/ Fantasy / THE RETURN OF THE LUNA HEIRESS
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“We shall get married.” Aztec said to her with a firm tone.
Rhea held his eyes ignoring the feeling to glance at his lips.
“And what if I don’t want to.” She said.
He smirked and came foward. Her heart raced faster with his presence but she stood her ground.
“Then you shall be blamed for whatever happens to the pack.” He said and then he added. “Also, you can not say No to your Alpha.”
Rhea looked in to his eyes and she knew that he meant every word of what he said.
A pack in time of darkness needs the union of two unlikely people. An arrogant and strong Alpha and a pure, brave and beautiful Human. With different personalities but attraction to each other and a will to avenge the ones they lost to the dark war, they strive to take away the dark times of the twin packs.
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The story is nice. I love the begining and also the characters. Hope Rhea can escape her stepsisters and stepmother and also the Alpha would change his behaviour.
i think it's a good novel to read because the story concept is unique compare to other novels
The main ideas of the plot are quite promising and the FMC seems interesting so far. The pace of plot progression is also good despite only 12 chapters currently available; I feel like quite a lot has happened already, but not in an overwhelming way. In terms of improvements: - Much more attention is needed when proofreading and editing. There are frequent spelling and grammar mistakes that take away from the quality of the story. Grammarly or chatGPT can help a lot! - If the step family will continue to be antagonists for the FMC, they’d benefit from a bit more fleshing out so that they’re not just cardboard characters. Things to consider: reasons for the rivalry between the twins, more on how step mum met FMC’s father, whether the normal servants are treated as badly as FMC, etc.
only a couple of chapters in but i’m hooked by the cinderella origin story and hoping for a alpha aztec redemption arc 😮💨😮💨😮💨
It quite novel and interesting hope it will continue