摘要
What does being a mage best described?
Could you call them weird and eccentric because of their reclusive nature? Or could you call them fanatics due to their obsession with magic?
Does anyone know the purpose of their existence when no one even knows whether they existed to protect or to bring chaos around the world?
This existential question remained unanswered until a certain mage had caused huge waves time and time again in the virtual reality game called [ Dystopia ].
He caused uproar wherever he goes, he violently broke through all of his obstacles until he was ultimately recognized by the world for his monstrous capability as a mage.
That certain mage was known for his terrifying destructive abilities, it was also said that he had an unbreakable barrier that protects him from any attacks.
Since then, the Mage class was finally recognized by the public because of that certain Mage's astonishing achievements.
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Chapter Releases:
No Chapter Release (Indefinite Hiatus) (Rewriting chapters)
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Volumes:
Volume 1: A New World ( Completed )
Volume 2: The Goblin Castle ( Ongoing )
Volume 3: City Tournament ( Upcoming )
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Cover Credits: League of Legends ( Riot Inc. )
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During the first chapters I really felt that this is gonna be a really interesting story. But there are so many things I really have trouble to understand. 1. The author constantly jumps between scenes often without any intention of coming back to it. 2. In 41 chapters tons of ppl got introduced only to be completely left behind without further attention. 3. The reasoning and the hole chapter with Undine is imo terrible, especially when it comes to reasoning and behaviour of characters. 4. The storyline is in complete chaos because nothing is explained(except for some game mechanics), I can't even try to judge the world background because nothing is explained be it about the game world or the real world. The reader is constantly kept in the dark. While I think this could be a really good story, the behaviour of almost all characters feel childish and immature. For example Qianna(not sure about her name, the girl our MC saved from Aaron) was stronger than Aaron but after their first fight she never tried to get rid of him when he repeatedly attacked the MC. The only thing she'd did was watching and calling of "Watch out!". The list of unreasonable behaviour goes on and on and I don't understand why it is written like that. It takes away a characters credibility and makes it look laughable.
This book can be summed up in two words: wasted potential. You can feel that the author has a feel for the world he created and its background, but the info dump makes the story unreadable. Instead of discovering the world at the same time as the main character, we get random chapters of info dump about something completely unrelated. Even action scenes full of tension are simply cut to make place for an explanation of the background of a random dead race or character that you won’t give a f about in a couple chapters. Yeah, so I tried to keep going and to hope that the info dump would stop at some point to focus on the story, but it hasn’t. So try it out if you don’t mind a slow paced story that doesnt follow a linear pespective.
The work needs to be proofread. It's readable but there's a lot of run on sentences. Also some thoughts needs to be organised. Simple errors can be avoided and I understand that english is not the first language of the author. This work needs polishing and I hope it can shine brighter in the future.
You really need to work your focus. Dont jump around so suddenly and explain about other thing in the midst of something. Man, i skipped most of the chapter when you suddenly explaining about those unrelated people like when you explain about the background of a shopkeeper. I mean who care about what happened with the shopkeeper or story of some spirits who take about 2 or more chapter and then disappear into the coffin. Cmon work your focus and do the plot properly, 60 chapter wasted without proper introduction and you want to go premium? Really? What are you supposed to feed your reader? Info dump?
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Such an amazing and great novel of yours Author. I can't deny the fact that this one is interesting and at the same time a refreshing story for readers. Overall, it's an engaging, great story. Keep up the good work, Author.
First of all, that was a refreshing introduction. A lot of readers know about VR game and it would be good to read another work of a potential star 😉 The narration and description are clean and brief. Easy to understand. Easy to read. More updates!!!
Ooo I love a good mage book and this one seems interesting, I want to see what else the author does with this world. the story looks promising so you should defiantly check it out
A VR Game! A Mage! Finally, Beautiful Characters!! Author tried to elaborate the story in a way that readers could understand, and although I could see some mistakes, it's still kept at bare minimum. Best Wishes to Author! 💓
Wait, I forgot to do the review for reading all the chapters hahaha, let me tell you, it hooks me up since the first chapter! Sometimes I even forgot to leave a chapter or paragraph comments, I can even read it again and leave it, just in case... I'll continue reading, I like the steady space that you give to your writing, and the development is great! Keep going my dear Author! I'll cheer you up!
Wholesome chapters, filled with details as a game should look like. It is as if reading a game script. The author really spent a lot of time and effort on it. I love gaming and so this book gets a 5 star from me. Hope you keep up the good work author-san.
It's a nice gaming plot. I can see its potential. Here's 5 stars to motivate the author to write more....
It's a wizad! It's a plane! No! It's a mage! And their galaxy perhaps? This is a review. A 5 star review. Doesn't have much meaning. Maybe 5 exp? That's about it. :D
Kudos to author-kun for making this book. The video game like system was totally well written and goes smoothly within the flow of the story and scenes. Also, I learned new things to this great novel in which made me recommend it to others. Please keep up the amazing work👌
I read up to chapter 60. There are so many chapters about other characters. Background times ten. Not much was stated about the main character. He was sick because his mom got poisoned. He ran away and they found him (or so they thought). Then there are lik 51 chapters about he side characters. The premise is somewhat interesting but the lack of focus makes this horrible.
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I would love to give it a better review but having 35 chapters of nothing but info dumps before he actually gets his first class is just too much.
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A not-so shameless author review here! Let's go straight to the point, first of all, the book is filled with info dumps, that much I can say but the premium chaps have so much lesser than the free ones, you can say that it's some kind of growth in my part as an author. Second, I made a huge blunder of including 20+ chaps of backstory on the main storyline, I know, it ruined the reader's immersive experience with the MC in the story, and I am truly apologetic for that as I indeed regret doing such a thing, if only I could go back in time then I would've uploaded them on a separate volume instead, what a pity! Third, as of now, I am still working to the best of my abilities to improve myself as an author and I think you would be able to see these improvements if you read on? Not entirely sure though, hehe. Finally, the author is super lazy and often procrastinates in socmed to relieve boredom and avoid their writing responsibilities, so if you happen to have socmeds as well, why not motivate(scold) me there by dm'ing one of my accounts? That's all, take care and happy reading!