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This Novel is Good Shiittt has a lot of potential.. Im just hoping for more chapters. MORE CHAPTER RELEASE PLSS. MORE CHAPTER RELEASE PLSS. MORE CHAPTER RELEASE PLSS.MORE CHAPTER RELEASE PLSS.MORE CHAPTER RELEASE PLSS.MORE CHAPTER RELEASE PLSS.MORE CHAPTER RELEASE PLSS.MORE CHAPTER RELEASE PLSS.MORE CHAPTER RELEASE PLSS.
I just finished binging this and I have a couple things to say. First of all: this is an amazing book and I really like what you’ve written so far. Secondly: the world is interesting, based on the history you gave it. The ****y tiny downside is the lack of originality in the names of the continent and the existing races, although admittedly, being original with races is quite hard nowadays since J.R.R. Tolkien. Thirdly: I recommend you to make your sentences a bit more interesting. You repeat his name a lot; Add did this, Add did that. It kinda reminds me of my first Latin text: Iupiter deus est. Iupiter pater est. Iupiter sedet in templo. It’s a bit ******, isn’t it. Especially the repeating names. Fourthly: You could also use shorter and longer sentences a bit better, because sometimes I read a piece of like fourty lines in which there were only three to four sentences. Fifthly: What i found a bit confusing, is how you kept saying ‘his level 5 strength was more than enough to deal with these vermin.’ But a few lines down we read that his strength was at 10. Perhaps you could alter it to ‘his 10 strength was more than enough to deal with these vermin.’ Sixthly and lastly: I quite like the information and history you give on his system-bought weapons. Keep it up!
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Según yo todo se va a la mierda en el capítulo 17 y en los 15 ya se notan los cambios de mierda en el sistem o sistema como le digan en tu pais
Really good read, the mc has an unusual background and is suited to this 'law of the jungle' world. This novel is like firearms + magic all in one novel (oh wait, it is). There is a little bit of comedy with the system's dialogue, making it worth reading. There are only a single small problem with this. How does someone who trained to be a soldier for his entire life (most of it) have time to play or remember games? Other than that, interesting novel!
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This is very promising. The only problem I see is that it may have been dropped from being written. The story needs time to understand. Some aspects won’t make sense at first but it is explained later. I wouldn’t recommend reading on this site though. LightNovel.org has double the chapters but even that sit is a bit outdated for this novel.
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First... the Mc is cold hearted and merciless soldier, he will do anything to achieve his goal, the system who assisting our Mc is OP yet Cheapskate at same time.... the dialogue between MC and System is getting better each chapter it became exchanging banter sometimes..... its still early but i rated it 4/5 the minus is lack of update a little spoiler.... at chaps 33 you will see another interesting side of our cold hearted MC c'mon guys it worth the shot
I really like this novel, hope the story continues! I got thru this novel in one night so the only thing missing is MORE CHAPTERS ;) Thanks for a good read dear Author!
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this novel has a promise to boot. it is easy to understand even for non service men and it also incorporates the game like interface which of course a good standpoint of the story which in my on opinion was a great addition. The MC is a dependent and reliable man he is non bs person when it comes to the actions.however, there are slight grammar mods that needs to be revisited esp.with the prepositions missing some letters. the character and world background is great but it is way too slow update.it make me kinda wondering what happen to author-san...please write as soon as you can(dozega)
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I can only say that was brilliant!!!!!!! and please add more chapters, definitely now one of my favourites. ....................................................... .................................................... .................................
The author has not able to update constantly...i wish he could update more....this must be revisited😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😶😑😑😑😑😑
I really love the character and the development of the story but sad to note not too many updates huh! This should be a very epic characterization and representation of most men fantasy where guns exist in the swords and magic world
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Pls update soon!! Cant wait to read next chapter... .................................................................................................
The story is nice, our mc is dope as hell that makes him a badass like a terminator. Lastlyi really enjoyed the story. btw when is the next chap?
the story has good potential but u should take care of xp calculations and dont include harem or romance at start pls or this novel will die young and i request more chapters regularly pls and thnx
Are you serious this is the most crappy novel i ever read the mc is a fucking veteran soldier and he acts like he is 9 he got 1k points and a pistol costs 1k points now tell me way he bought fucking skills that he already learned and trained as a soldier knife mastery, unharmed mastary fucking shooting mastery wtf he needs this skills if he is a fucking veteran soldier i cant believe how stupid this is and please tell me how does 1 lvl get you 1 stat point but if you put it in a attribute you only get a increase of 0.1 do you not understand math if he lvl to lvl one fucking hundred(100) he will only get increase of 20 stats pls tell me how will he ever become strong if he is only got 10 strength and maybe 5 agility and 5 endurance he is only 10 times stronger then NORMAL HUMAN train soldier like him in his past life probably had 2 pointa in every stat so tell me how the f will he ever get stong (if he gets attack by people from his past lofe he would get killed like a chicken because even though he is 5 times faster he is not faster then bullet or even a arrow and his fucking lvl 100)if he is lvling up he needs to be lvl 500 000 to even think to fight a dragon??? Last chapter i saw he only lvl 8 and only 1.1 in strength ?? It would be better if he trained untill he was strong as a normal human then this and you telling me there is fucking magic in this world mc is crap and the system is crap you would expect he could summon soldiers and thanks and other **** but noooooo **** this im out sont read this its waist of time only thing that was good was the grammar Sorry for my bad english author you need to fix loot of things in your novel..
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