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Entry for #webnovelspirityawards2021
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It was the first VRMMORPG that successfully operated in the other world which was mostly known as the "VR World." It allowed the people to restarts their life to could escape from the inevitable change of the real world.
"Yumiko Gritz" our protagonist that suffered from Paraplegia after he fought in the Taekwondo World Cup. His opponent "Drake" Schemed to brutally assault him, so he couldn't back again inside the ring.
Her sister "Amiya Gritz" his a supportive sister also that the person who Introduced a game to him Where he could use his limbs without any problems.
Living in another world beyond your expectations, it possible to change your perception in the real world? Let's join in my journey to become the greatest adventurer in the VR World.
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VR World, Solo-Adventurer, War, Romance, Dungeon, Monsters, Romance?, Magic world.
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Hi, I'm the author of the adventurer system! Also, this is a shameless review. first of all, I don't have much vocabulary so some words are repeated, but I guarantee you that I already made each arc of the story. I admitted that there are some grammatical issues, but don't blame me English is not my native language hahaha! I will try to fix it as soon as possible. About Drake? All question has the answer, so stay tuned. To the readers, read my work I hope you enjoy it, I'm really glad this is the reason why I keep writing, thank you!
This is the first time I've read this type of novel. Ans I'm telling y'all, give this book a try. It won't disappoint you. I love the male lead, he never quits.
This story is hurt by poor grammar. There is a kernal of something interesting underneath, but it is difficult to get at it. The character seems very one-dimensional, so we're not really rooting for him so much as just sitting back and watching.
First of all, I am not a pro at making reviews 2nd It's my opinion and what I think about it. 3rd I don't care if anyone will be offended by this. and 4th I read up to chapter 9 The story has good potential but grammar has problems, the systems (power level, the name color) is not good (maybe gets better later), plot armor is thick, I think the MC is dumb and contradicts himself. Over all good but the mc to cliche for me and the grammar and systems need polishing.
I read up to chapter 40 and what I can say is that there are very absurd elements in this novel. The event that leaves Mc paraplegic can easily be described as an assassination attempt and the consequences for the villain who did it are not discussed later. The Mc doesn't know about the game's existence when he gets his virtual helmet, and the sister who has taken care of him for 4 years (who is also a player) is another item without explanation. The possibility of bringing something from the game to the real world (and the Mc not knowing the game) leaves me perplexed. The Mc is unable to join the game for 2 days to escape problems and his not doing ANY research on the rules of the game during this period is proof of his foolishness. I'm honestly going to drop this novel because this level of nonsense is too big for me. Translated by GT
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I am very pleased to see such an amazing novel! It was so good that I didn't know that I have already read a few chapters! The characters were very lifelike and realistic. With emotions to let us see their character. The plot was steadily building up and it was nice! The worldbuilding was vast and detailed. I like how you explain the nooks and crannies in your craft. Overall, It was easy to get lost in your novel as it was very immersive! I will wait for your work to reach a million views and that will be pleasing to the eyes! Kudos and good luck! Peace ✌️
It starts with the cliché of someone hurting him and he can't do anything... are you dirty? Can such a wound be considered an attempted murder, and the police or the government do nothing? says he barely has money when he could have sued both the other guy's master and the one who attacked him. and then the cliché of playing the game without knowing what to do that his sister gave him starts, I've read many with the same script (literally the same) congratulations for your creativity
You need to improve your grammar as it really ruins the story. The character is way too open with his abilities and your transitions aren't the smoothest. The story is alright but you should probably lay out more information about the current world the MC lives in.
Very nice! The chapters are nice and long, and full of great descriptive detail that makes this story a pleasure to read. I love the plot, especially with the idea of restarting a life after a tragedy has occurred. The characters are well fleshed out, though I would maybe like to see a bit more detail in their personality here and there. I think the one thing the author needs to work on is being careful not to switch tenses. There were several occasions that the tenses shifted, and a few grammatical errors, but these can easily be fixed. Great work author
Same clinche poor Mc's family, struggling mc and his sister. Mc tries to give his sister a good life. But I got enough with it. The starting of the story is so boring. You could have cut that part but you still made the tragic story that was not logical for me. Sorry, I don't want to know further.
Honestly the story is very interesting, but the grammar is soooo bad it is very hard to read in the beginning chapters you can hardly understand what is going on because of the grammar but it can be fixed if the author decides to do so [img=faceslap]
The story starts strongly with a believable character suffering from an unjust trauma. It's an excellent setting for a weak-to-strong character. The author has a great imagination, give it a try!
Starting Off the grammar Is quite poor with random missing words and sentences that make zero sense to native English speakers. The world background is quite poor with the MC essentially having been attempted murdered but seems nothing happened to that person And MC doesn’t sue or anything. There is no real reason given in the game why the AI decided to skip steps beyond O well. Then when set in the fighting zone MC goes from running and struggling with a single mob to somehow being able to nuke 13 after a single level gain with the fight magically just being complete. The plot armor here would make a nuclear superpower scared to attack. It makes no sense and this ruins the story.
Only got a few chapters in so the high ratings on updating stability and world background are just me giving author the benefit of the doubt. Concept itself, while not necessarily original, is good. But 1) the grammar and writing style (author "mysteriously" leaving out stuff in an to me really annoying way, like there is no motivation for stuff more then whether it is convenient for author or not) are horrible. And 2) characters feel really flat, no realistic emotions from mc. I would give it another try if it was editet to flow better though.
The Story has potential, but the Characters and poorly written, alongside the World Background. Updates are decent and the Writing Quality is the ugh. I'm not good with Grammar myself but your story is full of writing mistakes and jumbled words like for example "I went the to shop" I noticed that a lot where you have 2 words mixed together. Final Review: 3.2 Star
Me personally, I love systems as they bring you into the video game-like world and takes you away from reality. As of chapter for it's been a good read with a likable male lead. Certainly a story for one to kick back on a Friday afternoon and enjoy. I'll update more as I read more but so far, keep up the great work, writer!
Coool Story. First thing first... I love all the works based on virtual games and sometimes I wish to be in one of them. Anyway about this work, I love it. Everything seems awesome, world development - well planned, characters design and development - superb quality, storyline - A1 and writing quality - gooood and since the author is updating this story quite regularly so I believe I'll not have to wait two or three to get updates and that is just awesome. Since this story is in sprity I wish author wins it and for that I'll be quite happy to help him. Well done author.
I'd like how the story goes on, the character development and the world building, and it always made me excited what will happen next. Thanks Author keep it up! we are always here your reader to support you!!!!! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]