This story was interesting to read - I really like the introduction.
It was really effective how you described the boy as a 'shadow' as it let the audience guess at its identity.
I really like the imagery and mood that was created.
There are a few typos and a few errors regarding punctuation however they don't affect the quality of the story.
I like the way you described a particular scene in chapter 2 (the one after the prologue) where the man named Fredrick Cypes 'could practically smell the boy's unease'.
The story is easy to understand and the protagonist's situation (of being poor) is described well.
Good job.
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This story was interesting to read - I really like the introduction. It was really effective how you described the boy as a 'shadow' as it let the audience guess at its identity. I really like the imagery and mood that was created. There are a few typos and a few errors regarding punctuation however they don't affect the quality of the story. I like the way you described a particular scene in chapter 2 (the one after the prologue) where the man named Fredrick Cypes 'could practically smell the boy's unease'. The story is easy to understand and the protagonist's situation (of being poor) is described well. Good job.
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