully Maguire dance as you go through the hallway.
Reward: 100 SP, shop feature unlocked.
Fail: You'll be emo Peter for one week.
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...Shit.
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English is not my first language, and I'm still an amateur, but I hope it'll be at least interesting fanfic.
The cover doesn't belong to me. I just found it.
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I don't even care how the story turns out the bully Maguire dance Mission won this review 💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯
well... the grammar is ok. but this is one of those super ultra annoying systems with ridiculous punishments and way to OP rewards. chapter 5 and 4 quests done he gets spiderman powers and all seen eyes of god". i doubt this gets to 20 chapters
If Harem has a million Haters, I am one of them . If Harem has ten Haters, I am one of them. If Harem have only one Hater, then that Hater is me. If Harem has no Haters, that means that I am no longer alive. If the entire world accepts Harems, I am against the world. Till my Last Breath, I'll hate Harems
Too much comedy and it's all so UNBERABLY CRINGY. MC is, of course, have personality of beaten dog, submisive, stupid. And romance is just... uuuh. How did you make original looks more mature and pleasant? It's to love-ru for God sake! Either way, that's just horrible.
I haven't seen a decently written and readable To Love Tu fic since forever, so 5 stars. Depends on how the story turns out, I may change it, but good job bro.
A troll fic, if you can bare with sassy system, unreasonable logic then you can go on read this fic.. ... ..... ... .. ............ ........
Slave of system ...............................................................................................................................................................................................................
One of the most unfunny ff’s out there. Author does a great job with creating scenarios and personalities but a very poor one with comedy. Mc constantly gets humiliated by the system’s punishments, and it is always so awkward to read. Wish the author would have focused more on romance/slice of life in which he has more talent.
Speach format: Ryoto: "Aah!" Without properly written dialogs I can't read it. Is it that hard to write like in books and not like a script for a movie?
*rant chapter 166* NOTE: "I'm not mad that mc did the unforgivable, I'm mad at the circumstances in which he did it, given that he had NO need to do such a thing" Facts: 1- MC had NO need to rush so much to make money, even if they didn't manage to get enough money to enter the academy in 3 months, they could always wait for the next period, TIME for them is not an issue. 2- MC could have used his abilities to make easy money. With his eyes, he could "LOOK" everything, and finding where the criminals have their money is easy for him, then he can just steal from them for example. 3-MC put his companion in mortal danger after his "hardest Choice" ßûllshîṭ. Now MC will be hunted down by nobles for his actions. To make it worse, his "contact" for the mission knows who he is and can sell that information to the noble for easy money. This directly puts MC's partner in mortal danger 4-MC now did something unforgivable that does not align with his morals compass and it was something that he shouldn't have done given the circumstances. So its completely out of character. Its like having batman kill criminals for no reason. Its not something he would do. MC literally did something unforgivable for money when he had no need to.
Srsly everything was fine until system showed up. But not this is a system its a talking one with stupid jokes. Btw when jokes are forced into novel like this its just shows authors inability to insert them in narrative.
mc is just a puppet to the system, its ridiculous hate this novel ..... ...................................................................
You really have a good way to destroy your novel, it was better if it remained in the world and continued with the classification of a slice of live and romantic, and also look useless sp value with the reward task silly
I'll be clear and direct, the fanfic in general is good and interesting, but the author always completely ruins things when he tries to put drama in the story. Basically everything but the drama is really well done and an 8/10, but when the author tries to create chapters focused on drama with the MC going through problems like depression, facing the past and etc the author spoils it so completely that I want to drop the fanfic. We recently had the author forcing the drama with MC making an extremely stupid and unnecessary decision that even in chapter 166 almost made me drop the fanfic. I honestly can't recommend this fanfic to new readers because despite being a fun and interesting read it comes along with some of the worst and most frustrating chapters to read I've ever seen in my 15 years as an otaku (ignoring truly rubbish stories where the author doesn't even try)
why is all fanfiction about toloveru all the MCs are naive whayyyyyy 🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅🦅
nice story but many powers ruin the plot, even the story is going in a strange direction since he went to Asssination classroom, the system with rewards and punishment is almost useless because besides the beginning he never loses and he just needs to get points free, the gatcha as an idea is worth it enough because most of the skills it has are not really random because it has OP skills and only useful, the author tries to make a character growth but the execution is very mild, there are also characters that spoil the plot like the system, track-kun, the sister of the system, an alien OP inserted at random and various characters, mc has no sense of belonging in the story because that there is or not it does not seem to change anything, so good story and good idea but bad executions in various parts of the plot, not only some characters also have different characters like lala because even if she looks dizzy she is not, she is a genius and very intelligent but she only behaves in a very funny way. do different but here it does not seem so and then other characters still good story I hope the author improves
What chapter do i start at to avoid all the unfunny comedy attempts and slave system Main character bs?.........................................
it was good until bleach arc started and everything went down hill from there mc takes a stupid decision in chapter 166.my respect for mc hit rock bottom for killing a innocent mother in front of her daughter for some money because he was poor.unnecessary drama.sad I enjoyed this novel a lot but i can't read it anymore.and I think by how the story goes mc is going to do it again.it was good till it lasted.it used to be my favourite novel now it's not.
Now that I reached 100th chapter it's time for author's review and shamless 5 star is mendatory. Firstly first 10 chapters or so aren't the greatest and I get. Probably the most people dropped around these chapters, lol, but in my humble opinion the quality goes up afterwards. You are probably wondering why they dropped so early on. Well... I commited a grave sin of writing annoying system because I wanted to write some character development and after 10th chapter it gets better or at least that's what people are saying. Secondly my writing format may not be for everyone so if you're not a fan of script format then save yourself some trouble and don't start reading it. Besides these two things iI think the story tunred out quite nice and if you also think so leave positive review.