/ Fantasy / The Legend Of Nobody(Spirity)
摘要
Marcus Wayne an unassuming orphan who was abused in his home and school. but after crossing all the hurdles and becoming an adult. he vied for his freedom from his abusive relatives and lifeless orphanages and finally achieved it when he turned 18. with new hopes over life, he started his university education .but the world had something else in store for him. he died in an accident without even having any last thoughts.
here comes the interesting part.
he is transmigrated into a world of wonders. where almost everything appears to be within your reach if you work hard enough. love, power, money, strength, land, treasures everything. but these are the things that normal minded people search for but for Marcus, all he wants is freedom, happiness and satisfaction with whatever he does. And to achieve them he will go to whatever lengths he has to go and take whatever road he has to take. all he wants, in the end, is to live a life without regrets even if it means dying.
Note: rookie author here, please leave your criticism. It helps me a lot to catch my mistakes
And I don't own the cover. if it is yours and you feel it as eyesore I will gladly remove it
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This is a good attempt, and I can tell that there is effort in telling the story of transmigration. With better proofreading to catch tense changes, grammatical mistakes and better pacing, this could well be a good story that can capture the attention and hearts of readers. Don't give up! I have left some tips in the comments for you to consider. Good luck!
The picture for a cover page is very original. I hope you will make a great cover page with it. The plot is interesting and your characters also. Well done! Good luck with the contest!
The novel was wholesome the writing style was what attracted me the most, the character had nice contrast, overall it was good, but if the writer improves few things like punctuation, typography but they aren't making any high impact so 5 stars for the author
classic but ,intsresting premise. a bit wordy in dialogues. but overall considering that you are a rookie author it is okay. grammer should be rectified.
AUTHOR HERE. Thank you for your support guys!!!!!!!!! Feeling good after reading positive responses. I was afraid of how it goes. I got my motivation to brush up my grammar knowledge from your reviews. Thank you all.
Wow! Just great story! It's a very different kind of story. I know I am also amateur but I will suggest you to do some editing. And for giving it a cool look you should change your book cover. Unless, it's a great story I have never seen before. Keep it up and don't you dare to drop it. Fighting!
Wow! This is related to the modern world, not mentioning the greed for power, love, wealth, and connections. To be honest, I can see this novel of yours as one of many doors of opportunities. The MC is quite matured enough for his density and quest. Good luck and keep up the good work, Author.
May The Force Be With Me....................................................................................................................
Hi! This is kerawood, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail. This contest is free entry.
REVIEW Narration: Decent and immersive Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed Character development: Nice and steady Character design: Outstanding Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike Pacing: Not fast nor too slow Writing quality: Magnificent Execution of the Genre: Good pitch Story potential: High Updating Stability: Steady MESSAGE I am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean) 😉 Advice Please improve author, ❤️ I left advices on the novel and hope it will be followed. I started with such mistakes but I want to improve so I take heed to the advices. I hope you too 🙏