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I am now Rewriting this as before I had no idea what I wanted to do with the story now I do and I have planned it out sorry and I will try and improve the quality of each chapter starting from chapter 1
[ I don't own the characters]
[I also don't own the cover picture ]
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I'm pretty bad at writing and I'm doing this for fun so dont expect much. I'm trying to not skip over the emotions as cringe as they maybe. And when I'm writing the mc or any character il atleast put in some thought about what I or said character would do in the situation to try and make it feel more natural. and the amount of wiki pages I've read is kinda insane at this point
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Great job with the story so far. Background info for the MC is very interesting to me, as a fan of Youjo Senki. The biggest issue with this story at the moment is simply the lack of story development, but pacing seems good so I don't think it will be a problem once more chapters are posted. Chapters are a bit heavy on info but honestly, that is to be expected at the beginning of an Overlord fanfic starting within YGGDRASIL. Overall, I believe the story is coming along nicely. I will be sure to post a more conclusive review once there are more chapters posted. ... ... ...
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Overall very nice! Like you've said before, your grammar isn't perfect, but everything else more than make up for it
I currently am loving the story the dialogues done well the paceing is good and its quite funny to me that i found this story because the other liked one of my coments.