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摘要
Jono is just an ordinary guy with ordinary life. But he died young because of pandemic. But when he's about to be judge by GOD, he's got a chance. But of course, just because you're reincarnated with some wishes, doesn't mean it will be a smooth road.
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This is my first time writing, and english is not my first language, so please understand if i made many mistakes.
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I don't own the characters in this story, even MC's appearance are not mine.
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As always happens when a MC joins the mugiwaras ... they follow the plot, they only intervene in fights and hardly change anything. Even if the MC has cheats, Luffy will always be stronger. One Piece is one of the few animes that gives fanfic authors a lot of freedom to write something new, but many just end up copying the original. I left 3 stars just to value the author's effort. (Google translate)
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I don't think this fanfic is to my liking but I don't think it's bad, the MC's personality is very nice, but I see no reason why the MC is weaker than Luffy simply because he is the captain, not always the strongest person is necessarily the leader of something depends a lot on the person’s charisma and we all know that luffy has plenty, so since he doesn’t want to make the MC stronger than Luffy because he doesn’t make them have the same strength and become a kind of rival friendly, because Zoro is not necessarily weaker than Luffy, nor did he leave the crew for that reason, besides the fact that reading a story that the MC is always behind a person is not for me. Other than that the fanfic is not bad so my 4 star rating.
there's nothing here, it's just original one piece+1 character (this ff's MC). MC's existence is like sakura from naruto (exist but useless). even with all the cheat he is still very dependant on luffy, i mean what the point of his existence if he is still got his ass saved by luffy every single time. he try to fight the bosses, got bitch slapped then say "if luffy's here he's gonna beat you" like some damsel, saved by luffy, then the story go like the original one piece.. reaaly? thats bullshit!!
What's the point of this MC, if Luffy is highlighted. Just rewatch One Piece series again rather than reading it🤣🤣. ∧,,∧ (´・ω・) ⊂ノ ニつ DIE!! （`(´ ノ Mate!!! |｜ ﾉ （_(＿)
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Honestly, just watch the anime or read the manga. This is not a fanfic of One Piece. This is literally just One Piece plus an inconsequential MC. Author didn't change anything at all. Sure the MC fights enemies, but that's it. The crew ain't any better because of him. None of the events nor it's consequences change. The MC might as well not have been there. I understand going with the plot. I even understand joining the strawhats, nothing wrong with that imo. And I never imagined I'd ever give a really low review on a novel(I'm pretty tolerant when it comes to these things). But blatantly copy pasting everything(except MC fights) that happens in the original is where I draw the line. So sorry, but Imma have to give this a low review.
Idk how to start it. I'd love so much about MC's attitude, he's a family man, and has integrity and principle. So it would be consistent. Damn it was so good that I thought I will be like MC if I was in the same circumstances. Emotionally, missing my family, and thinking like earthen people.
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Honestly this is probably perfect in my opinion. Some people may hate that he's weaker than Luffy but I'm really happy this is the case or he has no reason to be following his captain. He's strong but not overly so, as well as having the potential to surpass everyone. This premise I like. And from the charecter of the MC, it's also not bad. Although there could be a few things that's not to my taste, it's still a likable MC. I find that 80% of the fanfics I read have shitty personality so I'm relieved. I'm really looking forward to this so don't drop and carry on! 😁
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I read 12 chapters so I don’t know if it changed or not, but writing in the narrative way makes the story very boring, which prevents me from focusing on events
A is really disappointing this novel is not worth reading sorry ...........................................................................................................................................
its shit basically the mc is like a non existant one he is strong joined luffy crew but changed nothing and everything happened same as cannon so really just cannon from a different point of view point of view of a new character only thing is stability of updates
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The story is very good and I really like it, but unfortunately mc ..... damn I'm confused what to say and I wonder why this fanfic's rating is so high compared to other one piece fanfics, this carita only follows Canon's story, the author is not too creative and I feel sorry for one of the other fanfic writers on this stupid site
This is not FANFIC, this is SHIT the whole story same as manga only add one OC as MC. FANFIC made for different story route, like one piece universe 7 or 6 or 11. just like that. but if the story route and goal as manga why the hell you write the story. this is plagiat. SORRY
hello ... first of all the idea is good , update is good and character is good BUT .. why should i read it ? u r sticking to the original story .so what is there for me ?.. u should make ur own story in the world of 1 piece dont follow the original
story : not bad because its just like the canon duuh writing quality: the most accurate description i would give is half of you brain cells will die ** : for real author-san just get someone to edit your writing and you will be good to go like seriously dude....
Don't mind me! I just want to support myself. Like what a wise man said: "Support yourself before others support you." altough it's very late to do this now. Also, thank you for you who have supported me so far, and sorry for those who didn't really like my story, but hey, that life. Not everyone have the same taste on something