/ Anime & Comics / The 12 eyes Within The Cultivation World
摘要
Everyone knows of the 6 eyes, powerful eyes which turn one mind into a super computer, giving them a nearly unlimited amount of energy due to how little energy they waste compared to the amount of energy they regain, the power to be pretty much all-seeing, and the list goes on... so the fuck is the 12 eyes? well, its my creations.
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The story is good. I was waiting for a Gojo powerwanking fic for some time now. But the mistakes in the Grammers made my eyes bleed. A bit of advice: Use "Grammerly".
Seeing so many 5 star reviews i knew i had to step in, looks like people here havent read enough good quality stuff to rate this sh** 😒😒😏
Good concept but needs editing. Readable but due to grammar errors, the flow of the narrative is distorted and a bit annoying for me. I suggest you look for an editor to help you out.Over all, still a good concept for a fanfiction and I would like to read an edited version of it.
a pretty good story, the only problem is the grammar it makes it almost unreadable
The title should 12 reasons to not read this bullshit cultivators story. 🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡 🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡 🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡🫡
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will write a proper review after my question is answered. Will the be yuri in this not a fan of it?
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Talk about terrible pacing. Chapter 3 was pretty unbearable to read. Three chapters in MC goes to what the previous body thought was a hidden expert, proceeds to tell her of the changes in his body/getting his talent back. She ambushes him, he returns her back to his home and while he has the upper hand he asks her to be a loyal subject and teach him, which as far as I've read, cultivation techniques don't really work for him and comprehension is the best tool to use to train. So why when you've transmigrated from a modern society and after years(?) of studying and grabbing a hold of six eyes does he need a teacher from a cultivation world where they're understanding of space is just mumbo jumbo? Then of course it's revealed the hidden expert is from another universe that's coming in to this universe to steal resources. And by the oaths that they made, it looks like he's being dragged into this inter-universe war that just started for whatever reason. TLDR: Pacing sucks, too many elements introduced that are as silly as the decisions of the MC.