/ Fantasy / THE FANTASY LAND
摘要
3 friends aged over 18 find a secretively path which is a secret path/tunnel to a magical land where imaginary animals live, on a beautiful scenario.They found some extraordinary things they have never heard or seen or thought about but one day an unexpected thing came up.
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6評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
You are creative! 🌺 but i do hope you retained the paragraph style than the scripted one~ 🌻 I'm rooting for you, though! 🌼 Continue with your self-improvement and reach the greater heights in being a writer! 💐💐💐 Congratulations on getting this far and continue doing what you love! 🌷
The plot line seems promising, but there are few things to fix, like punctuations and spacing. The story has the potential to reach more and more readers. Keep up with the good work author.
your story is amazing and catchy, just need some grammatical corrections, otherwise it's all good. glad to see that the author is improving her writing style in advanced chapters.
the fantasy land had a good story line, You just have to improve the dialogue, punctuation and sentence separations in paragraphs, also don't include emojis in chapters, the rest, I like it. keep going and fighting!! [img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend]
Good story writing, but not good looking chapter names. Change the titles. Characters are good. Keep word limit of chapters properly. Do your school homework properly😅
The story is fine, I suggest writing the chapters neatly: fix the grammar and punctuation, the number of words per chapter should be precise and the conversations; make it straight to the point and useful. I hope my review helps and motivates you to write at your best! Good luck, Jagriti! You can do this! I'll continue reading your masterpiece 😊